江蘇省高考英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)第23講-書面表達(dá)寫作技巧指導(dǎo)(一)課件復(fù)習(xí)過程

江蘇省高考英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)第23講-書面表達(dá)寫作技巧指導(dǎo)(一)課件Clothesmaketheman.人要衣裝，佛要金裝。Beautyisthecombinationofthree-tenthsofgiftandseven-tenthsofgrooming.三分長相，七分打扮。

如何使文章起來“靚”

技巧1.使用較高級的詞匯3.使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞2.使用較豐富的句式abundantsentencepatternsproperconjunctionsadvancedwordsandphrases4合理添加句子一、善用高級詞匯Whichisbetter?

1周末我們會有很多作業(yè)要做。A.Wehaveendlesshomeworktodoattheweekend.B.Wehavealotofhomeworktodoattheweekend.2在我所有的老師里,毛老師給我留下了很深的印象。A.Ofallmyteachers,IstillrememberMr.Mao.B.Ofallmyteachers,Mr.Maogavemethedeepestimpression.3、

高級培訓(xùn)班結(jié)束后回到家，他的妻子感到精疲力盡。A.Hiswifecamebackhomeaftertheadvancedtrainingclass,feelingverytired.B.Hiswifecamebackhomeaftertheadvancedtrainingclass,feelingveryexhausted.4、他沒聽我課上講的東西。A.HeturnedadeafeartowhatIsaidintheclass.B.Hedidn’tlistentowhatIsaidintheclass.→

ontheway/aroundthecorner.

Theweekendiscoming.

Nowadays,peoplethinkeducationisvery

important.→

beofgreatimportance/significanceattachgreatimportanceto

Becausetheweatherwasgood,ourjourneywascomfortable.Thankstothegoodweather，…Thestudentsthereneedn’tpayfortheirbooks.Booksarefreeofchargeforthestudentsthere.Youcanfindmyhouseeasily.You’llhavenotrouble\difficultyfindingmyhouse.

Ihadagoodidea.Agoodideaoccurredto/struck/cametome.Icameupwithagoodidea.use“complicated/advancedwords”

首先_____________起初_____________第一次___________

某人第一次做某事時____________在開始的時候__________

同時____________過了一會____________從那時起____________

直到現(xiàn)在____________不久以后__________

之后不久____________________隨著時間的流逝_____________________

firstofall/tobeginwithforthefirsttimethefirsttime+句子uptonowbeforelongsincethen/fromthenoninthebeginning/atthebeginningof…meanwhile/atthesametimeafterawhileatfirstIt’snotlongbefore...Astimegoesby,就我而言_____________眾所周知___________正如這樣的情況…

________另外,此外___________更糟/嚴(yán)重的是___________更重要的是____________結(jié)果_____________我想_____________也就是說___________說實話_____________asfarasIamconcernedAsweallknow/AsisknowntoallAsisthecasebesides/what’smore/moreoverwhat’sworse/moreseriousAboveallasaresult/thereforeItoccurredtomethat…that’stosay/inotherwordstobefrank/totellthetruth就像…________就是因為…__________不只是因為…__________或多或少_____________遲早____________為……樹立榜樣________________代表某人_______________一方面…另一方面____________

相反的____________

總之____________

最后但同等重要____________比如____________

如下____________想當(dāng)然地認(rèn)為____________justlike…justbecausenotjustbecausemoreorlesssetagoodexampleto…soonerorlaterrepresent(v.)sb/onbehalfofsb(介短)foronething…foranotheronthecontrary/Insteadinconclusion/inshort/inbriefasfollowsforexample/take…forexamplelastbutnotleasttakeitforgrantedthat…位于…____________占地……____________有…年歷史____________有…人口_______________________享有…的美譽______________

考取…大學(xué)______________出國深造_________________他是…的驕傲___________被授予/被認(rèn)為是..________________coveranareaof…own/haveahistoryof…yearshaveapopulationof+數(shù)字enjoythereputationof…beadmittedto…universitygoabroadforfurtherstudiesHeistheprideof…behonored/consideredasbelocatedin…根據(jù)我個人經(jīng)驗____________與…息息相關(guān)____________在這信息時代_______________________鑒于社會實際的需要____________事實上______________

我們有理由相信______________然而，很可惜的是______________accordingtomypersonalexperiencebecloselyrelatedtointheageofinformation(andcommunication)intheviewofthepracticalneedofsocietyinfact/asamatteroffactWehavereasonstobelievethat…However,it’sapitythat請加上恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞1）Wecangodowntownanddosomeshopping.__________,wecanpayavisittosomeplacesofinterest.2）Isharedthecostofthegaswithmyfriends.___________,Isaved$80.3）Eatingsugarisbadforourteeth.___________,itmaymakeusfat.InadditionAsaresultWhat’sworse使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞Rewritethesentences

1.Theyarrivedattheschool.Theyfeltthehappyatmosphere.

2.Iwillbegivenanotherchance.Iwillsucceed.3.Hewantstoimprovehis

English.Hestudieshard.方法1.使用從句或非謂語動詞使句子高檔Whentheyarrivedattheschool,theyfeltthehappyatmosphere.Arrivingattheschool,theyfeltthehappyatmosphere.IfIamgivenanotherchance,Iwillsucceed.Givenanotherchance,Iwillsucceed.

InordertoimprovehisEnglish,hestudieshard.二、善用高檔句式Manyboyslearntosmoke.Itdoesharmtotheirhealth.→Manyboyslearntosmoke,

whichdoesharmtotheirhealth.Themealwasverynice.Weallenjoyeditverymuch.→Themealwassonicethatweallenjoyeditverymuch.Shewalkedoutoftheroom.Manystudentsfollowedher.→Followedbymanystudents,shewalkedoutoftheroom.Whenheheardthegoodnews,heburstintotears.

HearingWhenitiscomparedwithothercartoons,

TheWolfandtheSheepismoreinteresting.C2.Hewentthereyesterday.(強調(diào))→Hedidgothereyesterday.3.Topreventthepollutionisveryimportant.（感嘆句）

→Howimportantitistopreventthepollution!

1.Thechildrenwon’tcomehomeuntil5pm..(強調(diào))→Itis

notuntil5pm.

thatthechildrenwillcomehome.方法2.巧用倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)增強句子的表現(xiàn)力1.Hedidn’trealizehisfoolishnessuntilhereturnedhome.Notuntil2.Wecansavetheearthbychangingthewaywelive.

Only

3.Heiscleverbuthedoesnotworkhard.

as/though4.Theclocktowerstandsontheothersideofthestreet.

OntheothersideofthestreetCompletethesentences

hereturnedhomedidherealizehisfoolishness.bychangingthewaywelivecanwesavetheearth.Clever

heis,hedoesnotworkhard.standstheclocktower.

倒裝是一種簡單易行提亮句子的方法。Thechildrenwon’tcomehomeuntilitisdark.→

Notuntil

itisdark

willthechildrencomehome.YoucanimproveyourEnglishonlyinthisway.→

Onlyinthisway

canyouimproveyourEnglish.Althoughheisachild,hecanmanageit.→

Childasheis,hecanmanageit.

在文章中設(shè)計雙重否定的句子，就變成了亮點句，起到強調(diào)作用?！?/p>

Icouldn’thavemadesomuchprogressinEnglishwithouthishelp.

Thepostmanneverfailstocomeontimeeveryday.

Thepostmancomesontimeeveryday.IhavemadegreatprogressinEnglishwithhishelp.適當(dāng)使用被動語態(tài)，會呈現(xiàn)句型的變化，使句子表達(dá)地道豐富。同學(xué)們在這個問題上觀點不同。Studentshavedifferentopinionsonthisquestion.Opinionsaredividedonthisquestion.主動不如被動巧學(xué)會使用with結(jié)構(gòu)With+賓語+adj.adv.prep.--phrasetododoingdone1)她睡著了，燈還亮著。Shefellasleep______________________.2)種了很多花，我們學(xué)校呈現(xiàn)出新的面貌。

________________________，ourschooltookonanewlook.3)不要滿嘴巴食物說話。Don’tspeak_________________________.4)由于無事可做，我就看了一部電影。_________________

,Isawamovie.

Withmanyflowersplanted

withyourmouthfull

Withnothingtodo

withthelighton當(dāng)前，不斷增加的交通事故已引起人們的廣泛關(guān)注。Currently,thereisawidespreadconcernoverincreasingtrafficaccidents.現(xiàn)在越來越多的人正在逐漸意識到________________

如上所述，我們不難得出結(jié)論____________

它讓我很清楚地意識到_________________Nowpeopleingrowingnumbersarecomingtorealizethat…Fromwhathasbeenmentionedabove,wemaysafelydrawtheconclusionthat…Ithasmademewellawarethat…此外，我們不應(yīng)忽視…______________不用說______________不可否認(rèn)這個事實______________我深信______________…的主要原因是…Besides,weshouldn’tneglectthat…Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…There’snodenyingthefactthat…Iamgreatlyconvincedthat…Themainreasonwhy…isthat…沒有什么比…更重要了_________________________________如果我們能夠做到如上所述，毫無疑問…____________________________我們絕對不能_____________我們應(yīng)該不遺余力的美化我們的環(huán)境__________________________Nothingismoreimportantthan…Ifwecandoasmentionedabove,therecanbenodoubtthat…Onnoaccountcanwe…Weshouldsparenoefforttobeautifyourenvironment.方法3.嘗試多樣化表達(dá)方式

Inrecentyears,Beijinghasbeenadvancingveryfast.Allthesemakepeople’slivesconvenient,pleasantandcolorful._____________________________________________which_____________________________________Withthedevelopmentof________________________________________________________________________

_______________________so___that________________________________________________Inrecentyears,Beijinghasbeenadvancingveryfast,makespeople’slivesconvenient,pleasant…

Beijing,people’slivesarebecomingmoreandmoreconvenient,pleasantandcolorful.Nowadays,Beijingisdevelopingfastpeople’slivesaregettingmoreconvenient,pleasantandcolorful.Thoughheiswealthy,heworkshard.Wealthyasheis,heworkshard.Inspiteof/Despitehiswealth,heworkshard.Hedidn’tgetupuntil7o’clock.Itwasnotuntil7o’clockthathegotup.Notuntil7o’clockdidhegetup.一、善用高級詞匯二、善用高檔句式使用從句或非謂語動詞使句子高檔。巧用倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)增強句子的表現(xiàn)力。

嘗試多樣化表達(dá)方式。如何在內(nèi)容上言之有物？（一）附加成分作解釋說明1、這樣更方便照顧父母。拓展：因為父母越來越年邁。

原因

astheyaregettingolderandolder.

2、因廣告過多，影片放映晚點。拓展：這導(dǎo)致觀眾不耐煩甚至惱火。后果

whichmadeaudienceimpatientandsomeofthemevenannoyed.makingaudienceimpatientandsomeofthemevenannoyed.ItwillbemuchmoreconvenienttolookafteryourparentsThereweresomanyadvertisementsthattheydelayedthetimeofshowingthefilm,三、善于合理添加句子條件

3.安全出口（exit）標(biāo)志不明，存在安全隱患(potentialhazard）。

拓展：萬一遇到危險，觀眾難以逃脫。Incaseofdanger,itisdifficultfortheaudiencetoescape.Theexitisnotclear,sotherewillbepotentialhazard.方法——添加與所給信息有關(guān)的前因后果及條件，目的等內(nèi)容（一）附加成分作解釋說明(1)表達(dá)不同原因的概括語Thereareseveralreasonsforthis.Thereasonsareasfollows.Thereasonfor…isthat…Thereasonwhy…isthat(2)表示無需說明的事實的概括語：Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…It’sneedlesstosaythat…Needlesstosay,…It’sobviousthat…（二）根據(jù)話題加諺語(Proverb)1、我們應(yīng)該集中注意力于學(xué)習(xí)。Weshouldfocusourmindonourstudies.Asthesayinggoes,“

.”Weshouldfocusourmindonourstudies...怎么添加諺語？方法——添加與所給信息或話題有關(guān)的諺語或俗語。Nopains,nogains2、鍛煉對學(xué)生有好處。Itisgoodforusstudentstotakeexercise..Asthesayinggoes,“AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.”Itisgoodforusstudentstotakeexercise.3、我們應(yīng)該充分利用時間了。Itishightimeforustomakegooduseoftime.Asthesayinggoes,

Itishightimeforustomakegooduseoftime.“Timeandtidewaitfor

noman.”Striketheironwhileitishot.

趁熱打鐵。Thinktwicebeforeyoudo.

三思而后行。Practicemakesperfect.

熟能生巧。Abirdinthehandisworthtwointhebush.

一鳥在手勝過雙鳥在林。WheninRoman,doastheRomansdo.

入鄉(xiāng)隨俗。

常用諺語(Proverb)Doitnow.

機(jī)不可失，時不再來。Failureisthemotherofsuccess.

失敗是成功之母。Itisnousecryingoverspiltmilk.

覆水難收。Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.一天一個蘋果，醫(yī)生遠(yuǎn)離我。AllroadsleadtoRome.條條大路通羅馬。常用諺語(Proverb)青少年應(yīng)盡我們所能保護(hù)環(huán)境拯救地球Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.

Forexample,wecanuserecyclablebagsinsteadofplasticbags,refusetousesingle-useproducts,plantmoretreesandsavewaterandenergy.（三）舉例說明珍惜每一滴水Therefore,weshouldnolongerbeindifferentaboutthis.Toprotectourvaluablewaterresources,weshouldcallonpeopletocherisheverydropofwater.Otherwise,maybethelastdropsofwaterwillbeourtears.

Asmiddleschoolstudents,wealsohaveaparttoplay.Doremember:wearenotsavingwater,wearesavingourownlife.Witheveryonedoinghisbit,wecanmakeadifference.（四）結(jié)尾提出倡議或號召Asstudents,weshouldstartfromourselves.HereI’dliketoremindmyfriendtotaketheleadinprotectingtheenvironment.Witheveryonedoinghisbit,wecanchangethepresentsituation.

參加俱樂部或活動Don’thesitate.Itwillbegreatfun!Don’twait.Joinusnow!Sinceithassomanybenefits,whatareyouwaitingfor?Starttojoinusnow!保護(hù)環(huán)境如何在內(nèi)容上言之有物？１.附加成分作解釋說明

２.加諺語(Proverb)３.舉例說明

４.結(jié)尾提出倡議或號召現(xiàn)在，青少年肥胖越來越嚴(yán)重，很讓父母擔(dān)心。請你根據(jù)以下提示寫一篇文章參考詞匯：肥胖：obesity垃圾食品：junkfood要求：1.字?jǐn)?shù)150左右2.對所有要點要適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，不要簡單翻譯。3.開頭已給出，不計入總數(shù)Recently,thephenomenonofteenobesityhasmadealotofparentsconcerned.______________________________________________原因缺少運動飲食結(jié)構(gòu)不合理建議多參加體育鍛煉多吃健康食品，遠(yuǎn)離垃圾食品…

要點分析1、引出主題。Whenitcomestothe

phenomenonofteenobesity,ourparentsareingreatconcern.Whyaresomanykidsgettingfatterandfatter?2、原因。Reasons:3、建議。Suggestions:

BecauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andbecausestudentshavesomuchhomeworktodo,theyaregettinglessexercisethanbefore.原因：1.缺少運動BecauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andstudentsareburdenedwithsomuchhomework,Becausepeople’squalityoflifehasgottenbetterandbetter,familiescanaffordtobuymanyfoods,suchasmeat,chocolateandothersweetoroilysnacks,whichmightmakethekidsoverweight.原因：2.飲食結(jié)構(gòu)不合理Inordertoloseweightandstayhealthy,teensshouldavoidspendingtoomuchtimeinfrontoftheTVorthecomputeranddomoreexercise.建議：1.多參加體育鍛煉

建議：2.多吃健康食品，遠(yuǎn)離垃圾食品Asthesayinggoes,“Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.”Theyshouldalsoeatamorebalanceddietsuchasfruitsandvegetables,andlessfastfoodandjunkfood.建議：3.制定合理的計劃，時間表Lastbutnotleast,theyshouldmakeapropertimeschedulesothattheycanbalancetheirexerciseandstudies合成文章

Recently,thephenomenonofteenobesityhasmadealotofparentsconcerned.Whyareteensgettingfatterandfatter?Inmyopinion,therearetworemarkablereasonsforthisproblem.Foronething,becauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andstudentsareburdenedwithsomuchhomeworktodo.Theyaregettinglessexercisethanbefore.Foranother,becausepeople’squalityoflifehasgottenbetterandbetter,familiescanaffordtobuymanyfoods,suchasmeat,chocolateandothersweetoroilysnacks,whichmightmakethekidsoverweight.

Ontheotherhand,/aroused/Ontheonehand,

Inordertoloseweightandstayhealthy,teensshouldavoidspendingtoomuchtimeinfrontoftheTVorthecomputeranddomoreexercise.Asthesayinggoes,“Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.”Theyshouldalsoeatamorebalanceddietsuchasfruits,vegetables,lessfastfoodandjunkfood.Lastbutnotleast,theyshouldmakeapropertimeschedulesothattheycanbalancetheirexerciseandstudies.（一）評分原則：1、本題總分為25分，按5個檔次給分。2、評分時，先根據(jù)文章的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。3、詞數(shù)少于80和多于140的，從總分中減去2分。4、評分時應(yīng)注意的主要內(nèi)容為：內(nèi)容要點、應(yīng)用詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)的數(shù)量和準(zhǔn)確性及上下文的連貫性。5、拼寫與標(biāo)點符號是語言準(zhǔn)確性的一個方面。評分時應(yīng)視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮。英、美拼寫及詞匯用法均可接受。（二）評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：第五檔(21-25分)：完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，完全達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫作目的——覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點?！獞?yīng)用了較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯?！Z法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面有些許錯誤，但為盡力使用較復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)或較高級詞匯所致；具備較強的語言運用能力?！行У厥褂昧苏Z句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。第四檔(16-20分)：完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫作目的——雖漏掉1、2個次重點，但覆蓋所有主要內(nèi)容?！獞?yīng)用的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)的要求?！Z法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面應(yīng)用基本準(zhǔn)確，些許錯誤主要是因嘗試較復(fù)雜語法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯所致?！獞?yīng)用簡單的語句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。第三檔(11-15分)：基本完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，整體而言，基本達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫作目的——雖漏掉一些內(nèi)容，但覆蓋所有主要內(nèi)容。——應(yīng)用的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯能滿足任務(wù)的要求。——有一些語法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面的錯誤，但不影響理解?！獞?yīng)用簡單的語句間的連接成分，使全文內(nèi)容連貫。第二檔(6-10分)：未恰當(dāng)完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，信息未能清楚地傳達(dá)給讀者——漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要內(nèi)容，寫了一些無關(guān)內(nèi)容?！Z法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)、詞匯項目有限?！幸恍┱Z法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面的錯誤，影響了對寫作內(nèi)容的理解?！^少使用語句間的連接成分，內(nèi)容缺少連貫性。第一檔(1-5分)：未完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，信息未能傳達(dá)給讀者——明顯遺漏主要內(nèi)容，寫了一些無關(guān)內(nèi)容，原因可能是未理解試題要求?！Z法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)、詞匯項目有限。——較多語法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面的錯誤，影響對寫作內(nèi)容的理解。——缺乏語句間的連接成分，內(nèi)容不連貫。不得分（0分）：未能傳達(dá)給讀者仟何信息：內(nèi)容太少，無法評判；寫的內(nèi)容均與所要求內(nèi)容無關(guān)或所寫內(nèi)容無法看清。詞匯,句型（高級）和語法多樣化（較復(fù)雜）1.覆蓋了所有的要點

2.應(yīng)用了較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯

3.有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊4.語言得體要點全連接詞如何算是一篇好文章？語言地道，規(guī)范acompositiontopicsentence（主題句）supportingsentences（擴(kuò)展句）ending（結(jié)尾句）過渡詞：first,second,finally,and,besides,also,but,however,what’smore…Writingacompositionisjustlikemakingasandwich.寫作的“五項基本原則”

一、長短句原則

二、主題句原則三、一二三原則

1）first,second,third,last（不推薦，原因：俗）

2）firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally（不推薦，原因：俗）

3）thefirst,thesecond,thethird,thelast（不推薦俗）

4）inthefirstplace,inthesecondplace,inthethirdplace,lastly（不推薦，原因：俗）

5）tobeginwith,then,furthermore,finally（推薦）

6）tostartwith,next,inaddition,finally（強烈推薦）

7）firstandforemost,besides,lastbutnotleast（強烈推薦）

8）mostimportantofall,moreover,finally

9）ontheonehand,ontheotherhand（兩點的情況）

10）foronething,foranother（適用于兩點情況）四、短語優(yōu)先原則

五、多實少虛原則

在整篇文章中，避免只使用一兩個句式，要靈活運用以下結(jié)構(gòu)：倒裝句強調(diào)句主從復(fù)合句分詞狀語With復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)

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