第十九天和文學(xué)巨匠寫作曼斯菲爾德的圖畫

第十九天：和文學(xué)巨匠學(xué)寫作：曼斯菲爾德的《圖畫》2017421在學(xué)習(xí).蒲柏時(shí)，我們?cè)?jīng)強(qiáng)調(diào)，用詞要簡(jiǎn)潔、直接、準(zhǔn)確，但是曼斯菲爾德的。這個(gè)單詞的內(nèi)涵我們面的推送中已經(jīng)講過(guò)了，用地名暗示摩斯的職業(yè)追求也是一絕。2）Misssmallgreenoryellowntthatgrowsespeciallyinwetearthoronrocks,wallsandtreetrunks:一個(gè)名叫“苔蘚”3）Nourishing胖的，這是否在暗示摩斯的體型呢？5）West6）BackwashFilm暗示出摩斯的平庸、無(wú)獨(dú)立意識(shí)，品味膚淺的女性（afemalewithoutuniqueality,Neverindependentfromhersocialgroup,superficial）的呢？凱瑟琳.曼斯菲爾德的用詞能力可見一斑啊。，1）EIGHTo’clockinthemorning.，1）EIGHTo’clockinthemorning.AdaMosslayinablackiron2）Herroom,aBloomsburytop-back,smelledofsoot（煤煙）andpowder（粉底霜）andthepaperof房間的特色作為段落的friedpotatoesshebroughtinsupperthenightam4）“Well,Ishould,MissMoss,”saidshe,“andthat’showitis.AndI’lltroubleyoutoopenit,ifyou實(shí)這句話的主體是：I’lltroubleyoutoopenit.但是在使用敬語(yǔ)之后，整個(gè)句子就變成了三行：Well,Ishould,andthat’showitis.And…,if這是個(gè)不和語(yǔ)則的句子啊那么作者h(yuǎn)avedoneitforyouandhavewithinher（）Myfirstjobwasapart-timeteacherinakindergarten.（仿照曼斯菲爾德的句子結(jié)構(gòu)：先地點(diǎn)，然后名詞，在插入語(yǔ)后面寫句子的謂語(yǔ)，然后用ng做伴隨狀語(yǔ)）Inalargeroomabout100squaremeters,tenchildren,boysandgirls,stoodaroundme,gazingatme,lightshiningintheireyes.ButIwasbitofnervous,becauseitwasthefirsttimeformetoshowpeoplehowtodance,eventhoughtheyareagroupofchildren.thoughtI)“Calmdown!”thoughtI,“Itmightbedifficultatbeginning,butwillcomeeasyunderyourefforts.Youcanmakeit.Comeon!”Withthis,Ibegantoextendmyarms,showingthemthefirstgesture.Meanwhile,Isaidtothechildreninfrontofme,asgentlyasIcould,evenwithsomewhattremblingvoice.“Comeon,mykids!YoucanmakeitTomysurprise,theyweregreatlyinterestedinmyteachingstyle,followingmeoneafteranother,firstQiaQia,andthen（不要孤立地使用名詞，而是將其具體化）Fortyminutespassed,andaclasscametoanend.Theboysandgirlsdidn’tseemtired,instead,theywerehappy,askingmewhetherIcouldcomeherenexttime.構(gòu)）Ilearnthreethingsfromthisexperience:First,beingpositive,youcan’tbeagooddancer.Alwayswalkoutoftheshadowinyourheart.Second,talk,talk,andtalk,oritisimpossibletomakeyourpointacross,letaloneachieveyourgoal.Thirdandlast,ifyoucan’tmakeyourselfunderstood,showittothem.Inacademicstudies,agooddancermustbeagoodtalker,atleasttoherself.Butonstage,shemustbeagooddoer,showingherinnerbeautytoaudience.Apositiveattitudetotheoutsideworld,agoodtalkerandagooddoer,that’swhatIlearnfromthispart-timejob.（在論述的位置，即使重wantto，寫作的效果也未必會(huì)差）IwanttobethiskindofIwanttobeagooddancer,andIwanttoagoodteacher,andmastereducationinthisacademywillbemyfirststep.Beingopentonewtheoriesandnewideasisimportant,especiallyinballroomdance.Knowledgefromfieldworklsotherswhatyoucando,butthatfromtheoreticalstudieslsyouhowtobeinventive,creativeandsensible.IthinkpostgraduatestudiesatthisuniversitycangivemeamentalpowerandrealisticMyLastchildren’sMyLastchildren’sIfeelsweetandenchantedwhenthinkingaboutmylastChildren’sday.ItisbecauseIgotagoodlessonfrommyparents,ratherthan,receivevariousgiftsandcomplimentsasusual.Istillrememberthateverythinghappenedisclear.Iwaslyingonthebedandexpectedtoreceiveaspecialgiftonmylastchildren’sday.Tomysurprise,myparentsaskedmetobeavolunteertopickupthetrasharoundourneighborhood.Atfirst,Irefusedtodoso,becauseitistooshamefulandawkwardtobeseenbymyfriends.butIagreeditintheend,becausetheytoldme:dear,youknowtheworldweliveonisgettingworseandworse,andwemustdosomethingtoprotectit.Maybeitisonlyatinythingyoudo,butifyouinsist,itwillhaveamagicpower,ingabigthing.iseemedtounderstandmymomwords.andfollowedastheirhoped.IfeltsosatisfiedwhenIpickedupalotofrubbishes.lookingaroundthestreetIcleanedup,Iwasfullyconvincedthatitwasareallymeaningfuldayforme.如果我們模仿著加入一下文學(xué)手法如人物刻畫是不是好得多呢IfeelsweetwhenthinkingaboutLastChildren’sIalwaysfeelsweetwheneveraboutmylastChildren’sDay.ItbecauseIdrewausefullessonfrommyparents,ratherthanreceivegiftspraiseasIwaslyingonthebedandexpectedtoreceiveaspecialgiftonmylastchildren’sday.Tomysurprise,myparentsaskedmetobeavolunteertopickupthetrasharoundour想的：“Whatifmyfriendsspotmeintheneighborhood?Theywouldlaughatme.”Isaid.“Theywouldn’t,mydear.”Mymotherreplied,“theneighborhoodisdirty,andwemustdosomethingaboutit.”“Butotherscandoit,too!Leavethatjobtothem!”Ied.“Whatifothersthinkinthesamelikeyou?”Mymothersaidshameful,awkward。Atfirst,Irefusedtodoso,becauseitistooshamefulandawkwardtobeseenbymyfriends.Shepaused,andthenpattedmeonthehead,“Inthatcase,wewillneverhaveacleanandcomfortablecommunity,won’twe?lme,mydear,whatisavolunteer?”Ishookmyheadin“Itmeansawhooffershishelpwithoutbeingd.Whatyoudotodayisbeneficialtoourneighborhood.Withyourdedication,thecommunitywillecleanandcomfortable.thatcase,howcouldyourfriendsatyou?Andasyourmom,Iwillbeproudofyou,becauseIhaveakidwithasenseofresponsibility.”故事結(jié)局：作者同意當(dāng)butIagreeditintheend,becausetheytoldme:dear,youknowtheworldweliveonisgettingworseandworse,andwemustdosomethingtoprotectit.Maybeitisonlyatinythingyoudo,butifyouinsist,itwillhaveamagicpower,ingabigthingMymom’swordsweresomovingthatIfeltgreatlyencouraged.Imadeupmymind,followinghertotheneighborhood.Tomysurprise,manyofmyfriendshadalreadybeenthere!Withinthirtyminutes,ourneighborhoodbecamealargeandbeautifulgarden!IalwaysfeelsweetwheneverthinkingaboutmylastChildren’sday.ItisbecauseIdrewausefullessonfrommyparents,ratherthanreceivinggiftsandpraiseasusual.Inretrospection,IbelievethatmyexperienceasavolunteerinmylastChildren’sDayisaturningpointinmylife:itsomewhatchangesmyattitudetowardstheworld.Inthemorningthatday,Iwaslounginginbed,expectingaspecialgiftfrommyparents.Tomysurprise,myparentsaskedmetobeavolunteertopickupthetrasharoundourneighborhood.Atfirst,Iwasunwillingtodoso,foritwouldbeembarrassingtobeseenbymyfriends.“Whatifmyfriendsspotmeonthescene?”Isaid,“Theywouldlaughatme.”“Theywouldn’t,mydear.”Repliedmymother,“theneighborhoodisdirty,andwemustdosomethingaboutit.”“Butotherscandoit,too!Leavethatjobtothem!”I“Whatifothersthinkinthesamewaylikeyou?”Mymothersaidpatiently.Shepaused,andthenpattedmeonthehead,“Inthatcase,wewillneverhaveacleanandcomfortablecommunity,won’twe?lme,mydear,whatisIshookmyheadin“Itmeansawhooffershishelpwithoutbeingd.Whatyoudotodayisbeneficialtoourneighborhood.Withyourdedication,thecommunitywillecleanandcomfortable.Inthatcase,howcoul