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Inaddressingthespecifictaskdirections,a6responsepresentsacogentandwell-articulatedysisoftheissueandconveythemeaningskillfullyArticulatesaclearandinsightfulpositionontheissueinaccordancewiththeassignedtaskDevelopsthepositionfullywithcompellingreasonand/orpersuasiveexamples Conveysideasfluentlyandprecisely,usingeffectivevocabularyandsentencevarietyDemonstratessuperiorfacilitywiththeconventionsofstandardwrittenEnglish(gr r,usage,andmechanics)butmayhaveminorerrorsassignedtask：根據(jù)6種題目要求。在另外位置詳述。well-focused：重復(fù)，用各種方式。1st，lthemwhatyouaregoingto lthem.2nd, lthemwhatyouhavetoldthem.well-organized：分段。開頭段，3~4個(gè)中間段，結(jié)尾段。中間段每一段陳述一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)。sentencevariety：中文的多樣性意味著英文的多樣性。寫作在一定程度上實(shí)際上是翻譯。英conventionsofstandardwrittenEnglish：使用標(biāo)準(zhǔn)英文學(xué)術(shù)寫作的語言。在另外位置詳述。minorerrors：不可的錯(cuò)誤包括：成分殘缺；句內(nèi)邏輯不一致；句內(nèi)時(shí)態(tài)不一致。Vagueorlimitedinaddressingthespecifictaskdirectionsand/orinpresentingordeveloapositionontheissueWeakintheuseofrelevantreasonsorexamplesorrelieslargelyonunsupportedclaimsLimitedinfocusand/ororganizationHasproblemsinlanguageandsentencestructurethatresultinalackofContainsoccasionalmajorerrorsorfrequentminorerrorsingr r,usageormechanicsthatcaninterferewithmeaningvague：觀點(diǎn)模糊，與well-articulated對(duì)立。limited：觀點(diǎn)單向，與insightful對(duì)立。unsupportedclaim：沒有論證。lackofclarity：語言不清，與學(xué)術(shù)寫作規(guī)范對(duì)立。interferewithmeaning：犯了不可的語言錯(cuò)誤。Aspeoplerelymoreandmoreontechnologytosolveproblems,theabilityofhumanstothinkforthemselveswillsurelydeteriorate.Discusstheextenttowhichyouagreeordisagreewiththestatementandexinyourreasoningforthepositionyoutake.Indeveloandsupportingyourposition,youshouldconsiderwaysinwhichthestatementmightormightnotholdtrueandexinhowtheseconsiderationsshapeyourposition.Thestatementlinkingtechnologynegativelywith thinkingysonrecenthumanexperienceoverthepastcentury.SurelytherehasbeennotimeinhistorywherethelivedlivesofpeoplehavechangedmoreAquickreflectiononatypicaldayrevealshowtechnologyhasrevolutionizedtheMostpeoplecommutetoworkinanautothatrunsonaninternalcombustionDuringtheworkday,chancesarehighthattheemployeewillin ctwithacomputerthatprocessesinformationonsiliconbridgesthatare0.09micronswide.Uponleavinghome,familymemberswillbereachedthroughwirelessnetworksthatutilizesalitesorbitingtheearth.Eachofthesecommonoccurrencescouldhavebeeninconceivableattheturnofthe19thcentury.Thestatementlinkingtechnologynegativelywiththinkingysonrecenthumanexperienceoverthepastcentury.SurelytherehasbeennotimeinhistorywherethelivedlivesofpeoplehavechangedmoreAquickreflectiononatypicaldayrevealshowtechnologyhasrevolutionizedtheanMostpeoplecommutetowork thatrunsonaninternalcombustionanDuringtheworkday,chancesarehighthattheemployeewillin ctwithacomputerthatprocessesinformationonsiliconbridgesthatare0.09micronswide.Uponleavinghome,familymemberswillbereachedthroughwirelessnetworksthatutilize litesorbitingtheearth.Eachofthesecommonoccurrences(things)couldhavebeeninconceivableattheturnofthe19thcentury.Thestatementlinkingtechnologynegativelywith thinkingysonrecenthumanexperienceoverthepastcentury.SurelytherehasbeennotimeinhistorywherethelivedlivesofpeoplehavechangedmoreAquickreflectiononatypicaldayrevealshowtechnologyhasrevolutionizedtheMostpeoplecommutetoworkinan thatrunsonaninternalcombustionDuringtheworkday,chancesarehighthattheemployeewillin ctwithacomputerthatprocessesinformationonsiliconbridgesthatare0.09micronswide.Uponleavinghome,familymemberswillbereachedthroughwirelessnetworksthatutilize litesorbitingtheearth.Eachofthesecommonoccurrencescouldhavebeeninconceivableattheturnofthe19thcentury.Thestatementlinkingtechnologynegativelywith thinkingysonrecenthumanexperienceoverthepastcentury.SurelytherehasbeennotimeinhistorywherethelivedlivesofpeoplehavechangedmoreAquickreflectiononatypicaldayrevealshowtechnologyhasrevolutionizedtheMostpeoplecommutetoworkinanautothatrunsonaninternalcombustionDuringtheworkday,chancesarehighthattheemployeewillin ctwithacomputerthatprocessesinformationonsiliconbridgesthatare0.09micronswide.Uponleavinghome,familymemberswillbereachedthroughwirelessnetworksthatutilizesalitesorbitingtheearth.Eachofthesecommonoccurrencescouldhavebeeninconceivableattheturnofthe19thcentury.（這是個(gè)虛擬語氣）Thestatementlinkingtechnologynegativelywith thinkingysonrecenthumanexperienceoverthepastcentury.SurelytherehasbeennotimeinhistorywherethelivedlivesofpeoplehavechangedmoreAquickreflectiononatypicaldayrevealshowtechnologyhasrevolutionizedtheMostpeoplecommutetoworkinanautothatrunsonaninternalcombustionDuringtheworkday,chancesarehighthattheemployeewill ctwithacomputerprocessesinformationonsiliconbridgesthatare0.09micronsUponleavinghome,familymemberswillbereachedthroughwirelessnetworksthatutilize litesorbitingtheearth.Eachofthesecommonoccurrencescouldhavebeeninconceivableattheturnofthe19thcentury.any7conventionsofstandardwrittenEnglish：時(shí)態(tài)大多是現(xiàn)在時(shí)。Thestatementattemptstobridgethesedramaticchangestoareductionintheabilityforhumanstothinkforthemselves.Theassumptionisthatanincreasedrelianceontechnologynegatestheneedforpeopletothinkcreativelytosolvepreviousquandaries.Lookingbackattheintroduction,onecouldarguethatwithoutacar,computer,phone,thehypotheticalworkerwouldneedtofindalternatemethodsoftransport,informationprocessingandcommunication.TechnologyshortcircuitsthisthinkingbymakingtheproblemsThestatementattemptstobridgethesedramaticchangestoareductionintheabilityforhumanstothinkforthemselves.Theassumptionisthatanincreasedrelianceontechnologynegatestheneedforpeopletothinkcreativelytosolvepreviousquandaries.Lookingbackattheintroduction,onecouldarguethatwithoutacar,computer,orphone,thehypotheticalworkerwouldneedtofindalternatemethodsoftransport,informationprocessingandcommunication.TechnologyshortcircuitsthisthinkingbymakingtheproblemsThestatementattemptstobridgethesedramaticchangestoareductionintheabilityforhumanstothinkforthemselves.Theassumptionisthatanincreasedrelianceontechnologynegatestheneedforpeopletothinkcreativelytosolvepreviousquandaries.Lookingbackattheintroduction,onecouldarguethatwithoutacar,computer,orphone,thehypotheticalworkerwouldneedtofindalternatemethodsoftransport,informationprocessingandcommunication.TechnologyshortcircuitsthisthinkingbymakingtheproblemsThestatementattemptstobridgethesedramaticchangestoareductionintheabilityforhumanstothinkforthemselves.Theassumptionisthatanincreasedrelianceontechnologynegatestheneedforpeopletothinkcreativelytosolvepreviousquandaries.Lookingbackattheintroduction,onecouldarguethatwithoutacar,computer,orphone,thehypotheticalworkerwouldneedtofindalternatemethodsoftransport,informationprocessingandTechnologyshortcircuitsthisthinkingbymakingtheproblemsThestatementattemptstobridgethesedramaticchangestoareductionintheabilityforhumanstothinkforthemselves.Theassumptionisthatanincreasedrelianceontechnologynegatestheneedforpeopletothinkcreativelytosolvepreviousquandaries.Lookingbackattheintroduction,onecouldarguethatwithoutacar,computer,phone,thehypotheticalworkerwouldneedtofindalternatemethodsoftransport,informationprocessingandcommunication.Technologyshortcircuitsthisthinkingbymakingtheproblemstopic的觀點(diǎn)相反（However轉(zhuǎn)折）However,thisrelianceontechnologydoesnotnecessarilyprecludethecreativitythatmarksthehumanspecies.Thepriorexamplesrevealthattechnologyallowsfor算是中性的吧，這里convenience就已經(jīng)轉(zhuǎn)換為褒義詞匯，與之前negate呈現(xiàn)對(duì)比。。Thecar,computerandphoneallreleaseadditionaltimeforpeopletolivemoreThisefficiencydoesnotprecludetheneedforhumanstothinkfor13句到15句是對(duì)句12句的邏輯重復(fù)，而這三句之間的關(guān)系是邏輯遞進(jìn)。與段落觀點(diǎn)However,thisrelianceontechnologydoesnotnecessarilyprecludethecreativitythatmarksthehumanspecies.ThepriorexamplesrevealthattechnologyallowsforThecar,computerandphoneallreleaseadditionaltimeforpeopletolivemoreThisefficiencydoesnotprecludetheneedforhumanstothinkforreasoning是下一句重復(fù)上一句的一個(gè)部分而展開到另外一個(gè)上句沒有的概念。經(jīng)典模式是頂針。13句：科技意味方便；14句：方便意味效率；15句：效率并不阻礙人類思考。這就是句12句：科技并不阻礙人類思考的reasoning。Infact,technology shumanitytonotonlytacklenewproblems,butmayitselfcreatenewissuesthatdidnotexistwithouttechnology.Forexample,theproliferationofauto shasintroducedaneedforfuelconservationonaglobalscale.Withincreasingenergydemandsfromemergingmarkets,globalwarming esaconcerninconceivabletothehorse-and-buggygeneration.Likewisedependenceonoilhascreatednation-statesthatarenotdependentontaxation,allowingrulingpartiestooppressminoritygroupssuchaswomen.Solutionstothesecomplexproblemsrequiretheunfetteredimaginationsofmaverickscientistsandpoliticiansreasoning的部分不是很容易找到明顯的對(duì)應(yīng)形式，但通過上述分析，各句的對(duì)應(yīng)部分已However,thisrelianceontechnologydoesnotnecessarilyprecludethecreativitythatmarksthehumanspecies.ThepriorexamplesrevealthattechnologyallowsforThecar,computerandphoneallreleaseadditionaltimeforpeopletolivemoreThisefficiencydoesnotprecludetheneedforhumanstothinkforInfact,technologyshumanitytonotonlytacklenewproblems,butmayitselfcreatenewissuesthatdidnotexistwithouttechnology.Forexample,theproliferationofautoshasintroducedaneedforfuelconservationonaglobalscale.Withincreasingenergydemandsfromemergingmarkets,globalwarming esaconcerninconceivabletothehorse-and-buggygeneration.Likewisedependenceonoilhascreatednation-statesthatarenotdependentontaxation,allowingrulingpartiestooppressminoritygroupssuchaswomen.Solutionstothesecomplexproblemsrequiretheunfetteredimaginationsofmaverickscientistsandpoliticians.topic的觀點(diǎn)相反（Inthecontrastto轉(zhuǎn)折Incontrasttothestatement,wecanevenseehow sthehuman徹底topic觀點(diǎn)，作者表明自己立場(chǎng)，科技 sthehumanimagination。本段論點(diǎn)。與Considerhowthedigitalrevolutionandtheadventoftheinternethasallowedforanunprecedentedexchangeofideas.21句的邏輯重復(fù)。WebMD,apopularinternetportalformedicalinformation,permitspatientstoselfresearchsymptomsforamoreinformeddoctorvisit.Thisexerciseopenspathwaysofthinkingthatwerepreviouslyclosedofftothemedical2322digitalrevolutionandtheadventoftheinternet，2422exchangeofideasWithincreasedinterdisciplinaryin ctions,inspirationcanarrivefromthemostsurprising復(fù)了21句的觀點(diǎn)：科技 sthehumanimagination。與段落觀點(diǎn)相同。JeffreySachs,oneofthearchitectsoftheUNMillenniumDevelopmentGoals,basedhisideasonemergencycaretriagetechniques.Theunlikelymarriageofeconomicsandmedicinehashealedtense,hyperinflationenvironmentsfromSouthAmericatoEasternEurope.technology25句的邏輯重復(fù)，即，思想交流如果加上JS是得益于信息才融合兩個(gè)領(lǐng)域的知識(shí)的話，就算是本段的一個(gè)比較完整的Thislastexampleprovidesthemosthopeinhowtechnologyactuallyprovideshopetothefutureofhumanity.由上段最后一個(gè)例子引出科技解放思想的另一方面——givehope。ok，imagination是說人們有更強(qiáng)的能力去思考，givehope是說人們有更大的膽量去思考。都是“科技沒有讓人Byincreasingourrelianceontechnology,impossiblegoalscannowbeConsiderhowthelate20thcenturywitnessedthecompleteeliminationofThisdiseasehadravagedthehumanracesinceprehistoricdays,andyetwiththetechnologyofvaccines,thinkinghumansdaredtoimagineaworldofsmallpox.上兩句邏輯重復(fù)29、28句。以前不能實(shí)現(xiàn)的事情->從史前就有的?。豢萍?>；hope->Usingtechnology,battlensweredrawnout,andsmallpoxwassystematicallytargetedanderadicated.好吧，說他runningoutoftime.Technologywillalwaysmarkthehumanexperience,fromthediscoveryoffiretotheimplementationofnanotechnology.Giventhehistoryofthehumanrace,therewillbenolimittothenumberofproblems,bothnewandold,forustotackle.ThereisnoneedtoretreattoaLudditeattitudetonewthings,butratherembraceahopefulposturetothepossibilitiesthattechnologyprovidesfornewavenuesofhumanimagination.下觀點(diǎn)就ok。22~7句所說的其實(shí)都是一個(gè)事情，是說科技改變了人們的生活，這個(gè)和科技促進(jìn)思Surely、infact、asamatteroffact開始的句子，是為了做轉(zhuǎn)折。因?yàn)槿绻堑氖聦?shí)，Discusstheextenttowhichyouagreeordisagreewiththestatementandexinyourreasoningforthepositionyoutake.Indeveloandsupportingyourposition,youshouldconsiderwaysinwhichthestatementmightormightnotholdtrueandexinhowtheseconsiderationsshapeyour首段是Discusstheextenttowhichyouagreeordisagreewiththemendationandexinyourreasoningforthepositionyoutake.Indeveloandsupportingyourposition,describespecificcircumstancesinwhichadoptingthe mendationwouldorwouldnotbeadvantageousandexinhowtheseexamplesshapeyourposition.Discusstheextenttowhichyouagreeordisagreewiththeclaim.Indeveloandsupportingyourposition,besuretoaddressthemostcompellingreasonsand/orexamplesthatcouldbeusedtochallengeyourposition.TakethesafesideGREhasnothingtodowithyourinnercall.需要陳述敵方觀點(diǎn)，但不需要論Ifyoucannotbeattheenemy,joinDiscusswhichviewmorecloselyalignswithyourownpositionandexinyourreasoningforthepositionyoutake.Indeveloandsupportingyourposition,youshouldaddressbothoftheviewspresented.墻頭草。如果全都會(huì)相當(dāng)難寫。Discusstheextenttowhichyouagreeordisagreewiththeclaimandreason,onwhichthatclaimisbased.Discussyourviewsontheandexinyourreasoningforthepositionyoutake.Ideveloandsupportingyourposition,youshouldconsiderthepossibleconsequencesofimplementingtheandexinhowtheseconsequencesshapeyourposition.果經(jīng)常一樣)（circumstance這個(gè)詞，結(jié)果分析多用consequences）例子：Itisprimarilyincitiesthatanation'sculturaltraditionsaregeneratedandp提culturaltraditionspcities-generated-distinctp- city&generate&culturaltraditions：有人、有大量的物質(zhì)和精神活動(dòng)，可以產(chǎn)生行為習(xí)慣。city&preserve&culturaltraditions：因?yàn)楦鞣N東西集中，所以有人力、物力、權(quán)利保護(hù)這些countryside&generate&culturaltraditions：有人，可以產(chǎn)生行為習(xí)慣。countryside&preserve&culturaltraditions：穩(wěn)定性好，利于沉淀。村的劣勢(shì)~ 人民的精神（例子：新政時(shí)給藝術(shù)家補(bǔ)貼。boat，例子2：科技的目的是提高效率讓人有的空閑時(shí)間。破題：是不是效率更高取決于人們?nèi)绾问褂眠@些科技，是不是讓人感覺leisure 思維的前提是繼承：繼承的原材： *人性的弱點(diǎn)（用于尋求事例：Wealthoutwork/pleasurewithoutconscience/sciencewithouthumanity/knowledgewithoutcharacter（知識(shí)沒有風(fēng)骨，即是權(quán)力的工具）/politicsThemainbenefitofthestudyofhistoryistodispeltheillusionthatpeoplelivingnowaresignificantlydifferentfrompeoplewholivedinearliertimes.History,asarecordofpastevents,differsfrompresentSocialPoliticalDailyEternalproblemskeepguinghuman,forthenatureofhumanremainsWealthoutwork/pleasurewithoutconscience/sciencewithouthumanity/knowledgewithoutcharacter/politicswithout withoutmorality/worshipwithoutsacrificehistoryiswrittenbythewinner,andthus,thebygonetruth,nomatterhowsimilartoordifferentfrompresentperception,shouldbe,asthemaindutyofhistorians,exploredandexamined.Thevalueofhistoricbuildingsissuesmodernpeopleasenseofculturalidentity,withoutwhich,itishardforthemtofindtheirlocationsinthepsychologicalcoordinatesl