技巧04 如何解決沖突-高一英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練

高一英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練技巧04如何解決沖突讀后續(xù)寫首先力爭(zhēng)讀懂原文，找出記敘文的幾要素，找到故事情節(jié)中到底有什么沖突或問(wèn)題。然后讀懂需要續(xù)寫的兩段的首句，根據(jù)首句推測(cè)故事發(fā)展的走向和兩段的大致內(nèi)容。讀后續(xù)寫的文章屬于敘事類文體，大部分故事都是圍繞conflict（沖突）和solution（問(wèn)題解決）來(lái)運(yùn)轉(zhuǎn)的，因此矛盾沖突在敘事類讀后續(xù)寫語(yǔ)篇中尤為重要。矛盾沖突的解決能推動(dòng)故事情節(jié)的發(fā)展。矛盾沖突分預(yù)設(shè)與解決技巧，可以幫助學(xué)生在基于篇章主題意義下更好地發(fā)散思維，做到有話可說(shuō)，有事可寫。同時(shí)，在學(xué)生創(chuàng)設(shè)矛盾沖突進(jìn)行續(xù)寫的過(guò)程中，可以聯(lián)系上文已有的故事沖突，提高故事的完整性和連貫性。學(xué)生掌握了矛盾沖突的基本寫作技巧，有利于在續(xù)寫的故事創(chuàng)作中打開(kāi)思路，提高語(yǔ)言的綜合運(yùn)用能力。故事沖突的預(yù)設(shè)與解決的7個(gè)技巧技巧1：面對(duì)問(wèn)題，人物產(chǎn)生的消極或積極情緒【技巧舉例】（2021年6月，浙江高考，Para.1）Thepaydayarrivedatlast.IwasdelightedtofinallygetthepaymentafterIworkedhardfortwoweeks.Onthewayhomefullofexcitement,Ithoughtabouthowtomakeuseofthe“huge”sumofmoney.“Ineededanewfootballinthefuture.”Iwhisperedtomyself.Approachingmyhouse,Inoticedmydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,lookingsad.Itseemedasifsomethingwronghadhappened......【分析】續(xù)寫第一段中的“Onthewayhomefullofexcitement”表明了故事主人公心情非常好，但是當(dāng)面對(duì)新的問(wèn)題“mydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,lookingsad”時(shí)，故事主人公內(nèi)心開(kāi)始出現(xiàn)沖突與疑問(wèn)，這就反映在“somethingwrong”上面。兩種心態(tài)的沖突描寫前后銜接自然、且恰到好處。【用語(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】“感到一陣……”：feelaflushof...=feelawaveof...=feelafeeling/senseof...[joy(高興),excitement(興奮),pride(驕傲),anger(憤怒),rage(狂怒),panic(驚慌),alarm(驚慌),terror(恐懼),horror(恐懼),fear(恐懼),unease(不安),sorrow(悲傷),sadness(悲傷),grief(悲傷),embarrassment(尷尬),disappointment(失望),shame(羞愧),guilt(愧疚)]。例如：Shefeltawaveofpanic,butforcedherselftoleavetheroomcalmly.她感到一陣驚慌，但是強(qiáng)迫自己鎮(zhèn)靜地離開(kāi)了房間。技巧2：面對(duì)復(fù)雜的情境，人物產(chǎn)生急迫/復(fù)雜的心理【技巧舉例】（2021年1月，浙江高考，Para.2）ThevideowaspostedonlinetheMondaybeforeHalloween.Ilookedjustlikeapumpkinheadinit.Embarrassedandalittleannoyed,Ifledtomyroom,but

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stoppedme.“Youhaven’treadthecommentsyet.”IscrolleddownthescreenandmarveledatthestoriestheviewerssharedaboutHalloween.【分析】續(xù)寫第二段首句提示語(yǔ)提供了一個(gè)新的情境，即“Thevideowaspostedonline”，這讓故事主人公內(nèi)心沖突加?。‥mbarrassedandalittleannoyed），但當(dāng)聽(tīng)力母親的話之后，主人公開(kāi)始閱讀網(wǎng)上的評(píng)論，這又將主人公引向另一情境，結(jié)果主人公內(nèi)心又起了變化（marveled）。情境的不斷變換，加劇了故事主人公內(nèi)心的矛盾沖突的不斷變換?！居谜Z(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】（1）心里想：think/saytooneself（2）害怕；恐慌：withfear/panic/terror;tremble;shiver;shake;quake;tremblewithfear;beseizedwithpanic;screamwithpanic/terror;freeze/shakewithterror（3）生氣；憤怒：withrage;bered-cheekedwithrage;tremble/shakewithrage;feellikecryingwithrage;bespeechlesswithrage;beboilingwithrage（4）興奮；激動(dòng)：withexcitement;yellwithexcitement;jumpupanddownwithexcitement;screamwithexcitement;gowildwithexcitement（5）悲傷；流淚：Tearsblurredone’seyes.淚水模糊了她的雙眼。/One’seyesgotmisty.一個(gè)人的眼睛都模糊了。/One’seyesmisted/dimmedwithtears.淚眼模糊。/tearsrolldownone’seyes/cheeks/face淚水落下技巧3：面對(duì)他人的行為或行動(dòng)，人物展開(kāi)了新的動(dòng)作/行為【技巧舉例】(2021年，新高考I卷，Para.2）Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,“HappyMother’sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.【分析】續(xù)寫第二段中，當(dāng)雙胞胎叫醒母親（woketheirmotherup）后，母親的動(dòng)作首先有“saw”和“wasverysurprised”，之后在雙胞胎發(fā)出節(jié)日問(wèn)候“HappyMother’sDay”時(shí)，母親的動(dòng)作有“hugged”和“kissed”。這種“動(dòng)作主動(dòng)應(yīng)對(duì)”模式在休息的故事情節(jié)沖突拓展過(guò)程中是比較重要的，因?yàn)閯?dòng)作上的變化往往承載了人物對(duì)情節(jié)中的矛盾沖突的回應(yīng)模式及態(tài)度?！居谜Z(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】（1）常用詞語(yǔ)：openone’smouth;widenone’seyes;risetoone’sfeet;jumptoone’sfeet;shoutatthetopofone’slung;reachout（伸出手）（2）常用句式：如：Havingpassedtheexam,hewassohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.通過(guò)考試后，他非常高興，不知所措。Sheopenedthegiftwithherhandsshakingslightly.她用輕微顫抖的手打開(kāi)了禮物。技巧4：人物沉浸在某一情境中，于是出現(xiàn)了新問(wèn)題【技巧舉例】（2018年6月，浙江高考,Para.1）Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.MyhorseturnedtothelefttoavoidthelittlerabbitasIheldontightlyandtriednottofall.Thenmydadturnedaroundandshouted,“Holdon!”Allofasuddenthehorsebegantorun.Mydadtriedtokeepupbehindus.Forafewminutesmyhorsesloweddowntoatrotandthenstoppedbesideariver.Ilookedaroundandrealizedthatwewerewayoffthetrack.【分析】續(xù)寫第一段首句承接源語(yǔ)篇提供了一個(gè)新的情境，即“rabbitjumpedout”，從而引發(fā)了馬與人的一系列的避險(xiǎn)動(dòng)作，并且馬由于受驚而奔跑起來(lái)，最終將主人公帶入了另一個(gè)困境，即“wewerewayoffthetrack”?！居谜Z(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】（1）不幸的是(unfortunately) Butbadluckforsb,...但是某人真不走運(yùn) Shetriedherbest,butinvain.她盡力了，但沒(méi)有成功。（2）某人做了某事，不知道下一步該做什么。 Sbdidsth,wonderingwhattodonext. Sbdidsth,notknowingwhattodonext.技巧5：情況好轉(zhuǎn)或情境向好，人物突然有了一個(gè)想法【技巧舉例】（2020年7月，浙江高考，Para.2）Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.Elliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswiththemercilessnecessityofhunger,sowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.Aswewereclimbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.【分析】續(xù)寫第二段首句預(yù)設(shè)了一個(gè)新的情境“thehelicopterarrived”，于是故事主人公的心情好轉(zhuǎn)（Myheartleapedwithjoy），并且當(dāng)再次遇到熊的攻擊時(shí)，主人公就又有了新的想法（wethrowallthefoodwehave），這將故事的沖突與發(fā)展帶到另一個(gè)情境中；此外，當(dāng)獲救后，主人公又開(kāi)始感謝（Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound）?？梢?jiàn)，用新的想法接續(xù)“情況好轉(zhuǎn)”可以充分展現(xiàn)人物對(duì)整個(gè)事件的回應(yīng)過(guò)程中的特寫鏡頭?！居谜Z(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】“某人突然想到……”：Itsuddenlyoccurredtosbthat...=Ithitsbthat...=Itstrucksbthat...=Itdawnedonsbthat...技巧6：面對(duì)他人的鼓勵(lì)/激勵(lì)/幫助等，人物找到了解決辦法【技巧舉例】（2017年6月，浙江高考,Para.2）Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Theyfoundthedangeroussituation,wherethreemencircledthewolf.Mac'sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicyclesandjoinedthefightwiththewolf.Moreandmorecarsstopped.Somedriverstookoutthesticksfromthecars,andsometookouttheknives,eventhegunstowardsthewolf.Inthemeanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople'sthreatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.Soon,itranawayofftheroadanddisappearedinthedistance.【分析】續(xù)寫第二段首句提示給出了來(lái)幫忙的人（theothertwocyclistsarrived），之后又不斷有人加入（Mac'sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicycles/Moreandmorecarsstopped），故事中的人物有了一系列與狼對(duì)抗的動(dòng)作，如“circledthewolf”“tookoutthesticksfromthecars”“tookouttheknives”等，這些將故事中人狼對(duì)峙的沖突進(jìn)一步推向高潮?！居谜Z(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】（1）鼓起勇氣(做某事):take/gather/one’scourage(todosth)（2）毫不猶豫/選擇：withoutasecondthought/withoutdelay/withouthesitation/havingnochoice技巧7：獲得新的成長(zhǎng)，人物開(kāi)始總結(jié)、點(diǎn)題并呼應(yīng)前文【技巧舉例】（2022年1月，浙江卷,Para.2）OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.IfeltsosorrytohearthatandIthoughtIshouldvisithiminanycase.HewasalittlesurprisedtoseemewhenIsteppedintohiswardwithsomeflowersandfruits.Iofferedtodotherestworkofourprojectandheinvitedmetosharemyideastoperfectit.Webegantoworkasafineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime.OurhardworkpaidoffandDr.Henderson’swasverysatisfiedwithourwonderfulfindings.Fromthisproject,wealsolearnedthesignificanceofteammates.Justasthesayinggoes,onepersoncangofar,butagroupofpersonscantravelfarther.【分析】續(xù)寫第二段中主人公最后發(fā)現(xiàn)能與隊(duì)友和諧相處并最終完成了項(xiàng)目（Webegantoworkasafineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime），這引發(fā)了主人公的反響，并且主人公的這種體驗(yàn)不斷地深入（從“wealsolearnedthesignificanceofteammates”到“agroupofpersonscantravelfarther”），充分展現(xiàn)了主人公內(nèi)心的矛盾沖突從不斷激化到出現(xiàn)轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)、再到一步步迎刃而解的過(guò)程?！居谜Z(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】（1）直到……才意識(shí)到…… 倒裝句：Notuntil...didsbrealize/noticethat... 強(qiáng)調(diào)句：Itwasonly...thatsbrealizedthat...（2）表達(dá)經(jīng)歷與教訓(xùn) WhatavaluablelessonIhavelearnedfrom...!我從……中得到了寶貴的教訓(xùn)。 Whatanunforgettableexperience!多么難忘的經(jīng)歷啊!（3）結(jié)尾點(diǎn)題 Godhelpsthosewhohelpthemselves.天助自助者。 Everyoneisthearchitectofhisownfate.每個(gè)人都是自己命運(yùn)的建筑師。 Lifeisfulloflaughterandtears.Onlybyacceptingbothcanweenjoylife.生命就是充滿歡笑和淚水的。只有同時(shí)接受兩者，我們才能享受生活。 Neverunderestimatethepowerofyouraction.永遠(yuǎn)不要低估你的行為的力量。1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。RandomActsofKindnessIwasdrivingalongClarendonStreetinSouthMelbourneonmywaytoCastlemainetovisitmyparents.AsIstoppedatatrafficlight,Inoticedamanlyingonabenchseatonthefootpathbesidetheroad.Itwasearlyeveningandhisroughappearanceandthefactthathewasholdingabottlewrappedinnewspaperconfirmedmyimmediatesuspicions—hewasadrunk.AssoonasIsawhim,Ifeltastrongfeelingofsympathyforhim.Butlikesomanyotherpeople,Ihadotherplacestobeandotherthingstodo.AsIwatched,IsawtwopolicemenapproachandinstantlyIfeltrelieved.Afterall,itwastheirresponsibilitytocleanupthestreetsandmakesuremenlikehimgotachancetobesomewheresafeforthenight.AsIsatwaitingforthetrafficlightstoturngreen,Icouldn’tbelievewhatIsaw.Thetwopolicewalkedaroundandwhentheyreachedtheman,bothofwhomturnedtheirheadstheotherway,asifnottosee,andwalkedrightpast.Suddenly,afirmbeliefstreamedthroughmymind,“Lifeisneversobusythatthereisnotimetoserve.”RightthenIlookedupandthetrafficlightsturnedgreen—andIhadadecisiontomake.IknewthatifIdroveoff,Iwouldhavenopeace,soIturnedleft,drovearoundtheblock,parkedthecarandwalkedbacktotheman.AsIapproachedhim,Ifeltcompletelyunconfidenttodealwiththesituationandevenalittlefoolish.WhatwasIgoingtosay?WhatwasIgoingtodo?AttheveryleastIcoulddrivehimhome—ifhehadahome.Ifoundhimsleepingsoundlyandatfirst,hedidn’trespondtomeatall,soIreachedoutandgentlyshookhimawake.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Hewokeup,staringatmeangrily.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Muchtomyrelief,themanagreedtogetintomycar.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Atfirst,MichaelSurrelldidn’tseetheblacksmokeorflamesshootingfromthewindowsofhisneighbors’home.HeandhiswifehadjustparkedaroundthecornerfromtheirownhouseinAllentown,Pennsylvania,whentheygotacallfromoneofhisdaughters,“Thehousenextdoorisonfire!”Hewenttoinvestigate.That’swhenhesawtwowomenandagirlhysterical(歇斯底里的)ontheirporch.“Thebaby’sinthere!”oneofthewomencried.Thoughthefiredepartmenthadbeencalled,Surrell,then64,instinctivelyraninside.Thebabywas8-year-oldTiaraRoberts,thewoman’sgranddaughterandaplaymateofSurrell’sthreeyoungestkids,then8,10,and12.TheothertwoontheporchwereTiara’sauntandcousin.Enteringtheburninghousewaslike“runningintoabucketofblackpaint”Surrellsays.Thethicksmokecausedhimtostumbleblindlyaround,burnedhiseyes,andmadeitimpossibletobreathe.Theconditionswouldhavebeenhazardousforanyone,butforSurrell,whohaschronicobstructivepulmonarydisease(慢性阻塞性肺疾病),theywerelife-threatening.Hewasthelastpersonwhoshouldhaverunintoaburningbuilding—hehaslungdisease.Butthatdidn’tstophim.Afterafewminutesinthesmokefilledhouse,heretreatedoutsidetocatchhisbreath.“WhereisTiara?”heaskeddesperately.“Thesecondfloor.”herauntshoutedback.Surrellknewhecouldn’tholdhisbreathforlong.Soheutteredalittleprayer,“Well,Lord,thisisit.Yougottahelpme,becauseI’mnotcomingoutwithoutthatlittlegirl.”Takingadeepbreath,hewentinasecondtime.Thedarknesswasoverwhelming.Yetbecausethehousehadasimilarlayouttohis,hefoundthestairsandmadeittothesecondfloor.Heturnedtotherightandwasmetbyintenseheat.Hewasalreadyoutofbreath.“Babygirl,whereareyou?”Histhroatandlungsburnedasifhe’dbreathedinfireinsteadofthesmokeandsoot(煙灰)intheair.Allhecouldhearwasthecracklingandpoppingofburningwood.Thenaweakbutdistinctvoiceemerged.Stillunabletosee,Surrellfelltohiskneesonthehotwoodfloor.Hecrawledtowardthesound,feelingaroundforanysignofthegirl.Anominousthoughtcrossedhismind:I’mprobablygonnadieuphere.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好。Finallyhetouchedsomething.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Avoicetoldhim,“Youhavetobreatheforher.”____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Neesha,an8-year-oldgoldenretriever,isaluckydog.Afterspendingafortnightonherownwithoutfoodorrealshelter,thetoughdogwasaccidentallyspottedbyacouple,whoinspiteofthecoldweather,werehikingtherangeandcameacrossher.Twoweeksearlier,Neesha’sownershadtakenherandtheirotherdog,aGermanshepherdnamedHarley,forsomeoutdoorexercise.Frightenedbyadeer,bothdogsramaway.Harleyfoundhiswaybacktotheparkinglotthenextday,butNeeshadidnot.Thefamilymadeathoroughsearch.Theyleftalaundrybasketofunwashedclothingnearthespotwherethey’dlastseenNeeshainthehopethatshe’dheadstraighttowardsthefamiliarsmellmarker.TheyeventurnedtotheInternetforhelpinfindingNeesha—buttherewasstillnosignofher.“Wepostedourexperienceonsocialmedia.Thenaweekendlater,wewerestilllookingforher.Wewerestartingtogiveuphope,”saidthepet’sownerErinaO’SheaGoetelentoldTheIrishTimes.Eventually,thefamilybegantoacceptthatNeeshamightnotbecominghome.“Wejustthoughtsheis8,andit’sbeentwoweeks.Therewasnowayshecouldsurvive.“DoctorsCiaraNolanandJeanFrancoisBonnetmusttrulybecrazyhikers.TheybravedtheelementsonthefreezingdaywhenthecoupledecidedtoreachoneofWicklow’speaks.Astheynearedthetop,Nolanwasshockedtoseeadogshakinginthesnow.“Shewasfrightened,freezingcold.Shedidn’thaveenoughenergytobarkorstand,”Bonnetsaidinaninterview.“Wetriedtogethertowalk,butshecouldn’tstand.Sowecoveredherwithourspareclothesandgavehersomefood.”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。BonnetliftedNeeshaontohisbackforthelongpathdownthemountain._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Neesha’sownerscouldhardlybelieveitwhentheylearnedtheirdoghadbeenfoundalive._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Myfamily’shousewasclosetoaroad.Andonthefarendoftheroadstoodabigtree.Myparents,togetherwithme,oftencrossedtheroadtothebigtreetohavefunwithourneighbors.ButIwasn’tallowedtocrosstheroadtogotherebymyselfformysafety.Oneday,forsomereason,thebigtreewouldbecutdown.Itwasjustbeforedinnertime.Alargecrowdofneighborsgatheredatthefarendoftheroadtowatchthefallingofthistree.Iwatchedfrommyhouseasthetree,tiedwithropes,waslowereddown.Soon,thehugetreefellsafelytothegroundwithabigsound.Butthekidsandgrown-upsdidn’tleave.Theymovedclosertostayaroundthiswonderfuloldtree.Likethem,Iwantedtotouchthetreewithmyhandsandsaygood-bye.ButIwasonlyfiveyearsoldandwasn’tallowedtocrossthebusyroadalone.ButasIbecamesadderwhenwatchingthetreenearlydisappear,Ithoughttomyself,“What’stheworstthingthatcouldhappen?”Ididn’tseeanycarscoming,soIranacrosstheroadtosaygood-byetothefallentree.Afterstandingaroundandtalkingwithsomeoftheneighbors,IrealizedthatIhadstayedtheretoolong.“Iamlatefordinner,andI’mintrouble.”Itoldmyself.Withouteventhinking,andwithoutseeingiftherewereanycarscoming,Idashedoutbetweentwoparkedcarsandracedtowardtheothersideoftheroad.Ididn’tseeacarrushingforwardfromtheotherendoftheroad.Andthedriverdidn’texpectI’dcrosstheroadatthatmoment.Whenspottingme,hetriedtostophiscar,whosetiresproducedloudandunpleasantnoises.Butitwastoolate.注意：1.寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Beforeknowingwhathadhappened,Iwasstruckdown.______________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Atthehospital,itwasdiscoveredthatluckilyIwasnotseriouslyinjured.______________________________________________________________________________________________5．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。It’shardtotalktodadssometimes.Therolesweoftenexpectourfatherstoplay—protector,provider—canmakethemdifficulttounderstand.That’showitwaswithmydad.HecametoCanadaattheageoftenandsettledinanimmigrantcommunity.Hewasnevermuchofatalker.Herarelydrank.Hedidn’ttellstoriesabouthimselfatthedinnertableorwhenwewentforwalksinthepark.Hewasaprivatepersonandseemedtowanttostaythatway.ItseemedimpossibletoaskhimquestionsabouthisearlylifebeforeIwasborn—hisearlyhopesanddreams,hislovesandheartbreaks,letalonesharemyownfeelingswithhim.Ididn’twanttothreatentheintegrity(完整)ofhishardshell.Ihadgottenusedtoit,anditmademefeelsecure.Butwhenmyrelationshipwithmywifeandcareertookahitayearago,thingshadtochange.Iwasfacingseriousproblemsaboutmyownnature,andIwantedtoknowwhetherhehadfacedthemtoo,andIdesperatelyneededtoknowhowhehadfoundhisway,becauseIfeltlikeIhadlostmine.Inaseveremomentofdesperation,itoccurredtomethatsendinganemailmightbethekey.Anemailcanbecraftedslowlyandcarefully.He’dbeupinhisoffice-acomfortableplacefilledwithbookshelves,dustyCD-ROMsandpilesofoldnewspapers.I’dbeatmydeskinanapartment20minutesaway.SoIcouldspeakatacomfortabledistanceandgivehimroomtoadjust.SoIwrotetohim.Itoldhimaboutmyregretsandfears,andIaskedhimtoanswer,ifhefeltlikeit,andtosharesomethingabouthimself,somethingthatwouldgivememuch-neededperspectiveonmylife,especiallyonrelationshipandcareer.Twoweekslater,hisresponseshowedupinmyemailbox.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Iclosedtheemailandstartedtocry.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案1.【參考范文】Hewokeup,staringatmeangrily.ThesmellofalcoholonhisbreathwasoverwhelmingandIsteppedback.Ican’trememberexactlywhatIsaidtohim—probablysomethingnobetterthan,“Mate,areyouOK?”Stilllyingonthebenchseat,themanwentquiet,lookedupandfixedhiseyesonmine.Thenhiseyesfilledwithtearsandhesaidtome,“Godsentyou,didn’the?”Alittlesurprised,theonlyreplyIcouldthinkofwas,“Well...yes,heaskedmetotakeyouhome”.Muchtomyrelief,themanagreedtogetintomycar.Whiledrivinghimhome,heweptandpouredoutthesorrowsofhisheart.Sufferingmultipletragedies,heturnedtotheonlysourceofcomfortheknew:thebottle.Ipatientlycomfortedhimthateveryonewouldencountervariouskindsofdifficulties.Ifwefacedthempositively,allthedifficultieswoulddisappear.Athisdoor,hethankedmesincerelyandpromisednottodrinkagain.Fromthesteadylookinhiseyes,Ilearntalesson:Iflifebecomeshard,softenitwithrandomactsofkindness.【寫作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了作者在路上注意到一個(gè)男人躺在路邊人行道上的長(zhǎng)椅上，從他的樣子作者判斷出他是一個(gè)酒鬼，作者以為警察會(huì)幫助確保他在安全的地方過(guò)夜，但是警察繞過(guò)去了，沒(méi)理那個(gè)男人，作者后來(lái)去把車停好，走回那個(gè)男人身邊，伸手輕輕地?fù)u醒了他。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“他醒了，生氣地盯著我?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫那個(gè)男人看見(jiàn)作者后的反應(yīng)。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“使我松了一口氣的是，那個(gè)人同意上我的車。”可知，第二段可描寫那個(gè)人向作者傾訴自己的困難，作者開(kāi)導(dǎo)他。2.續(xù)寫線索：詢問(wèn)——男人的反應(yīng)——男人傾訴——安慰開(kāi)導(dǎo)——感激3.詞匯激活行為類①盯著看：fixone’seyeson/stareat②傾吐悲傷：pouroutthesorrows/revealthesorrows③安慰：comfortsb./consolesb.情緒類①驚訝：surprised/astonished②真誠(chéng)地：sincerely/genuinely【典型句式】[高分句型1]Ican’trememberexactlywhatIsaidtohim—probablysomethingnobetterthan,“Mate,areyouOK?”(由what引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句)[高分句型2]Ipatientlycomfortedhimthateveryonewouldencountervariouskindsofdifficulties.(由that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句)2.【參考范文】Finallyhetouchedsomething.Ashoe,thenanankle.Hefinallycametoher.HepulledTiaratowardhimgentlybutquickly.Shehadalreadypassedoutandwasn’tbreathing.Hetookherintohisarmsandmanagedtostandup.Hefelttheheatoftheflamesonhischeeks.Turningaround,hefoughtthroughthesmokeandranblindlyintotheblackness.Thenextthingheknew,hewasatthefrontdoor,thenoutside.SurrellputTiaradownontheporch.Avoicetoldhim,“Youhavetobreatheforher.”HestartedCPR—thefirsttimehe’deverdonesothoughheknewalittleaboutit.Thewomenstoodbehindhim,prayinganxiously.Soonasoot-filledcoughcamefromTiara’sthroat.Surrellgavefivemorebreaths.Shecoughedagain.Hereyelidsmovedabit.Hegaveonefinalbreath.Sheopenedhereyesandtookabreathonherown.Theireyesmet.Surrellhuggedhertightandsaid,“Uncle’sgotyou.”Thoughexhausted,hesmiledwithrelief.【寫作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了MichaelSurrell接到女兒打來(lái)的電話，知道隔壁著火了，他聽(tīng)見(jiàn)了房子里女人的呼救，說(shuō)有個(gè)叫Tiara的女孩困在里面，雖然呼叫了消防部門，他還是本能地沖進(jìn)房子救人，他患有慢性阻塞性肺病，濃煙對(duì)他來(lái)說(shuō)是致命的，他來(lái)到房子的二樓，搜索那個(gè)女孩的蹤跡，他有不祥的念頭，就是自己可能會(huì)死在那里。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“最后他碰到了什么東西。”可知，第一段可描寫MichaelSurrell找到了Tiara。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“一個(gè)聲音告訴他:“你必須為她做人工呼吸?！薄笨芍?，第二段可描寫MichaelSurrell如何為Tiara進(jìn)行急救。2.續(xù)寫線索：發(fā)現(xiàn)Tiara——帶Tiara到前門——急救——感受3.詞匯激活行為類①抱起某人：takesb.intoone’sarms/scoopsb.upinone’sarms②開(kāi)始心肺復(fù)蘇術(shù)：startCPR/beginCPR③喘口氣：takeabreath/catchone’sbreath情緒類①擔(dān)心：anxiously/worriedly②筋疲力盡：exhausted/dog-tired【典型句式】[高分句型1]HestartedCPR—thefirsttimehe’deverdonesothoughheknewalittleaboutit.(由thefirsttime引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句和though引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句)[高分句型2]Thoughexhausted,hesmiledwithrelief.(由though引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句和省略句)3.【參考范文】BonnetliftedNeeshaontohisbackforthelongpathdownthemountain.Afterthedogandthemanfellseveraltimes,BonnetthoughtofagoodwaytoholdNeesha.Hewrappedherinascarf.Assoonastheyreachedlevelground,thecoupletookthedogtoananimalrescueshelter.Thedoglostagreatdealofweightandwasveryweak,butsurprisinglyexceptforafewcutsandscrapes,thetoughdogwasingoodcondition.ThecouplecontactedherownerviatheinformationontheInternet.Neesha’sownerscouldhardlybelieveitwhentheylearnedtheirdoghadbeenfoundalive.“Wehadthoughtwewouldhavelostherforeverandwereverysad.Butnow,wearesorelievedandhappy,“Erinasaid.“Thousandsofwordscan’texpressourgratitudetothemfortheirgreateffortstobringNeeshabackhome.“Theyaresonice.Neeshaisreallyaluckydog,”saidtheexcitedwoman.Arandomactoflovemaymaketheworldawarmerplace.【寫作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了8歲的金毛Neesha是一只幸運(yùn)的狗。一天，Neesha跟著主人去戶外鍛煉，因被一只鹿驚嚇跑丟了。在沒(méi)有食物也沒(méi)有真正的棲身之所的情況下，Neesha獨(dú)自生活了兩周，在奄奄一息的時(shí)候，被兩位爬山的醫(yī)生發(fā)現(xiàn)。1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Bonnet把Neesha背在背上，沿著長(zhǎng)長(zhǎng)的山路往山下走去?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼憙晌会t(yī)生如何把Neesha帶下山以及他們?nèi)绾伟仓肗eesha。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)Neesha的主人得知他們的狗還活著時(shí)，他們簡(jiǎn)直不敢相信?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫Neesha的主人在獲悉Neesha獲救之后的感受以及對(duì)醫(yī)生夫婦的感激之情。2.續(xù)寫線索：用圍巾裹——到收容所——聯(lián)系主人——主人感激3.詞匯激活行為類①裹：wrap/bind②聯(lián)系：contact/getintouchwith③表達(dá)：express/show/convey情緒類①高興：happy/delighted②激動(dòng)：excited/thrilled【典型句式】[高分句型1]Assoonastheyreachedlevelground,thecoupletookthedogtoananimalrescueshelter.(由Assoonas引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句)[高分句型2]Wehadthoughtwewouldhavelostherforeverandwereverysad.(由that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句，省略了that)4.【參考范文】Beforeknowingwhathadhappened,Iwasstruckdown.AtthemomentIwasknockeddown,Iletoutaninstinctivescream.Myneighborsheardmescreaming,andpeopleranaroundme.Myparentscame,too,veryworriedaboutme,buttheydidn’tdaremoveme.Whenthedrivergotoutofthecar,hekeptapologizingtome.Ilayweakonthegroundandjustwantedtorest,soIsaidnothing.Someonecalledthepoliceandanambulancecameandrushedmetothehospital.Atthehospital,itwasdiscoveredthatluckilyIwasnotseriouslyinjured.DuringthedayswhenIwasinhospital,myparentsstayedwithmeeveryday.Mykindergartenclassmatesoftencametoplaygameswithme.Thedriverwhoknockedmedownsentmeanapologycard,flowersandmyfavoritesnack.Thedriversaid,“I’mreallysorry.Ididn’tmeantodoit.Pleaseforgiveme.”Itoldthedriveritwasmyfault,too.Ididn’tseewhatwasgoingonintheroadandranout.That’swhyIgothit.”Thedriverthank