2024屆北京東城區(qū)高三英語一模書面表達講評課件

東城一模書面表達假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華。今年世界地球日的主題為“Planetvs.Plastics”，你校將舉辦相關(guān)活動。你的筆友Jim發(fā)來郵件，詢問該活動的情況。請你用英文給他回復(fù)，內(nèi)容包括：1．活動內(nèi)容；2．你的任務(wù)。寫作目的：寫作背景：寫作對象：寫作內(nèi)容：介紹活動WorldEarthDay；學(xué)校舉辦活動筆友Jim能來參加嗎？要點1>要點2要點1：我們學(xué)校組織的與plastic相關(guān)的具體可實行的活動要點2：與活動相關(guān)聯(lián)的我的任務(wù)！時態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時、一般將來時作文中不要有任何圈、方框等標(biāo)記，分段直接開頭空5個字母。作文寫15行，第一段3行以內(nèi)，最后一段2行，詳寫要點6-7行，略寫要點3-4行。Schoolactivities:givelecturesontheseverityofplasticpollutiondo

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plasticsinourschool’ssciencelabholdaworkshoptorecycleplasticbagsandusethemtomakehandmadedecorations.pickupplasticbagsoncampusLinkingexpressions:asformytask/job;asa….,mytask/jobisto..Identity:theleader/thepresidentofthestudentsunion/labassistant/oneoftheorganizers/therepresentativeof…DearJim,

Howiseverythinggoing?Asyouknow,thethemeoftheWorldEarthDay2024is“Planetvs.Plastics”.Ourschoolisorganizinganeventtoraisestudents’awarenessofplasticpollutionandinspireustomakeadifference.Theeventwillfeaturesomeactivitieslikepresentationsbyenvironmentalexpertsanddiscussionsabouttheimpactofplasticpollutiononourplanet.Thehighlightoftheeventwillbeahands-onworkshop.Tohelpwithit,Iwillgotothenearbyneighborhoodwithmyclassmatestocollectplasticwaste,whichwillbecreativelymadeintoartworksintheworkshop.Afterthat,wewillgivethembacktotheneighbors.Iameagerfortheevent.Waitformypictures!Yours,LiHua暴露問題VS-debate，twopartsPl-plantJim-invite內(nèi)容過于寬泛,不可行，詳略不得當(dāng)-目的，時間，地點要點之間的內(nèi)在邏輯，和主題的相關(guān)度和可操作性時態(tài)人稱要點齊全詳略得當(dāng)語言準(zhǔn)確句式多樣表達得體條理清晰行文連貫優(yōu)秀

劉凱老師解析：內(nèi)容完整、豐富，與主題相關(guān)度高；語言有少許錯誤，條理清晰、行文連貫，有一定的交際。二檔上劉凱老師解析：內(nèi)容完整，與活動主題基本相關(guān)，句式略顯單一。及格

日常積累，有效遷移獨家范文賞析1：Ihopethisemailfindsyouwell.I'mdelightedtohearfromyouregardingourschool'supcomingactivitiesrelatedtoWorldEarthDay,withthisyear'sthemebeing"Planetvs.Plastics".Theactivitieswillincludeeducationalworkshopsonplasticpollution,beachclean-upcampaigns,andseminarsonsustainablelivingpractices.Myassignedtaskistocoordinatetherecyclingprogramatourschoolandraiseawarenessabouttheimportanceofreducingplasticwaste.I'mexcitedabouttheopportunitytocontributetosuchameaningfulcauseandmakeapositiveimpactonourenvironment.Lookingforwardtosharingmoreupdateswithyousoon.獨家范文賞析2：I'mgladtoreceiveyouremailinquiringaboutourschool'seventthemed"Planetvs.Plastics"forthisyear'sWorldEarthDay.Theeventwillbeavibrantone,filledwithvariousactivitiesaimedatraisingawarenessabouttheharmfuleffectsofplasticsonourplanet.Wewillhaveinformativelecturesontheenvironmentalimpactofplastics,interactiveworkshopswherestudentscanlearnaboutsustainablealternatives,andarecyclingdrivetoencourageeveryonetoreducetheirplasticwaste.Asformyrole,Ihavebeenassignedthetaskoforganizingtherecyclingdrive.Thisinvolvescoordinatingwithdifferentclassestocollectplasticwaste,arrangingforitsproperdisposal,andpromotingtheimportanceofrecyclingamongmypeers.Ibelievethisexperiencewillnotonlyhelpmegainvaluableorganizingskillsbutalsodeepenmyunderstandingoftheimportanceofprotectingourplanet.I'mlookingforwardtoparticipatinginthismeaningfuleventandhopeyoucanjoinusifpossible.獨家范文賞析3：Ihopethisemailfindsyouwell.I'mexcitedtosharedetailsaboutourschool'supcomingactivitiesincelebrationofWorldEarthDay,whichfocusesonthetheme"Planetvs.Plastics".Therewillbevariousengagingactivitiessuchaseducationalworkshopsonplasticpollution,beachclean-upcampaigns,andseminarsonsustainablelivingpractices.Notonlywilltheseactivitiesraiseawarenessaboutenvironmentalissues,buttheywillalsoencouragestudentstotakeactiontoprotectourplanet.Ibelievethatparticipatingintheseactivitieswillprovideuswithvaluableinsightsintotheimportanceofenvironmentalconservation.Myassignedtaskistocoordinatetherecyclingprogramatourschoolandtoadvocateforreduc