2024屆北京東城區(qū)高三英語一模書面表達講評課件

東城一模書面表達假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。今年世界地球日的主題為“Planetvs.Plastics”，你校將舉辦相關活動。你的筆友Jim發(fā)來郵件，詢問該活動的情況。請你用英文給他回復，內(nèi)容包括：1．活動內(nèi)容；2．你的任務。寫作目的：寫作背景：寫作對象：寫作內(nèi)容：介紹活動WorldEarthDay；學校舉辦活動筆友Jim能來參加嗎？要點1>要點2要點1：我們學校組織的與plastic相關的具體可實行的活動要點2：與活動相關聯(lián)的我的任務！時態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時、一般將來時作文中不要有任何圈、方框等標記，分段直接開頭空5個字母。作文寫15行，第一段3行以內(nèi)，最后一段2行，詳寫要點6-7行，略寫要點3-4行。Schoolactivities:givelecturesontheseverityofplasticpollutiondo

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plasticsinourschool’ssciencelabholdaworkshoptorecycleplasticbagsandusethemtomakehandmadedecorations.pickupplasticbagsoncampusLinkingexpressions:asformytask/job;asa….,mytask/jobisto..Identity:theleader/thepresidentofthestudentsunion/labassistant/oneoftheorganizers/therepresentativeof…DearJim,

Howiseverythinggoing?Asyouknow,thethemeoftheWorldEarthDay2024is“Planetvs.Plastics”.Ourschoolisorganizinganeventtoraisestudents’awarenessofplasticpollutionandinspireustomakeadifference.Theeventwillfeaturesomeactivitieslikepresentationsbyenvironmentalexpertsanddiscussionsabouttheimpactofplasticpollutiononourplanet.Thehighlightoftheeventwillbeahands-onworkshop.Tohelpwithit,Iwillgotothenearbyneighborhoodwithmyclassmatestocollectplasticwaste,whichwillbecreativelymadeintoartworksintheworkshop.Afterthat,wewillgivethembacktotheneighbors.Iameagerfortheevent.Waitformypictures!Yours,LiHua暴露問題VS-debate，twopartsPl-plantJim-invite內(nèi)容過于寬泛,不可行，詳略不得當-目的，時間，地點要點之間的內(nèi)在邏輯，和主題的相關度和可操作性時態(tài)人稱要點齊全詳略得當語言準確句式多樣表達得體條理清晰行文連貫優(yōu)秀

劉凱老師解析：內(nèi)容完整、豐富，與主題相關度高；語言有少許錯誤，條理清晰、行文連貫，有一定的交際。二檔上劉凱老師解析：內(nèi)容完整，與活動主題基本相關，句式略顯單一。及格

日常積累，有效遷移獨家范文賞析1：Ihopethisemailfindsyouwell.I'mdelightedtohearfromyouregardingourschool'supcomingactivitiesrelatedtoWorldEarthDay,withthisyear'sthemebeing"Planetvs.Plastics".Theactivitieswillincludeeducationalworkshopsonplasticpollution,beachclean-upcampaigns,andseminarsonsustainablelivingpractices.Myassignedtaskistocoordinatetherecyclingprogramatourschoolandraiseawarenessabouttheimportanceofreducingplasticwaste.I'mexcitedabouttheopportunitytocontributetosuchameaningfulcauseandmakeapositiveimpactonourenvironment.Lookingforwardtosharingmoreupdateswithyousoon.獨家范文賞析2：I'mgladtoreceiveyouremailinquiringaboutourschool'seventthemed"Planetvs.Plastics"forthisyear'sWorldEarthDay.Theeventwillbeavibrantone,filledwithvariousactivitiesaimedatraisingawarenessabouttheharmfuleffectsofplasticsonourplanet.Wewillhaveinformativelecturesontheenvironmentalimpactofplastics,interactiveworkshopswherestudentscanlearnaboutsustainablealternatives,andarecyclingdrivetoencourageeveryonetoreducetheirplasticwaste.Asformyrole,Ihavebeenassignedthetaskoforganizingtherecyclingdrive.Thisinvolvescoordinatingwithdifferentclassestocollectplasticwaste,arrangingforitsproperdisposal,andpromotingtheimportanceofrecyclingamongmypeers.Ibelievethisexperiencewillnotonlyhelpmegainvaluableorganizingskillsbutalsodeepenmyunderstandingoftheimportanceofprotectingourplanet.I'mlookingforwardtoparticipatinginthismeaningfuleventandhopeyoucanjoinusifpossible.獨家范文賞析3：Ihopethisemailfindsyouwell.I'mexcitedtosharedetailsaboutourschool'supcomingactivitiesincelebrationofWorldEarthDay,whichfocusesonthetheme"Planetvs.Plastics".Therewillbevariousengagingactivitiessuchaseducationalworkshopsonplasticpollution,beachclean-upcampaigns,andseminarsonsustainablelivingpractices.Notonlywilltheseactivitiesraiseawarenessaboutenvironmentalissues,buttheywillalsoencouragestudentstotakeactiontoprotectourplanet.Ibelievethatparticipatingintheseactivitieswillprovideuswithvaluableinsightsintotheimportanceofenvironmentalconservation.Myassignedtaskistocoordinatetherecyclingprogramatourschoolandtoadvocateforreduc