2025屆新高考英語沖刺復習讀后續(xù)寫+勵志成為科學家的姑娘努力克服困難參加小鎮(zhèn)科技比賽+個人成長類

2025屆新高考英語沖刺復習

個人成長類

勵志成為科學家的姑娘努力克服困難參加小鎮(zhèn)科技比賽原文分析讀后續(xù)寫原文審讀多篇范文呈現(xiàn)解題思路分析讀后續(xù)寫可積累文本1.原文賞析InasmalltowninIowa,sixteen-year-oldEmmaThompsonwas

anambitiousstudentwith

dreamsofbecomingascientist.Everyyear,thelocalhighschool

heldasciencefair,andEmmahadalwaysplacedhighbutnever

wonfirstplace.Thisyear,shewasdeterminedtochangethat.Emmaspentmonthsworkingonherproject,astudyonrenewable

energyusingalgae(藻類).Sherecordeddata,ranexperiments,andevenstayeduplateinto

thenightperfectingherpresentation.Herparentsoftenfoundher

workingatherlaptop,surroundedbybooksandlabequipment.Oneevening,aweekbeforethesciencefair,Emmawasworking

onherprojectwhenherlaptopscreensuddenlywentblack.Panicked,shetriedtorestartit,butitwasnouse.Allherdata,notes,andthepresentationwereonthatlaptop,andshehadn'tbackedup

herfiles.Desperate,

Emmatookthelaptoptothelocalrepairshop.The

techniciantoldheritwouldtakeatleastaweektorecoverthedata

ifitwasevenpossible.Emmalefttheshop,feelingasenseofdespair.Howcouldshepossiblyrecreateeverythinginjustafewdays?Returninghome,shesatonherbed.fightingbacktears.

Hermind

flashedbacktoaconversationshehadhadwithherscienceteacher,Mr.Reynolds,earlierintheyear.

Hetoldherthetruetestofascientistwasnotinhowtheyhandledsuccess,butinhowtheyovercame

failureandthatinnovationoftencamefromtheabilitytoadaptand

persevere.EmmaletMr.Reynolds’wordssinkin.Sherealizedthatthiswas

herchancetoproveherself

-asatruescientist.Determinedtomake

thebestofhersituation,shebegantogatheralltheresourcesshe

stillhad.Shefoundherhandwrittennotes,somescattered(散亂的)

papers,andreliedonhermemorytorecallkeypointsofherresearch.Paragraphl:Takingadeepbreath,Emmadecidedtostartover.Paragraph2:Afterthefair,thewinnersweretobeannounced.2、

原文審讀

紅色定從/定語；藍色賓從；黃色狀從，從句斜體；下劃線+標黃單詞+斜體

為需掌握積累單詞、短語；黑體標黃，非謂語；可積累部分為

embody；

注釋(定語從句)

InasmalltowninIowa,sixteen-year-oldEmmaThompsonwas

anambitiousstudentwith

dreamsofbecomingascientist(with復合結構).Everyyear,thelocalhighschool

heldasciencefair,andEmmahadalwaysplacedhighbutnever

wonfirstplace.Thisyear,shewasdeterminedto

changethat.Emmaspentmonthsworkingon

herproject,astudyonrenewable

energy(介詞短語做study的后置定語)

usingalgae(非謂語動詞做后置定語)(藻類).Sherecorded

data,ran

experiments,andevenstayeduplate

into

thenightperfecting

herpresentation(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作).Herparentsoftenfoundher

workingatherlaptop,surroundedby(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作)

booksandlabequipment.Oneevening,aweekbeforethesciencefair,Emmawasworking

onherprojectwhenherlaptopscreensuddenlywentblack(狀從).Panicked(非謂語動詞做狀語),shetriedtorestartit,butitwasnouse.Allherdata,notes,andthepresentationwereonthatlaptop,andshehadn'tbackedup

herfiles.Desperate(形容詞做狀語),

Emmatookthelaptoptothelocalrepairshop.The

techniciantoldheritwouldtakeatleastaweektorecoverthedata(賓從)

ifitwasevenpossible(狀從).Emmalefttheshop,

feelingasenseofdespair(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作).Howcouldshepossiblyrecreateeverythinginjustafewdays?Returning

home(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作),shesatonherbed,fightingbacktears(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作).

Hermind

flashedbacktoaconversation

shehadhadwithherscienceteacher(定從),Mr.Reynolds,earlierintheyear.

Hetoldherthetruetestofascientistwasnotin(賓從)

howtheyhandledsuccess(賓從),butinhowtheyovercame

failure(賓從)

andthatinnovationoftencamefromtheabilitytoadaptand

persevere(賓從).EmmaletMr.Reynolds’wordssinkin.Sherealized

thatthiswas

herchancetoproveherself

-asatruescientist(賓從).

Determinedtomake

thebestofhersituation(非謂語動詞短語做狀語),shebegantogatheralltheresources

she

stillhad(賓從).Shefoundherhandwrittennotes,somescattered(散亂的)

papers,andreliedon

hermemorytorecallkeypointsofherresearch.Paragraphl:Takingadeepbreath,Emmadecidedtostartover.Paragraph2:Afterthefair,thewinnersweretobeannounced.兩種構思方法“四到一行”“線索呼應”看聽想說做找出線索，前后呼應“兩法六句”

1.讀后續(xù)寫分類與構思分析

類型分析：該文章屬于情感轉折型（也可稱為逆境中的成長類型）讀后續(xù)寫。文章描述了Emma面臨電腦故障、項目數(shù)據丟失的困境，她從初始的絕望中找到力量，最終決定不放棄并重新開始。續(xù)寫的任務是呈現(xiàn)她如何克服困難，展現(xiàn)成長與堅持。

構思思路：1.情感遞進：

-從絕望到希望：文章中的Emma在電腦崩潰后的絕望情緒成為情感的起點，續(xù)寫要自然承接這種情感轉變，通過Emma的行動與心理轉折，展現(xiàn)她從失敗中汲取力量，最終展現(xiàn)出她堅韌不拔的決心。

2.行動與決心：

-如何應對困境：續(xù)寫要描繪Emma在知曉數(shù)據丟失后的種種應對措施，如回憶實驗過程、手工記錄數(shù)據、重新整理資料等具體行動。

-最終克服困難：最終的結果可以是她完成了項目，并且在科學展中取得了好成績，或許雖然沒有獲獎，但她收獲了自信和對科學的更深理解。3.人物性格與成長：

-Emma的堅韌：她的成長與堅韌是故事的核心，續(xù)寫應強調她如何在壓力下保持冷靜，重新開始，不斷前進。

布局與提煉框架：-第一段：

-情感轉折：Emma的絕望轉變?yōu)闆Q心，決定從頭開始。

-行動：收集手寫筆記，依賴記憶重建實驗數(shù)據。

-第二段：

-情感高潮：Emma完成項目，準備在科學展上展示，充滿信心。

-結果揭示：展示她在科學展中的表現(xiàn)，可以是獲獎，也可以是收獲了其他形式的認可。實施：-承接原文：

-續(xù)寫要注意情感上的承接，從“Emma感到絕望”自然過渡到她的決心與行動。

-細節(jié)的具體呈現(xiàn)：比如Emma如何利用零散的手寫資料重新構建數(shù)據，如何整理思路并進行項目展示。

續(xù)寫承接原文的注意事項：1.情感轉折：情感的轉變要自然流暢，避免生硬的轉變，展示Emma的心理變化。2.人物行為：繼承人物的堅韌與決心，確保行為符合她的性格。3.情感連接：從絕望到重新振作的過渡要清晰，并展示她的成長。4.細節(jié)描寫：注重環(huán)境細節(jié)，如她在夜晚整理數(shù)據、翻閱筆記的場景，以增強人物與環(huán)境的連接。故事山元素內容起點Emma的電腦崩潰，數(shù)據丟失，情感低谷。攀升Emma回憶老師的話，決定從頭開始，收集手寫筆記，嘗試重新做實驗。轉折點她決定從困境中找到新的方法，用有限的資源重做項目。高潮Emma完成了項目，并成功參加科學展。結局獲得某種形式的認可或反響，盡管未必獲得第一名，但她展示了自己的堅韌與創(chuàng)新。

續(xù)寫銜接點：-原文情感銜接：原文中Emma從絕望轉為希望的心理變化，續(xù)寫應體現(xiàn)這種內心轉變。-動詞與心理：在續(xù)寫中要展示Emma的努力與重拾信心的具體動作，例如“她開始翻閱手寫筆記”、“她恢復了數(shù)據并開始重新做實驗”。

關鍵句子與短語：-心情反映：

-“Shefeltasenseofdespair.”→續(xù)寫可以反映她如何從這種絕望中走出來，找到新的動力。

-“Thiswasherchancetoproveherself”→顯示Emma如何從內心恢復信心并采取實際行動。

-動作描寫：

-“Shebegantogatheralltheresourcesshestillhad.”→續(xù)寫時應通過具體的行動展現(xiàn)她如何挽回項目，利用有限資源。

-關鍵轉折點：

-“Takingadeepbreath,Emmadecidedtostartover.”→這是故事的關鍵轉折，標志著Emma決定不放棄并采取積極行動。

3.續(xù)寫動作、心理、環(huán)境描寫推薦例句

動作描寫：1.Emmaimmediatelyopenedherhandwrittennotes,flippingthroughpagestorecallcrucialdataandexperiments.2.Withherhandstrembling,Emmastartedorganizingthescatteredpapers,hopingtopiecetogetherthefragmentsofherresearch.3.Shetookadeepbreath,openedherlaptopagain,andbegantypingfuriously,determinedtofinishherprojectontime.

心理描寫：1.Emma’sheartracedwithanxiety,butsheknewshecouldn’tgiveupnow.Shehadtofinishwhatshestarted.2.Asshesatdownatherdesk,theweightofherfailureseemedunbearable,butherteacher’swordsechoedinhermind,remindingherthattruescientistsweredefinedbytheirabilitytopersevere.3.Shefeltaflickerofhopeignitewithinherassherealizedthat,thoughthetaskaheadwasdaunting,shehadthestrengthtofaceit.

環(huán)境描寫：1.TheroomwasquietexceptforthesoundofEmma’spenscratchingacrossthepaper,heronlycompanioninthelatehoursofthenight.2.Emma’ssmallbedroomwasfilledwithcrumpledpapersandopentextbooks,evidenceofherrelentlessdeterminationtofinishherproject.3.ThesoftglowofthedesklampilluminatedEmma’stiredfaceassheworkedtirelessly,surroundedbythechaosofherwork.

高級詞匯替換：1.Determined→Resolute,Tenacious,Unyielding2.Frustrated→Exasperated,Disheartened,Defeated3.Desperate→Despondent,Hopeless,Struggling語法現(xiàn)象：-過去完成時：表示某一過去動作發(fā)生在另一個過去動作之前。例如，“Shehadalwaysplacedhighbutneverwonfirstplace.”

-近義詞：hadcompleted,hadachieved

1.Emmahadbeenworkingformonthsbeforethefair.

2.Shehadneverseenherprojectfailuntilthatday.

-情態(tài)動詞：如“could”與“would”，用于表達能力和未來假設。例如，“Howcouldshepossiblyrecreateeverythinginjustafewdays?”

-近義詞：might,should

1.Shemightnotbeabletofinishintime.

2.Hewouldhavehelpedifhehadknown.

-定語從句：如“astudyonrenewableenergyusingalgae,”其中使用了“usingalgae”來修飾“study”。

-近義詞：whichusedalgae

-例句：

1.Theexperiment,whichtestedrenewableenergysources,wasasuccess.

2.Thepapersthatwerescatteredacrossthetablecontainedimportantinformation.語法加分點：1.被動語態(tài)：“Thedatawasrecoveredbythetechnician.”2.情態(tài)動詞：“Shemighthavebeenabletosavetheprojectifshehadbackedupherfiles.”3.過去完成時：“Emmahadalreadygatheredhernotesbeforethetechnicianarrived.”

語法加分點：1.虛擬語氣：“Ifshehadknownabouttheproblemearlier,shewouldhavebackedupthedata.”2.非限定性定語從句：“Theproject,whichwasherpassion,hadtoberestartedfromscratch.”

語法加分點：1.現(xiàn)在完成時：“Shehasbeenworkingonherprojectformonths.”2.動名詞：“Collectingdataandwritingreportstookmostofhertime.”PossibleAnswer1：

Takingadeepbreath,Emmadecidedtostartover.Thenightseemedendless,butsherefusedtoletthefailureconsumeher.Sheopenedherhandwrittennotes(與原文銜接)

and,

withasteadyhand,beganorganizingthescatteredpapers(與原文銜接).

Hermindraced,recalling

thekeyexperiments(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作)

shehadconducted(定從),thedata

shehadgathered(定從),andtheconclusions

shehaddrawn(定從).

Shehadalwaysdreamedofbecomingascientist,andthiswasthemomentshewouldproveherresilience(定從).

Thehoursflewby

asshepouredoverhernotes(狀從),determinedtorecreatetheproject(非謂語動詞短語做補語)

shehadworkedonformonths(定從).

Afterthefair,thewinnersweretobeannounced.

Althoughshedidn’twinfirstplace(狀從),Emmafeltasenseofaccomplishmentthatnoribboncoulddefine(定從).Herteacher,Mr.Reynolds,smiledatherfromthebackoftheroom,andEmmaknewinthatmoment

thatshehadpassedthetruetestofascientist(賓從):perseveranceinthefaceoffailure.PossibleAnswer2:無框架續(xù)寫Takingadeepbreath,Emmadecidedtostartover.Shetriedherbesttocalmdown,her

handsstilltrembling(獨立主格)

assheopenedhernotes

again(狀從).Theprojecthadseemedimpossibletocomplete,butsherefusedtogiveup.Asshesiftedthroughherhandwrittennotes(狀從),sherecalledthehoursspentexperimentingwithalgaeforrenewableenergy(非謂語動詞做后置定語).Eachdetail,eachresultcamebacktoher,andshebegantorebuildherpresentation.Thoughthetaskahead

seemeddaunting(狀從),Emma’sresolvestrengthened.Shewasnolongeroverwhelmedby

thesetback;instead,shewasdeterminedtoprove

thatatruescientistneverquits,nomatterthecircumstances.

Whenthesciencefairbegan,Emmawasfilledwithasenseofquietpride.Shehaddoneherbestandshownwhatshewascapableof(賓從).Thejudgeswalkedby,inspecting

theprojects(非謂語動詞短語做伴隨動作),andwhenthewinnerswereannounced(狀從),Emmadidn’twinfirstplace,butitdidn’tmatter.Asshepackeduphermaterials(狀從),she

feltanewsenseofconfidence.Herperseverancehadpaidoff.Mr.Reynoldsgaveheranencouraginglook,andEmmaknewshehadearnedsomethingfarmorevaluablethanaprize(賓從)—thebeliefinherselfandtheknowledgethatshecouldovercomeanyobstacle(定從).PossibleAnswer3無框架:Takingadeepbreath,Emmadecidedtostartover.Sheopenedhernotesandscatteredpapersacrossthedesk,hoping

toreconstructherproject(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作).Itwasn’teasy,andshe

felttheweightoffailurepressingdownonhershoulders(非謂語動詞短語做后置定語).But

herteacher’swordsechoedinhermind:"Atruescientistisn’tdefinedbytheirsuccesses,butbyhowtheyriseafterfailure(賓從)."Withreneweddetermination,sheworkedtirelessly,

using

everyresourceatherdisposal.Thehourspassed,butEmmadidn’tgiveup.Shehadlosttime,butshehadn’tlosthope.Andthatmadeallthedifference.

Thedayofthesciencefairarrived,andEmmastoodbeforeherproject,herheartpoundingwithexcitement(獨立主格).Asshepresentedherfindings(狀從),shespokewithnewfoundconfidence,

herpassionforscienceevidentineveryword(獨立主格).Whenthejudgesannouncedthewinners(狀從),Emmadidn’ttakehomefirstplace,butshe

feltadeep