Unit 8 Once Upon a Time.（話題寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)）（教師版）

Unit8OnceUponaTime.(話題寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)）【話題分析】講故事本單元的話題是“講故事”，與此相關(guān)的寫(xiě)作任務(wù)是能正確運(yùn)用一般過(guò)去時(shí)講述簡(jiǎn)單的故事。寫(xiě)作時(shí)常用onceuponatime開(kāi)頭，要注意動(dòng)詞過(guò)去式的變化。常用句型：Here's...by...Onceuponatime/Longago,therewas/liveda/an...Myfavouritestoryis...Ilikethestorybecause...【寫(xiě)作實(shí)例】“龜兔賽跑”是我們從小就耳熟能詳?shù)墓适?，?qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示寫(xiě)一個(gè)70詞左右的小故事。提示詞語(yǔ)：race賽跑wakeup醒來(lái)fallasleep入睡tortoise烏龜rabbit兔子thefinishingline終點(diǎn)線_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【思路點(diǎn)撥】【教材典句】Onceuponatime,anemperorlikedclothesverymuch.(SA,2a)Peoplepraisedtheclothesatfirst.(SA,2b)Butonlycleverpeoplecanseethem.(SA,2a)【經(jīng)典范文】Onceuponatime,therelivedatortoiseandarabbitintheforest.Oneday,theydecidedtohavearace.Lotsofanimalscametowatch.Atfirst,therabbitwasmuchfasterthanthetortoise.Therabbitthoughtthetortoisewastooslow,andshecouldwineasily.Soshedecidedtohaveabreak.Then,shefellasleep.Thetortoisewasslower,buthedidn'tstop.Whentherabbitwokeup,sheranveryfastbutitwastoolate.Shedidn'tgettothefinishinglinebeforethetortoise.【亮點(diǎn)點(diǎn)評(píng)】①用onceuponatime開(kāi)頭講述故事。②講述故事時(shí)恰當(dāng)運(yùn)用了atfirst和then,使文章連續(xù)性更強(qiáng)。③恰當(dāng)使用but連接句子,說(shuō)明烏龜雖然慢但不放棄?！就綑z測(cè)】1．假如你校?？谂e辦英語(yǔ)故事征文比賽。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面的提示,以”Theuglyduckling”為題,用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇80詞左右的英語(yǔ)短文參加比賽。提示:1.丑小鴨被兄弟姐妹嘲笑,農(nóng)場(chǎng)里的其他動(dòng)物也不愿和他做朋友;2.他離開(kāi)家,差點(diǎn)死于饑餓（hunger）和寒冷（cold）;3.春天來(lái)了,他遇到了一群天鵝（swan）,并且意識(shí)到自己也是一只美麗的天鵝;4.故事給我們的啟示。_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】TheuglyducklingOnceuponatime,therewasanuglyduckling.Becausehewasdifferentfromhissistersandbrothers,noonelikedhimonthefarm.Hissistersandbrothersoftenlaughedathimandotheranimalsdidn’twanttomakefriendswithhim.Helefthomeandbecamehomeless.Henearlydiedofhungerandcoldinwinter.Whenspringarrived,hemetlotsofswans.Hetriedtojointhemandfinallyrealizedhebecameabeautifulswan.Fromthestory,welearnthatweshouldbelieveinourselvesandnevergiveup.【詳解】[總體分析]①題材：本文是一篇記敘文。講述的是丑小鴨的故事；②時(shí)態(tài)：時(shí)態(tài)為“一般過(guò)去時(shí)”③提示：寫(xiě)作信息點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出，并且根據(jù)時(shí)間線進(jìn)行，注意不可以缺失信息點(diǎn)，故事給我們的啟示放在文章最后，注意從正面積極意義點(diǎn)題。[寫(xiě)作步驟]第一步，開(kāi)門見(jiàn)山，點(diǎn)出文章主人公——丑小鴨，根據(jù)題目要求寫(xiě)出丑小鴨遇到的各種困難；第二步，寫(xiě)出丑小鴨這個(gè)故事的精神內(nèi)涵——不放棄，相信自己，不因外界的評(píng)價(jià)而迷失自我……第三步，通讀全文，注意文中時(shí)態(tài)為一般過(guò)去時(shí)，注意時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，賓語(yǔ)從句等固定句式的使用，修改文中有錯(cuò)誤的地方。[亮點(diǎn)詞匯]①bedifferentfrom與……不同；②diedfohungerandcold死于饑餓和寒冷；③believeinourselvesandnevergiveup相信自己，永不放棄；[高分句型]①Whenspringarrived,hemetlotsofswans.（when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句）②Hetriedtojointhemandfinallyrealizedhebecameabeautifulswan.（賓語(yǔ)從句）2．神話故事（fairystory）作為中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)文化的一部分,對(duì)于青少年了解民族文化及歷史具有一定意義。假設(shè)EnglishDaily網(wǎng)站中的Culture版塊請(qǐng)你以“AStoryIKnow”為題，介紹一則神話故事及故事給你帶來(lái)的影響和啟發(fā)。要求：1,條理清晰，內(nèi)容完整，語(yǔ)句通順，書(shū)寫(xiě)工整；2.文中請(qǐng)勿提及你的真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校；3.不少于80詞。參考詞匯：legend（n.傳說(shuō)）；national（adj.民族的）AStoryIKnow__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】 AStoryIKnowTherearemanytraditionalstoriesinChina.Myfavoritestoryis“Chang’eFlyingtotheMoon”.Longlongago,HouYigotaspecialmedicinefromagoddessasarewardafterheshotdownninesuns.PengMengwantedtogetitwhenHouYiwasnothome.TostopPengMeng,Chang’ehadtotakeitandsheflewuptothemoon.HouYimissedhersomuchthathebecamereallysadeverynight.Onenight,hefoundthatthemoonwassobrightandroundthathesawhiswifethere.Hequicklylaidoutherfavoritefruitsanddessertsinthegarden.Ireallylovethisancientmythologybecauseitshowsourstrongdesireforfamilyreunionandlove.【詳解】[總體分析]①題材：本文是一篇話題作文；②時(shí)態(tài)：時(shí)態(tài)為“一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)”，講述故事用“一般過(guò)去時(shí)”；③提示：寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)已給出，考生應(yīng)注意不要遺漏信息提示的內(nèi)容，適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，并且突出寫(xiě)作的要點(diǎn)。[寫(xiě)作步驟]第一步，表明寫(xiě)作意圖。直接說(shuō)明要介紹什么故事；第二步，具體闡述寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容。重點(diǎn)介紹故事的內(nèi)容；第三步，書(shū)寫(xiě)結(jié)語(yǔ)。介紹故事給你帶來(lái)的影響和啟發(fā)。[亮點(diǎn)詞匯]①special特別的②reward報(bào)酬③mythology神話④familyreunion家庭團(tuán)聚[高分句型]①Longlongago,HouYigotaspecialmedicinefromagoddessasarewardafterheshotdownninesuns.(時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句)②HouYimissedhersomuchthathebecamereallysadeverynight.(結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句)3、下面是一個(gè)名叫《神筆馬良》的神話故事，故事后半部分已給出。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面提供的故事前半部分的四個(gè)信息，寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文，將故事補(bǔ)充完整。1.從前，有個(gè)叫馬良的孩子，他從小喜歡畫(huà)畫(huà)(drawpictures)?？墒羌依锔F困，他買不起筆(brush)。2.于是，他拿起樹(shù)枝，在山上、在河邊、家里畫(huà)畫(huà)。從不間斷，很快他就畫(huà)得非常好。3.一天晚上，一個(gè)白發(fā)神仙老人出現(xiàn)(appear)在他面前，送給他一支金光燦燦的神筆(goldenbrush)。他馬上用筆畫(huà)了一只鳥(niǎo)，鳥(niǎo)竟活了過(guò)來(lái)(becomealive)飛走了(flyaway)。他又畫(huà)了一條魚(yú)，魚(yú)也活了起來(lái)，在水里歡快地游。4.馬良很激動(dòng)，決定幫助村子里窮苦善良的人們。當(dāng)他們需要什么，馬良就高興地給他們畫(huà)什么。消息傳到(cometo)皇帝那里，他人把馬良抓了去。命令馬良給他畫(huà)株搖錢樹(shù)，否則就要?dú)⒌赳R良。馬良畫(huà)了一株又高又大的搖錢樹(shù)在大海中央一個(gè)小島上，他也畫(huà)了一條大船，等皇帝帶人上了大船后。馬良不停地畫(huà)風(fēng)，風(fēng)把船吹翻了皇帝也死了。馬良后來(lái)到底去了什么地方，人們不得而知。作文要求：1.不能照抄原文：不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學(xué)校的真實(shí)名稱和學(xué)生的真實(shí)姓名。2.語(yǔ)句連貫，詞數(shù)80個(gè)左右。作文的開(kāi)頭和故事的后半部分已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)、也不必抄寫(xiě)在答題卡上。3.書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范，整潔。Onceuponatime,therewasasmallboycalledMaLiang.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenewscametotheempire.Hecaughthimandorderedhimtodrawatreethatcouldproducemoney.Orhewouldkillhim,MaLiangdrewashipandthetreeinanislandinthemiddleofthesea.Whentheempireandhismengotontheship,hedrewthestrongwind.Itblewtheshipstronglyandtheshipsank.Theempiredied.MaLiangescapedandnobodyknewwherehewas.【答案】Onceuponatime,therewasasmallboycalledMaLiang.Helikeddrawing.Hedrewpictureswithsticksbecausehehadnomoneytobuyabrush.Hedrewpicturesonthemountains,bytheriverandathome.Soon,Hedrewverywell.Oneday,anoldmanappearedandgavehimagoldenbrushandsaidtohim,“Onlydrawpicturesforpoorpeople.”Aftersayingthat,theoldmandisappeared.MaLiangdrewabirdwiththebrushandthenitbecamealiveandflewaway.Heknewthatthegoldenbrushwasamagicone.Hefeltveryexcited.Sohewentbacktothevillageanddecidedtodrawforpoorpeople.Whentheyneededsomething,hewouldhappilydrawsomethingforthem.Thenewscametotheempire.Hecaughthimandorderedhimtodrawatreethatcouldproducemoney,orhewouldkillhim.MaLiangdrewashipandthetreeinanislandinthemiddleofthesea.Whentheempireandhismengotontheship,hedrewthestrongwind.Itblewtheshipstronglyandtheshipsank.Theempiredied.MaLiangescapedandnobodyknewwherehewas.【詳解】1.題干解讀：文章屬于材料作文，主要是描寫(xiě)神話故事《神筆馬良》，內(nèi)容可以根據(jù)題目中給出的提示進(jìn)行描述。寫(xiě)作時(shí)要運(yùn)用正確的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)，要選用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和短語(yǔ)。2.寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)：文章主要用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，人稱用第三人稱展開(kāi)詳細(xì)介紹。描述馬良得到神筆之前以及得到神筆之后都做了什么的故事。寫(xiě)作時(shí)語(yǔ)言要簡(jiǎn)單易懂，文章結(jié)構(gòu)要完整，多使用簡(jiǎn)單詞語(yǔ)描述，意思要通俗易懂。4．童話故事深受孩子們的喜愛(ài)。你讀過(guò)哪些童話故事？請(qǐng)把你印象最深的一部寫(xiě)下來(lái)，和大家一起分享，80詞左右。要求：1.What’sthenameofit?2.What’sthestoryabout?3.Whydoyoulikeit?_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】WhenIwasalittlechild，myparentsoftentoldmemanyfunnystories.Amongalltheinterestingstories，Ilikedfairytalesmost.OnewasTheThreeLittlePigs.Therewerethreelittlepigsinthestory.Theybuilttheirownhouses.Thefirstonebuiltastrawhouse.Thesecondonebuiltahousemadeofwood.Thethirdonebuiltahousewithbricks.Thenawolfcame.Hedestroyedthefirstpig'shouseandthesecondpig'shouseeasily.Buthecouldn'tdestroythethirdpig'shousebecauseitwasverystrong.Itteachesustoworkhard.Therearealsomanycolorfulpicturesinthebook.Doyouwanttoreadit?【詳解】童話故事深受孩子們的喜愛(ài)。你讀過(guò)哪些童話故事？請(qǐng)把你印象最深的一部寫(xiě)下來(lái)，和大家一起分享，80詞左右。時(shí)態(tài)為一般過(guò)去態(tài)和現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，注意時(shí)態(tài)和時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配。動(dòng)筆前可以按照材料內(nèi)容列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，寫(xiě)出關(guān)鍵單詞。寫(xiě)作中注意語(yǔ)義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系。上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞。【點(diǎn)睛】這篇短文使用了一些固定句式和短語(yǔ)，為文章增色不少。學(xué)習(xí)中注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語(yǔ),如：hefirstonebuiltastrawhouse.Thesecondonebuiltahousemadeofwood.Thethirdonebuiltahousewithbricks.寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性,更富有條理。5．請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的故事梗概，發(fā)揮想象力，以“Twolittlepigs”為題寫(xiě)一則小故事。時(shí)間：從前地點(diǎn)：森林里人物：幸福的豬媽媽和兩只小豬情節(jié)：兩只小豬長(zhǎng)大了，豬媽媽決定讓他們走出森林，到城市里看一看……提示詞：growup長(zhǎng)大要求：60個(gè)詞左右。開(kāi)頭句已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。TwolittlepigsOnceuponatime,thereweretwolittlepigs__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Sotheyreturnedtotheforestandenjoyedtheirlife.【答案】TwolittlepigsOnceuponatime,thereweretwolittlepigs.Onewasblackandtheotherwaswhite.Theylivedhappilywiththeirmotherintheforest.Whentheygrewup,theirmotherdecidedtoletthemgooutoftheforestandlookaroundthecity.Andthentheylefthomewithsomefood.Whentheyarrivedinthecity,theynoticedpeopleinthecitywerenotreallyhappy.Sotheyreturnedtotheforestandenjoyedtheirlife.【詳解】[總體分析]①題材：本文是一篇材料作文；②時(shí)態(tài)：時(shí)態(tài)為“一般過(guò)去時(shí)”；③提示：寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)已給出，要求根據(jù)提示內(nèi)容進(jìn)行寫(xiě)作，適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié)，并突出寫(xiě)作重點(diǎn)。[寫(xiě)作步驟]根據(jù)故事梗概，結(jié)合文章的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾，寫(xiě)符合情景的小故事。[亮點(diǎn)詞匯]①intheforest在森林里②decidetodosth決定做某事③lookaround環(huán)顧四周④arrivein到達(dá)[高分句型]①Whentheygrewup,theirmotherdecidedtoletthemgooutoftheforestandlookaroundthecity.（when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句）②Whentheyarrivedinthecity,theynoticedpeopleinthecitywerenotreallyhappy.（when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句。【真題鏈接】1．（22-23七年級(jí)下·山東濰坊·期末）同學(xué)們，守株待兔是我們非常熟悉的古代寓言故事。請(qǐng)你試著用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)下來(lái)，寄給《21世紀(jì)英語(yǔ)》雜志社，傳播中國(guó)故事，讓世界上更多的人了解中國(guó)文化。dofarmworkranout...bumpastumppickupwait要求：1.根據(jù)提示寫(xiě)句子，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，使故事流暢；2.不要出現(xiàn)考生本人信息；3.不少于70詞。參考詞匯：樹(shù)樁stump，農(nóng)作物cropsOnceuponatime,therewasafarmer.Everyday.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________.【答案】Onceuponatimetherewasafarmer.Everydaytheycouldonlyhaveenoughfoodtoeatandenoughclothingtowear.Oneday,whenhewasdoingfarmworkinthefield,ascaredhareranout.Itbumpedastumpanddied.Hepickeditup.Thatday,heatehisfill.Fromthatdayon,henolongerwentinforfarmingagain.Frommorningtillnight,hestayedbythatstump,waitingformiraclestotakeplaceagain.【詳解】[總體分析]①題材：本文是一篇看圖作文；②時(shí)態(tài)：時(shí)態(tài)為“一般過(guò)去時(shí)”；③提示：寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)已給出，考生應(yīng)注意圍繞題圖和“信息提示”寫(xiě)出“守株待兔”這個(gè)寓言故事。[寫(xiě)作步驟]第一步，介紹故事的主人公；第二步，講述故事發(fā)生的經(jīng)過(guò)；第三步，講述故事的結(jié)果。[亮點(diǎn)詞匯]①pickup拾起②nolonger不再③takeplace發(fā)生[高分句型]①Frommorningtillnight,hestayedbythatstump,waitingformiraclestotakeplaceagain.（使用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞）②Onedayinlateautumn,whenhewasdoingfarmworkinthefield,ascaredhareranout.（使用when引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句）2．（22-23七年級(jí)下·山東青島·期末）你聽(tīng)過(guò)《狐貍和葡萄》的故事嗎？請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面的圖片和提示詞，用五句話簡(jiǎn)明扼要地跟大家分享這個(gè)故事。要求：所寫(xiě)句子必須和圖片內(nèi)容相關(guān)。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】Onehotsummer’sday,afoxwashungryandthirstywhenhesawsomegrapes.Thegrapeslookedsodeliciousthathewantedtoeatthemverymuch.Sohejumpedandjumped.Butthegrapeswerehigh,hecouldn’treachsome.Finally,hehadtogiveupandsaid“Iamsurethegrapesaresour.”【詳解】[總體分析]①題材：本文是一篇看圖作文；②時(shí)態(tài)：時(shí)態(tài)為“一般過(guò)去時(shí)”；③提示：考生根據(jù)圖片上的內(nèi)容描寫(xiě)，適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié)，并突出寫(xiě)作重點(diǎn)。[寫(xiě)作步驟]第一步，總述圖片上的內(nèi)容；第二步，具體介紹圖片上狐貍的行為；第三步，介紹結(jié)果。[亮點(diǎn)詞匯]①havetogiveup不得不放棄②besure確定[高分句型]①Thegrapeslookedsodeliciousthathewantedtoeatthemverymuch.（so...that引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句）3．（22-23七年級(jí)下·湖北·期末）從前，森林里住著狐貍媽媽和小狐貍。有一天小狐貍餓了，狐貍媽媽去給他找食物，后來(lái)發(fā)生了什么事呢?媽媽去了山里的一個(gè)村子，終于找到了食物。它拿著葡萄（grapes），趕快往家跑，快到家時(shí)，它聽(tīng)到了獵狗（huntingdog）的叫聲，馬上大聲喊道:“孩子!快跑!”小狐貍聽(tīng)見(jiàn)媽媽的聲音，它趕快跑進(jìn)了山，結(jié)果狐貍媽媽被獵人（hunter）抓到殺死了。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以上所給情節(jié)，寫(xiě)篇70詞左右的英語(yǔ)小作文。【答案】Onceuponatime,therewasafoxandherbabyintheforest.Onedaythebabyfoxwasveryhungryandcried.Motherfoxdecidedtogetsomefoodforherbaby.Soshewenttoavillageinamountain.Shegotsomegrapesandhurriedtoherhouse.Whenshewasnearthehouse,suddenlysheheardthenoisesofthehuntingdog.Sherealisedthehunterwascomingtokillherson.Motherfoxshouted,“Mydearson,itisdangerous.Runaway.Bequick.”BabyfoxranawaybutMotherfoxwascaughtandkilledbythehunter.【詳解】本文需要寫(xiě)一則英文小故事，情節(jié)已經(jīng)給出，重點(diǎn)的單詞也相應(yīng)給了出來(lái)，要注意在描述過(guò)去的事情的時(shí)候正確使用過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)，可以用到的短語(yǔ)搭配表達(dá)有：Onceuponatime曾經(jīng)；decidedtodo決定去做；getsomefoodfor為…找一些食物；avillageinamountain大山里的一個(gè)小村莊；hurriedto匆忙去…；nearthehouse在房子附近；Runaway跑掉。總體來(lái)說(shuō)寫(xiě)作難度不大，重點(diǎn)是正確把握時(shí)態(tài)的應(yīng)用，語(yǔ)句連貫，這篇范文完成了要求的寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。4．（24-25八年級(jí)上·遼寧沈陽(yáng)·期末）假定你是學(xué)生李輝，即將參加學(xué)校英語(yǔ)社團(tuán)組織的以“古代中國(guó)智慧故事”為主題的征文活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下提示寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)文章參加比賽。內(nèi)容包括：1.司馬光和小伙伴們玩耍；2.一個(gè)小伙伴掉進(jìn)水缸（watertank）中；3.司馬光砸破水缸救出小伙伴。注意：1.詞數(shù)80～100；2.可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3.文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名及學(xué)校名稱。SimaGuangbrokethewatertank________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】MynameisLiHui,andtodaywanttosharewithyouanancientChinesewisdomstoryaboutSimaGuang.Oneday,SimaGuangandhisfriendswereplayinghappilyinacourtyard.Suddenly,oneofhisfriendsfellintoalargewatertank.Theotherchildrenweresofrightenedthattheydidn’tknowwhattodonext.ButSimaGuangquicklylookedaroundandsawabigstonenearby.Hepickedupthestoneandhitthewatertankhard.Thetankbroke.Thewaterinitranoversoonandtheboywassavedatlast.Thisstoryteachesusthatindifficultsituations,weshouldstaycalmandthinkofcleversolutions.【詳解】[總體分析]①題材：本文是一篇材料作文；②時(shí)態(tài)：時(shí)態(tài)以“一般過(guò)去時(shí)”為主；③提示：寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)已給出，應(yīng)注意不要遺漏“司馬光砸缸”故事的介紹要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)添加細(xì)節(jié)，并突出寫(xiě)作重點(diǎn)。[寫(xiě)作步驟]第一步，表明寫(xiě)作意圖，點(diǎn)明主