2025年廣東廣州高三一模英語續(xù)寫分析及范文課件

2025廣州英語一模讀后續(xù)寫分析及下水文目錄CONTENT010203故事原文續(xù)寫分析下水文與原文答案評析PART故事原文01第二節(jié)(滿分25分)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。LiMingwasa17-year-oldexchangestudentfromChina.Withaheartfullofdreamsandalittlebitofnervousness,heflewtotheUnitedKingdomtostartanewadventure.HehadalwaysimaginedwhatitwouldbeliketowalkthroughthehistoricstreetsofEnglandandmeetpeoplefromdifferentpartsoftheworld.Butassoonashearrivedathisnewschool,hefeltalittleunsure.Inhisnewclass,LiMingstruggledtostartconversationswithhisBritishclassmates.Theyspokesoquicklyandusedwordsandphraseshedidn'tunderstand.Whenhetriedtojointheirconversations,hefeltshyabouthisaccentandworriedthathemightsaysomethingwrong.HealsonoticedthatBritishstudentsseemedtovaluetheirpersonalspacemorethanhewasusedto,whichmadeitevenharderforhimtofindtherightmomenttostartameaningfultalk.Groupworkwasevenharder.Duringagroupprojectinliteratureclass,LiMinghadtroubleexplaininghisideasclearly,feelinglikehisideasweregettinglostintranslation.Andhestartedtodoubthimself. Socialeventsoutsideofclasswerejustasdifficult.Ataschoolparty,LiMingwatchedhisclassmateslaugh,dance,andsingalongtothelatestpopsongs.Hefeltleftout,notknowingthesongsorthedancemoves.Hewantedtojointhefun,butthefearoflookingsillykepthimonthesidelines.Oneday,theschoolannouncedatalentshow,LiMing,whopracticedtraditionalChinesekungfu,reallywantedtotry.Whilehewashesitating,agroupofBritishstudentsinterestedinculturalperformancesinvitedhimtojointhem.LiMingagreed.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Duringtheirpractice,thegroupwasamazedbyLiMing’sChinesekungfu.___________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Aftertheshow,LiMingnoticedsomechangeshappening._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________第二節(jié)(滿分25分)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。LiMingwasa17-year-oldexchangestudentfromChina.Withaheartfullofdreamsandalittlebitofnervousness,heflewtotheUnitedKingdomtostartanewadventure.HehadalwaysimaginedwhatitwouldbeliketowalkthroughthehistoricstreetsofEnglandandmeetpeoplefromdifferentpartsoftheworld.Butassoonashearrivedathisnewschool,hefeltalittleunsure.Inhisnewclass,LiMingstruggledtostartconversationswithhisBritishclassmates.Theyspokesoquicklyandusedwordsandphraseshedidn'tunderstand.Whenhetriedtojointheirconversations,hefeltshyabouthisaccentandworriedthathemightsaysomethingwrong.HealsonoticedthatBritishstudentsseemedtovaluetheirpersonalspacemorethanhewasusedto,whichmadeitevenharderforhimtofindtherightmomenttostartameaningfultalk.Groupworkwasevenharder.Duringagroupprojectinliteratureclass,LiMinghadtroubleexplaininghisideasclearly,feelinglikehisideasweregettinglostintranslation.Andhestartedtodoubthimself. Socialeventsoutsideofclasswerejustasdifficult.Ataschoolparty,LiMingwatchedhisclassmateslaugh,dance,andsingalongtothelatestpopsongs.Hefeltleftout,notknowingthesongsorthedancemoves.Hewantedtojointhefun,butthefearoflookingsillykepthimonthesidelines.Oneday,theschoolannouncedatalentshow,LiMing,whopracticedtraditionalChinesekungfu,reallywantedtotry.Whilehewashesitating,agroupofBritishstudentsinterestedinculturalperformancesinvitedhimtojointhem.LiMingagreed.續(xù)寫首段提示續(xù)寫第二段提示Paragraph2:Aftertheshow,LiMingnoticedsomechangeshappening.02Paragraph1:Duringtheirpractice,thegroupwasamazedbyLiMing’sChinesekungfu.01續(xù)寫提示1【文本主旨】本文講述了LiMing作為交換生前往英國開啟學習生涯的新一片段，卻遭遇了種種culturalshock，可是沒想到學校的一次才藝秀，改變了他的境遇，立足于源遠流長、精深的中國文化，讓他找回了自信，文化交流也讓他融入了新的集體和生活。LiMing17歲的李明開啟新旅城，前往英國作為留學交換生，心里既懷著期待又有些許小緊張。到英國之后，一切又有一點不確定。種種culturalshocks課上，李明很難聽懂同學，交流海派出糗，同學們很注重個人空間，很難抓住時機融入；小組活動更難參與，自己很難表述自己；社交活動也很難，似乎跟不上同學的流行文化，想加入又怕看起來很傻。轉(zhuǎn)機atalentshow學校要辦talentshow,李明躍躍欲試，他的猶豫被一群熱愛文化表演的同學注意到了，并力邀他加入…2故事3.Whataretheplotsgiveninthereadingpart?（給出信息）17歲的中國學生LiMing在英國做交換生，滿懷期待和小緊張開啟了新旅程，他幻想著，可到了新學校又有點不安?！谛掳嗬铮υ噲D和同學交流，聽不懂，怕出錯，注重隱私空間的同學讓他很難抓住切入時機；→小組活動也艱難，李明很難用英語表述自己的想法，讓他開始自我懷疑→社交活動也糟糕，看著同學們笑跳唱，感覺自己落伍了，想加入又怕出糗，只能讓他置身事外；→一天，學校宣布舉辦才藝秀，一直練習功夫的李明躍躍欲試，猶豫的他被熱愛文化活動的團體力邀，他答應(yīng)了。Paragraph1:Sallystarteddaydreamingaboutjoiningotherschoolclubs.________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Recallinghermother’swords,Sallywaswokenfromherdaydream._____________________________________________________

TheplottingWho:LiMing,Britishclassmates,Where:aschoolinUKWhen:sometime,

oneday.What:LiMing,anexchangestudent,flewtoUKtostarthiscareer,withmanyimaginationsanduncertainty.Whileinhisnewclass,hefeltithardtoadapttothenewenvironment.Hecouldn’tunderstandhisclassmates,fearedmakingmistakes,orfindgoodchancestostartatalk.Ingroupwork,hehadtroublegettinghisideaacrosstoclassmatesinEnglish,andinsocialevents,hethoughthewasoutofdate,leftoutbytheirpopculture.Oneday,theschoolwastolaunchatalentshow.LiMingwaseagertotrybuthesitatedtojoin.Agroupofculturefansinvitedhimtojointhem.How:Shebegantoshowhistalentandconquerthemwithhisuniquecultures.

TheplottingBriefintroduction/Backgroundinfo:LiMing,anexchangestudentwenttoUK,withalotofanticipationsandalittlenervousness.Thebeginning:Uponarrivingnewschools,hefeltlittleuncertainties.Thedevelopment:Whileinhisnewclass,hefeltithardtoadapttothenewenvironment.Hecouldn’tunderstandhisclassmates,fearedmakingmistakes,orfindgoodchancestostartatalk.Ingroupwork,hehadtroublegettinghisideaacrosstoclassmatesinEnglish.Insocialevents,hethoughthewasoutofdate,leftoutbytheirpopculture.OneClimax:Oneday,theschoolwastolaunchatalentshow.LiMingwaseagertotrybuthesitatedtojoin.Agroupofculturefansinvitedhimtojointhem.Thebiggerclimax:Itdependsonyou….PART續(xù)寫分析02單擊此處添加標題根據(jù)原文，本續(xù)寫段落最好通過緊密的邏輯銜接、細膩的情感描寫、合理的情節(jié)想象與開頭的伏筆呼應(yīng)，將LiMing的個人經(jīng)歷用自身才藝打動同學升華為燦爛中國文化搭起溝通橋梁，促進跨文化交流。既要滿足情節(jié)的合理性，又要賦予故事深度，詮釋人與人和諧共進及中國文化名片的自豪和魅力。LiMing在練習當中，展現(xiàn)中華武術(shù)的魅力，驚艷眾人，帶著眾人表演中國武術(shù)，架起溝通橋梁，打通隔閡，文化就是普世的名片，這是小溝通，嶄露頭角，開始破冰。情節(jié)合理性01LiMing想融入，卻又有少年合理的顧慮，那么在武術(shù)這個文化魅力的加持下，自身獲得了自信，也征服了同學的心，應(yīng)該是圍繞他組件武術(shù)表演節(jié)目，收獲了有效溝通和信心。情感鋪墊02續(xù)寫首段分析注意到變化演出成功后，才會有量變到質(zhì)變，變化是內(nèi)心的，擴展到生活學習的方方面面，對照原文，要對三個方面進行闡述，課堂，小組，和社交。0102LiMing由最初的害羞，害怕，甚至自我懷疑，逐漸過渡到自信和自豪，這通過LiMing在第二段當中的具體活動中得到體現(xiàn)。情感升華續(xù)寫第二段分析單擊此處添加標題首尾呼應(yīng)：老板邀請Rita“隨時探望Max”（visitthedoganytime），既為故事增添開放性，也暗示Rita未來可能通過與小狗互動來延續(xù)善舉，與前文“童年創(chuàng)傷”形成閉環(huán)。LiMing，在前文中開啟交換生生涯，遇上種種文化沖擊，那么利用自身中華文化的特色和魅力，打通交際隔閡，架起溝通橋梁，逐漸克服之前前文的“種種困難”形成閉環(huán)。首尾呼應(yīng)：

單擊此處添加文本具體內(nèi)容，簡明扼要地闡述您的觀點。根據(jù)需要可酌情增減文字，以便觀者準確地理解您傳達的思想。單擊此處添加文本具體內(nèi)容，簡明扼要地闡述您的觀點。根據(jù)需要可酌情增減文字，以便觀者準確地理解您傳達的思想。單擊此處添加文本具體內(nèi)容，簡明扼要地闡述您的觀點。根據(jù)需要可酌情增減文字，以便觀者準確地理解您傳達的思想。單擊此處添加文本具體內(nèi)容單擊添加標題續(xù)寫情感走向情感鏈條：anticipation/imagination+alittlenervous（flewtoUK）→uncertain（arriveatnewschool）→shy+worried（innewclass）→doubthimself+unconfident（groupwork）→fearandfeelleftout（socialevent）→hesitant(launchoftalentshow)，前文展示了LiMing初期在異鄉(xiāng)他國的種種情感沖擊?！m(xù)寫需要收復(fù)失地→自信（confident）→自豪(proud)→和諧（harmonious）情感走向與主題深化1.把握內(nèi)容要點所給首句：閱讀每一段中的首句，進行布局、解讀。在布局第一段的內(nèi)容時，要兼顧兩段的首句：第二段的首句決定著第一段的走向。1:

Duringtheirpractice,thegroupwasamazedbyLiMing’sChinesekungfu.2:Aftertheshow,LiMingnoticedsomechangeshappening.Step2審題與構(gòu)思注意：第一段續(xù)寫要巧妙銜接第二段，陳述方案一定要通過-對應(yīng)好消息。Step2:Outlinethepossibleplotsorevents

ineachparagraph.1.所續(xù)寫的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右,主線清楚;描寫視角是第三人視角稱LiMing；2.關(guān)鍵人物和角色隨故事情節(jié)邏輯發(fā)展轉(zhuǎn)變自然，人稱保持一致;3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好;用過去時態(tài)；4.確定好續(xù)寫情節(jié)，用合理句型和直接引語表達;原文段末交代talentshow，在續(xù)寫中都需要交代，第一：準備talentshow當中展示了精湛武術(shù)，迷倒無數(shù)，組隊進行talentshow表演；第二：一武（舞臺）成名，打開任督二脈，從此交換生涯開掛，所有問題慢慢迎刃而解，。文章主題：強烈的文化認同感促進自我意識和自信，讓個人能從容面對自身經(jīng)歷和外界交流。Astrongsenseofculturalidentity______________________________,enablingindividuals______________________________________withtheoutsideworld.中華文化的魅力助力少年找回自信，在異國文化生活中，克服交流障礙，彌合文化隔閡，與異國文化和諧共生。ThecharmofChineseculture_________________________________,overcomecommunicationbarriersinaforeignculturalenvironment,________________________________,andachieveharmoniouscoexistencewithdiversecultures.theawarenessofculturalidentity---buildingcross-culturalconfidence---overcomingcommunicationbarriers---embracingandnavigatingculturaldiversitywithassurancefostersself-awarenessandconfidencetonavigatetheirexperiencesandinteractionsempowersyoungindividualstoregainconfidencebridgeculturaldividesWhattowrite?段1首句:1.Duringtheirpractice,thegroupwasamazedbyLiMing’sChinesekungfu.1.HowdidLiMing’skungfushowstunnedthem?(既然李明的功夫秀驚艷到他們，能否描寫下李明的功夫)2.HowdidLiMingfeelandwhatwerethegroup’sresponses?（描寫下李明得到的贊許，表演的心態(tài)和文化小組的反應(yīng)）3.Whatweretheirfurtherexchangesforthetalentshowandpreparations?(既然是為talentshow做準備，那么接下來互相交流溝通為show做準備)4.Howwastheshow?Thecore:LiMing’sChinesekungfu theirexchangesfortalentshow Howwastheshow?

Whattowrite?段2首句：2:Aftertheshow,LiMingnoticedsomechangeshappening.1.Whatchangeshappenedinhisexchangelife?(緊扣原文，形成閉環(huán)：原文交代的三個不適應(yīng)，一一破解。1)inhisnewclasses 2)Groupwork 3)socialeventsoutsideclasses)2.Howwashislifeandstudyandhisfeelings?3.WhatwereLiMing’sgainsorunderstandingsafterhisadaptiveprocess?Thecore:1.WhatchangeshavehappenedinLiMing’sexchange lifeinUK? 2.Whatlessondidhelearn?

Practiceofkungfu1.他的動作敏捷且準確，與英國同伴馬虎的動作是鮮明的對比。Hismovementswereswiftandprecise,______________________thecasualdemeanorofhisBritishpeers.2.他敏捷優(yōu)雅的招式結(jié)合了力量感的出擊創(chuàng)造了一種令人興奮的引人入勝的舞蹈。_______________________________________combinedwithpowerfulstrikescreatedathrillingandmesmerizingdance.3.步子敏捷手握拳在空中揮舞，李明每次移動口中利落地喊出“啊”，好似東方戰(zhàn)神。Steppingnimblywithaclenchedfistintheair,LiMingyelledacrisp"ah"eachtimehemoved,______________________________.4.LiMing完成一套復(fù)雜的招式和表演時，步子優(yōu)雅而準確，這套招式結(jié)合了武術(shù)，舞蹈和雜技。LiMing___________________________________asheexecutedaseriesofcomplexmovesandstuntscombiningelementsofmartialarts,dance,andacrobatics.astarkcontrasttoHisswiftandgracefulmovesasifhewereanorientalwarriormovedwithgraceandprecisionInteractionsinrehearsal1.他的行云流水般的動作和精準的動作迷住了所有人，激發(fā)了大家對中國文化的好奇也彌合了代溝。Hisfluidmovementsandprecisetechniquescaptivatedeveryone,____________________________________andbridgingtheirgap.2.他們的真誠的興趣讓李明覺得被重視，合作的氛圍消除了他的緊張。Theirgenuineinterestmadehimfeelvalued,and_____________________________________________________________.3.最初李明還有點害羞，隨著教導(dǎo)同伴們功夫招式也變得越來越自信了。LiMing,initiallyabitshy,_________________________ashetaughtthemsomebasickungfupostures.4.通過交流，語言和文化障礙慢慢消散了。Throughthisinteraction,thelanguageandculturalbarriers_______________________.sparkingcuriosityaboutChineseculturethecollaborativeatmosphereeasedhisnervousnessbecameincreasinglyconfidentstartedtofadeawayNervousness1.當聽到自己的名字后，LiMing可以聽到自己的心跳聲甚至緊張的呼吸聲。Whenhearinghis

namecalled,LiMingcouldhearhisownheartbeatandevennervousbreaths.2.他如此緊張以致他可以感覺到手心出汗心臟猛跳。Sonervouswashethathecouldfeelhispalmssweatingandhisheartpoundingviolently.Theperformanceturnedouttobeasuccess,___________________

fillinginthewholetheatre.(獨立主格).演出結(jié)束，觀眾投來贊許的目光，熱烈的掌聲。Whentheirshowwasfinished,theaudience_______________________atthem,

thunderousapplauseechoingaroundthehall.Theaudience______________thunderousapplause.thunderousapplausecastapprovingglancesbrokeintoTheshowTheperformanceturnedouttobeasuccess,___________________

fillinginthewholetheatre.(獨立主格).演出結(jié)束，觀眾投來贊許的目光，熱烈的掌聲。Whentheirshowwasfinished,theaudience_______________________atthem,

thunderousapplauseechoingaroundthehall.Theaudience______________thunderousapplause.thunderousapplausecastapprovingglancesbrokeintoTheshowExcitementandJoy1.聽到雷鳴般的掌聲響徹禮堂LiMing內(nèi)心狂喜。LiMingwaswildwithjoywhenhearingthunderousapplauseechoinginthehall.2.演出成功讓他一陣興奮，讓他確信他得到了認可。Thenewssentarippleofexcitementthroughhim,convincinghim

thathewaswellreceived.3.喜不自勝，LiMing和他的團隊慶祝他們的合作成功。Transportedwithpleasure/Delightedbeyondmeasure/Beamingwithpleasure,LiMingcelebratedtheirsuccessofcooperationwiththegroup.ThechangesinLiMing’slife1.他的同學們帶著敬仰和好奇找他，告訴他他的表演有多驚艷，表示了對他和中國文化的興趣。Hisclassmatesapproachedhimwithcuriosityandrespect,____________________________________________________andthattheywereinterestedinhimandhisculture.2.李明覺得更容易開啟交流對話，他的口音曾經(jīng)一度是他的焦慮源，現(xiàn)在也被視為了他的獨有文化名片。Hefoundit____________________________________,andhisaccent,onceasourceofanxiety,_________________________________________.3.小組活動中，他的團隊成員會額外盡力吸納理解他的觀點，耐心傾聽他的表述。Ingroupwork,hisgroupmates____________________________________,patientlygivingeartohispresentation.tellinghimhowtheywereimpressedbyhisperformanceeasiertostrikeupconversationswasnowseenasauniqueculturalidentitycardmadeextraefforttoincludehisideassublimation(1)

才藝秀成為了一個轉(zhuǎn)折點：他的獨特性，曾經(jīng)讓他自我懷疑，現(xiàn)在讓他能更好融入大家。Thetalentshow___________________________:hisuniqueness,onceasourceofdoubt,nowconnectedhimtoothers.(2)

在會場，她們也被深深感動朝他豎起了大拇指。Itdawnedonhimthat______________________________________thathelpedhimfindtheconfidenceandpridetointegratewiththeoutsideworld.(3)自信和驕傲洋溢在眼中，李明意識到弘揚自身文化的意義，這極大促進了他的自信彌合了代溝。With______________________________________,LiMingeventuallyrealizedthesignificanceofpromotinghisownculture,whichgreatly_________________________________________________.(4)是的，堅信自己的文化身份，李明把這次才藝秀-偽裝的小確幸-變成了一個契機。Yes,__________________________________,LiMingtransformedtheshowcase,ablessingindisguise,intoanopportunitytobeknownandwell-receivedbytheoutsideworld.itwashisuniqueculturalidentitywhowerealsodeeplyimpressedbyconfidenceandpridebrimminginhiseyesboostedhisconfidenceandbridgedthegapwithafirmbeliefinhisculturalidentitybecameaturningpointPART下水文與原文答案評析03Paragraph1Duringtheirpractice,thegroupwasamazedbyLiMing’sChinesekungfu.Hisswiftandgracefulmovescombinedwithpowerfulstrikescreatedathrillingandmesmerizingdance.Astheywatchedinawe,theyconstantlycheeredhimon,captivatedbyhisperformance.LiMing,atfirstabitshy,graduallybecamemoreconfident.Hepatientlytaughtthemsomebasickungfupostures.Throughthisinteraction,thelanguageandculturalbarriersstartedtofadeaway.Theylaughedandjokedwhilepracticinggraduallyformingastrongandlastingbondthroughtheirsharedexperiences.Paragraph2Aftertheshow,LiMingnoticedsomechangeshappening.HisBritishclassmates,noweagertolearnmoreaboutChineseculture,cametohimmoreoftenforguidanceandinsights.Ingroupwork,theyactivelylistenedtohisideas,andhefounditmucheasiertoexpresshimself,Atsocialevents,hewasnolongeronthesidelines.Hewasinvitedtojoininthefun,andtheysharedtheirfavoritesongsanddanceswithhim.LiMingrealizedthatbyshowinghistalent,hehadopenedthedoortoanewworldoffriendshipandculturalexchange.與原文及段落開頭語銜接合理，內(nèi)容基本合理，情感表達完整，語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯使用基本準確。上下文連貫性需加強，詞匯豐富性有限，部分細節(jié)邏輯待完善。增加過渡詞和細節(jié)描寫，替換重復(fù)詞匯，嘗試使用更豐富的表達，補充關(guān)鍵細節(jié)，完善故事邏輯。優(yōu)點不足