2020年5月浙江省杭州高級中學高三第二次模擬考試英語作文讀后續(xù)寫寫作指導(含范文

1、2020年5月浙江省杭州高級中學高三第二次模擬考試英語作文讀后續(xù)寫寫作指導一、續(xù)寫原題Old Man Donovanwas a mean man who hated children. He threw rocks at them and even shot at them with a shotgun. At least thats what we had heard.His smallfarmbordered our neighborhood where my younger sister, Leigh Ann, and I lived when we were growing up. H

2、is farm was long, narrow, and quaint. It held two treasures. One was his beautiful fruit.There were many varieties of fruit: pears, apples, and lots more I just cant think of. The fruit naturally drew the children to his land. It made them into thieves. Butmy sister and Ididnt dare to take his fruit

3、 because of the horrible rumors we had heard about Old Man Donovan.Onesummerday, we were playing in a nearby field. It was time to head back home. My sister and I were feeling very daring that day. There was a short cut to our house that went through the Donovan farm. We thought he wouldnt be able t

4、o see us run across his property around the lusciousfruittrees. We were almost through the farm when we heard, Hey, girl! in a gruff, low voice. We stopped dead in our tracks! There we were, face to face with Old Man Donovan. Our knees were shaking. We had visions of rocks pounding our bodies and bu

5、llets piercing our hearts.Come here, he said, reaching up to one of his apple trees. Still shaking, we went over to him. He held out several ripe, juicy, red apples. Take these home, he commanded. We took the apples with surprised hearts and ran all the way home. Of course, Leigh Ann and I ate the a

6、pples.As time went on, we often went through Old Man Donovans farm, and he kept on giving us more luscious fruit. One day, we stopped by to see him when he was on his front porch. We talked to him for hours. While he was talking, we realized that we had found the otherhidden treasure: the sweet,kind

7、 hearthidden behind his gruff voice. Soon, he was one of our favorite people to talk to. Unfortunately,his familynever seemed to enjoy ourcompany. They never smiled orwelcomedus in.注意：1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2. 應使5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4. 續(xù)寫完成后, 請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph 1:Every summe

8、r, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him.Paragraph 2:The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died.二、下水思路1.確定主題：大主題是人與人的關系。故事告訴我們不要相信謠傳，不要以貌取人。故事中Old Man Donovan是一個外表可怕，其實是一個心地善良的老人。短文結構清晰，以農(nóng)場中有two treasures為線索，原文描寫了第一個treasure-his beautiful fruit, 第二個看不見的treasure，就是老人善良的內(nèi)心，這是續(xù)

9、寫的重點描寫內(nèi)容。2. 時空變化：要特別注意第二句句首提示語的時間The next winter,.這就意味著第一段必須提到某一個夏天，而不是every summer。所以，第一段應該有兩個時間，第一個是每年夏天做了什么，第二個時間應該是某一個夏天發(fā)生的事。在這一點上估計會出現(xiàn)離題。3. 續(xù)寫難點：第一是主題難以把握，估計都會提到a kind heart, 但是最好在結尾處有不能以貌取人的感悟。第二是時間空間的轉換，尤其是對the next winter的理解，容易跑題。第三原文中提到老人的家人對他們不友好，在續(xù)寫部分應該有相關的交代(his family never seemed to en

10、joy our company. They never smiled or welcomed us in)。第四原文情節(jié)相對曲折，多敘述少細節(jié)描寫。三、下水續(xù)寫“7+7”模式Paragraph 1:Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him.1. As always, hewelcomedus with open arms and treated us to some red apples.2. Sometimes, he even let us climb up thefruittrees to pick the ones

11、 we liked.3. On hisfarm, we talked and laughed cheerfully, as if ahidden treasurehad been discovered.4.While talking to him, we got to know why there were horrible rumors about him.5. Onesummermorning, however, when we got there, we were shocked to find that he was ill and his health was declining r

12、apidly.6. But we could see the joy in his eyes, whenevermy sister and Ikept himcompany.7. So we went to see him now and then, hoping that he would recover soon.Paragraph 2:The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died.1. When we heard the bad news, a sense of grief overwhelmed us.2.

13、 At the idea of never seeing our old friend again, we stood still, tears streaming down our cheeks.3. Then we dashed to the farm, only to find that our friend was nowhere to be seen.4. In spite of the fact that hisfamilywere a little unfriendly, we plucked our courage to go to his funeral.5. Thinkin

14、g back to the happy moments we spent together, we started to weep uncontrollably.6. To date, we rememberOld Man Donovanand the lesson we learned:7. Never believe rumors, never judge a person from his appearance, or you may miss a person with akind heart.Paragraph 1:Every summer, we would visit Mr. D

15、onovan and talk to him.As always, hewelcomedus with open arms and treated us to some red apples. Sometimes, he even let us climb up thefruittrees to pick the ones we liked. On hisfarm, we talked and laughed cheerfully, as if ahidden treasurehad been discovered. While talking to him, we got to know w

16、hy there were horrible rumors about him. Onesummermorning, however, when we got there, we were shocked to find that he was ill and his health was declining rapidly. But we could see the joy in his eyes, whenevermy sister and Ikept himcompany. So we went to see him now and then, hoping that he would

17、recover soon.Paragraph 2:The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died.When we heard the bad news, a sense of grief overwhelmed us. At the idea of never seeing our old friend again, we stood still, tears streaming down our cheeks. Then we dashed to the farm, only to find that our friend was nowhere to be seen. In spite of the fact that hisfamilywere a little unfriendly, we plucked our courage to go