大學(xué)英語作文講評

1、大學(xué)英語作文講評 1. Writing Practice Directions: You are to write in 100-120 words about the title “The Two-day Weekend”. You should base your composition on the outline given in Chinese below: 1. 2 3. 我應(yīng)當(dāng)怎樣過好雙休日。我應(yīng)當(dāng)怎樣過好雙休日。 大學(xué)英語作文講評 The Twoday weekend The two-day weekend not only allows us to relax, but al

2、so gives us the chance to take up some hobbies. However, the two-day weekend has caused a few problems. The most serious one is that the weekdays are filled with too many lessons. Because our classes are limited to 5 days, Monday through Friday, we have to take more lessons each day than in the past

3、. This leaves us little time to catch our breath during the weekdays. In order to benefit most from the two-day weekend, I have decided to make a good plan for that rest period. During the weekend, I will not only rest and take up some hobbies, but I will also set aside enough time to study. 大學(xué)英語作文講

4、評 點(diǎn)評：本文依照提綱展開，首段說明了雙休日的種點(diǎn)評：本文依照提綱展開，首段說明了雙休日的種 種好處，第二段段首的種好處，第二段段首的however轉(zhuǎn)折的同時(shí)，也起轉(zhuǎn)折的同時(shí)，也起 了承前啟后的作用，最后一段說明了自己將如何過了承前啟后的作用，最后一段說明了自己將如何過 好雙休日的計(jì)劃。好雙休日的計(jì)劃。 2. “How to Deal with Cheating”. 1.當(dāng)今的校園里出現(xiàn)了各種各樣的作弊手段。當(dāng)今的校園里出現(xiàn)了各種各樣的作弊手段。 2.作弊的原因。作弊的原因。 3.怎樣杜絕作弊。怎樣杜絕作弊。 大學(xué)英語作文講評 How to Deal with Cheating Many st

5、udents tend to cheat during exams. Some will copy the answers from their books. Others will physically communicate with each other to get the right answers. There are even some that write down information on their hands or arms. There are several reasons for cheating. Firstly, some students just wan

6、t to achieve high scores without having to work hard. Secondly, some are under great pressure and they are fearful of failing exams. Finally some are afraid that they will fall behind others in the exams. There are at least two ways to eliminate cheating. One way is to explain to students that cheat

7、ing is harmful. Another way is to take strict measures to prevent cheating. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 點(diǎn)評：本文緊扣三點(diǎn)提綱展開討論，每段的首句點(diǎn)明點(diǎn)評：本文緊扣三點(diǎn)提綱展開討論，每段的首句點(diǎn)明 了該段的主題大意，結(jié)構(gòu)層次一目了然，詞句運(yùn)用得了該段的主題大意，結(jié)構(gòu)層次一目了然，詞句運(yùn)用得 當(dāng)當(dāng)。 3. “On-campus Students Marrying”. 1.如何看待在校大學(xué)生結(jié)婚的問題如何看待在校大學(xué)生結(jié)婚的問題 2.國家允許在校學(xué)生結(jié)婚國家允許在校學(xué)生結(jié)婚 3.在校學(xué)生結(jié)婚對學(xué)生的影響在校學(xué)生結(jié)婚對學(xué)生的影響 4.

8、你的觀點(diǎn)你的觀點(diǎn) 大學(xué)英語作文講評 On-campus Students Marrying There is a new debate: Is it legal for Chinese on- campus students to get married before they graduate? Some people say “yes” while others say “no”. In fact, the government allows on-campus students to get married before they graduate. Some argue that if

9、 they get married, their schoolwork could be affected and they may not graduate. In my opinion, it is unnecessary to ban on-campus students from getting married before they finish college. However, it should not be advocated or encouraged. Students are required to study. So, I believe that all on-ca

10、mpus students should deal with this issue in a sensitive明智的明智的way. 點(diǎn)評：本文基本符合提綱要求點(diǎn)評：本文基本符合提綱要求 大學(xué)英語作文講評 4. “Protection of Relics” 1.經(jīng)濟(jì)的發(fā)展在一定程度上破壞了歷史建筑經(jīng)濟(jì)的發(fā)展在一定程度上破壞了歷史建筑 （relics） 2.需要對歷史建筑進(jìn)行保護(hù)需要對歷史建筑進(jìn)行保護(hù) 3.保護(hù)歷史建筑的具體措施保護(hù)歷史建筑的具體措施。 Protection of Relics Although economic development has brought so much c

11、onvenience to us and made the earth a better place to live in, we cannot deny that modernization has destroyed some of our relics. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 The high publicity公眾的注意公眾的注意 about damaged relics has brought our attention to protect them, for relics are not only significant, but also valuable. They repres

12、ent the development of human beings civilization and thus should be preserved. Otherwise, the younger generation will have little idea of what their forefathers祖先祖先were like and how they lived. In order to fully protect our relics, government should play a major role. And, as individuals we should a

13、rouse our consciousness towards preserving our forefathers assets財(cái)產(chǎn)財(cái)產(chǎn) and try our best to protect them. 點(diǎn)評：本文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明，遣詞造句較得當(dāng)，論點(diǎn)評：本文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明，遣詞造句較得當(dāng)，論 述較為充分。述較為充分。 大學(xué)英語作文講評 5. “My View on Disposable Products” 1. 隨著人們生活節(jié)奏的加快，一次性用品隨著人們生活節(jié)奏的加快，一次性用品 （Disposable Product）越來越多。）越來越多。 2. 使用一次性用品的利與弊。使用一次

14、性用品的利與弊。 3. 我的看法。我的看法。 My View on Disposable Products Life is becoming increasingly convenient, and especially for busy people who are always on the move, disposable products are a convenience factor. By using disposable lunch cans, people can have their lunches without worrying about dishwashing. A

15、t the same time however, using too many disposable products will harm the environment. The high quantities of accumulated garbage resulting from the use of disposable products have become a pollution problem. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 In my opinion, the existence of disposable products is perfectly justified, but it

16、s use should be restricted限制限制 . More eco-friendly保護(hù)生態(tài)保護(hù)生態(tài)的 methods such as thorough cleaning and reusing should be introduced to achieve both convenience and conservation of the environment. 點(diǎn)評：本文緊扣提綱展開，每個(gè)觀點(diǎn)僅用一到兩句話就點(diǎn)評：本文緊扣提綱展開，每個(gè)觀點(diǎn)僅用一到兩句話就 點(diǎn)明主題、論證觀點(diǎn)，簡潔明了，詞匯運(yùn)用得當(dāng)。點(diǎn)明主題、論證觀點(diǎn)，簡潔明了，詞匯運(yùn)用得當(dāng)。 6. “Family Edu

17、cation” 1.現(xiàn)今父母非常重視家庭教育?，F(xiàn)今父母非常重視家庭教育。 2.家庭教育的優(yōu)、劣勢。家庭教育的優(yōu)、劣勢。 3.你的看法。你的看法。 大學(xué)英語作文講評 Family Education Parents in China are nowadays paying more attention to the training of their only child. At present, many children in cities have family tutors and more children have to take lessons before they go to

18、school. Family education has both advantages and disadvantages. The main advantage is that children can learn much more and can develop themselves as early as possible. The disadvantage is that too much family education may cause children to lose their sense of living and studying. Also, children wi

19、ll have less time to play or to do what they like. In my opinion, too much or too little family education will both do harm to children and even lead to disastrous 極壞的，很糟的極壞的，很糟的 circumstances境況境況 . 大學(xué)英語作文講評 點(diǎn)評：本文詳盡地論述了提綱中的各點(diǎn)要求，每段的段首點(diǎn)評：本文詳盡地論述了提綱中的各點(diǎn)要求，每段的段首 句點(diǎn)明該段的主題大意，層次清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)分明，用詞準(zhǔn)確，句點(diǎn)明該段的主題大意，層次清晰

20、，結(jié)構(gòu)分明，用詞準(zhǔn)確， 舉例恰當(dāng)。舉例恰當(dāng)。 7. “On a Harmonious Dormitory Life”. 1. 宿舍生活有時(shí)會出現(xiàn)不和諧的情況。宿舍生活有時(shí)會出現(xiàn)不和諧的情況。 2. 一個(gè)和諧宿舍生活的必要性。一個(gè)和諧宿舍生活的必要性。 3. 如何創(chuàng)造和諧的宿舍生活。如何創(chuàng)造和諧的宿舍生活。 On a Harmonious Dormitory Life Dormitory life is an indispensable必不可少的，必需的必不可少的，必需的 part of a students life. But sometimes the harmony in the dorm

21、itory will be disrupted擾亂擾亂 . For example, some members listen to music late at night and cause light 欠缺欠缺 的、不夠的的、不夠的sleepers（容易醒的人） to be restless焦躁不安的；靜焦躁不安的；靜 不下來的不下來的 .（heavy sleeper不容易醒的人） 大學(xué)英語作文講評 As is commonly known, a harmonious dormitory life is important to students or workmates and benef

22、its all members. It allows us to relax and focus on our studies or work. Also, we will get along better and enjoy喜愛喜愛 each others company同伴同伴(們們 ). There are several ways to create and maintain a harmonious dormitory life. Firstly, you have to get rid of your bad habits, if there are any. Secondly,

23、when an annoying situation arises, youll just have to learn to discuss this with the persons involved and hopefully抱著希抱著希 望地望地 have a solution, or else否則，要不然否則，要不然you will just have to tolerate容忍，忍受容忍，忍受 and co-exist和平共處和平共處 with each other. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 寫作提綱提示：寫作提綱提示： 第一段：舉例說明宿舍生活的不和諧之處。第一段：舉例說明宿舍生活的不和

24、諧之處。 第二段：從正反兩方面論證和諧的宿舍生活很重要。第二段：從正反兩方面論證和諧的宿舍生活很重要。 第三段：提出營造和諧的宿舍生活的三個(gè)方法。第三段：提出營造和諧的宿舍生活的三個(gè)方法。 點(diǎn)評：本文是一篇貼近學(xué)生生活的議論文。從敘述點(diǎn)評：本文是一篇貼近學(xué)生生活的議論文。從敘述 問題著手，闡述和諧宿舍生活的重要性，提出創(chuàng)造問題著手，闡述和諧宿舍生活的重要性，提出創(chuàng)造 和諧宿舍生活的方法。和諧宿舍生活的方法。 8. “My View on the New Tuition Policy” 1.高校收費(fèi)是一個(gè)客觀事實(shí)，人們對此認(rèn)識不一。高校收費(fèi)是一個(gè)客觀事實(shí)，人們對此認(rèn)識不一。 2.高校收費(fèi)帶來的一

25、系列影響。高校收費(fèi)帶來的一系列影響。 3.你的觀點(diǎn)。你的觀點(diǎn)。 My View on the New Tuition Policy 大學(xué)英語作文講評 According to Chinas new tuition policy, students will have to pay for their education. Some people think this will be detrimental不利的不利的 to students and their families, while others think this policy will be beneficial in the

26、long run從長遠(yuǎn)看從長遠(yuǎn)看 . The new tuition policy has profound深刻的深刻的influences on students. Firstly, it will be inevitably必然地必然地 stressful for families. Secondly, the new policy radically.根本地根本地 alters the traditional obligation義務(wù)，責(zé)任義務(wù)，責(zé)任 of the state to fund 給給撥款撥款 university tuition fees教學(xué)費(fèi)教學(xué)費(fèi) . I think w

27、e need to advocate the new policy. It relieves the government of the burden of supporting higher education. At the same time, we should help those students who cannot finance提供資金提供資金 their tuition fees, making sure that they will not drop out because of financial problems. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 點(diǎn)評：本文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明，遣詞

28、造句得當(dāng)，對提點(diǎn)評：本文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明，遣詞造句得當(dāng)，對提 綱各點(diǎn)的論述較詳盡合理，觀點(diǎn)明確。綱各點(diǎn)的論述較詳盡合理，觀點(diǎn)明確。 9. “Psychology in Our Life” 1. 試著談?wù)勑睦斫】档闹匾?。試著談?wù)勑睦斫】档闹匾浴?2. 結(jié)合自身情況，談?wù)勅绾伪３中睦斫】怠＝Y(jié)合自身情況，談?wù)勅绾伪３中睦斫】怠?Psychology in Our Life Psychology plays an important role in our daily lives. If you are psychologically healthy, you will have the con

29、fidence to cope with difficulties. If not, you may feel sad and frustrated throughout your life. So having a healthy psychology is necessary. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 There are at least three methods of staying psychologically healthy. First, try to control yourself when you are in a mess臟亂狀態(tài)；困境臟亂狀態(tài)；困境 . Second, be

30、lieve in yourself after you have assessed評價(jià)評價(jià) your situation狀況狀況 carefully. Third, you should be self disciplined自律自律 , which allows you to be sensible明智的明智的 when you are really at the edge of an outbreak爆發(fā)爆發(fā) . As far as I am concerned as far as.be concerned 就就而言而言, applying these three methods is i

31、mportant to stay psychologically healthy. To me, this is the psychology in our life. 點(diǎn)評：論題稍顯抽象，但心理健康問題是近年關(guān)點(diǎn)評：論題稍顯抽象，但心理健康問題是近年關(guān) 注的熱點(diǎn)問題之一。本文結(jié)合實(shí)際情況進(jìn)行闡述，注的熱點(diǎn)問題之一。本文結(jié)合實(shí)際情況進(jìn)行闡述， 層次分明。層次分明。 大學(xué)英語作文講評 10. “Long-distance Education” 1. 在中國，遠(yuǎn)程教育發(fā)展迅速。在中國，遠(yuǎn)程教育發(fā)展迅速。 2. 遠(yuǎn)程教育加強(qiáng)了發(fā)達(dá)地區(qū)與貧困地區(qū)、國內(nèi)院校與國遠(yuǎn)程教育加強(qiáng)了發(fā)達(dá)地區(qū)與貧困地區(qū)、國內(nèi)院校

32、與國 外院校之間的聯(lián)系。外院校之間的聯(lián)系。 3. 然而，中國的遠(yuǎn)程教育還很不發(fā)達(dá)。然而，中國的遠(yuǎn)程教育還很不發(fā)達(dá)。 Long-distance Education With the popularization of computer and information technology, long distance education has developed at a rather surprising speed in China and proves to be an effective way of learning. Thanks to distance learning, ma

33、ny people in less developed areas can enjoy equal opportunities as those living in developed areas. What is more, it enables students in China to have the same access to information, as those students living abroad. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 However, long distance education in China is still far from perfect and nee

34、ds to be improved in two areas. First, facilities such as computers, and information network for distance learning are still lacking in some areas and should be installed. Second, more information and courses in China should be available through distance education to meet the growing needs. 點(diǎn)評：目前遠(yuǎn)程教

35、育是一個(gè)比較熱門的話題，本文按照點(diǎn)評：目前遠(yuǎn)程教育是一個(gè)比較熱門的話題，本文按照 提綱的三點(diǎn)要求順次展開，層次分明，段與段之間聯(lián)結(jié)提綱的三點(diǎn)要求順次展開，層次分明，段與段之間聯(lián)結(jié) 緊密。緊密。 大學(xué)英語作文講評 11. “Wealth and Health” 1.有人認(rèn)為財(cái)富意味著一切。有人認(rèn)為財(cái)富意味著一切。 2.實(shí)際上健康比財(cái)富更重要。實(shí)際上健康比財(cái)富更重要。 3.試比較說明。試比較說明。 Wealth and Health When asked what the aim of their life is, the vast majority of people say “making m

36、oney”. For one thing, wealth can ensure them a comfortable life. However, as far as I am concerned, if I had to choose between wealth and health, I would prefer health. On the one hand, rich people can afford everything they dream of. But sometimes wealth cannot buy health. On the other hand, people

37、 who are healthy but not wealthy can make money through their own efforts and can enjoy the fruit of their labor. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 In conclusion最后最后,總之總之, health is more important than wealth. Those who are rich but are not healthy, and they are actually suffering痛苦痛苦 . 分析：本文緊扣提綱展開論述，觀點(diǎn)明確，條例分析：本文緊扣提綱展開論述，觀點(diǎn)

38、明確，條例 清晰，用詞較準(zhǔn)確。清晰，用詞較準(zhǔn)確。 12. “Woman in Modern Society” 1.Role of women in modern society. 2.Prejudices偏見偏見 and discrimination .歧視歧視 against women. 3. My comments. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 Woman in Modern Society Women play an important part in modern society. Nowadays, many women go into specialized fields such as

39、medicine, law and engineering. They comprise構(gòu)成，組成構(gòu)成，組成 a large part of the workers in businesses and factories and they are making outstanding contributions to modern society. However, people are still asserting肯定地說，斷言肯定地說，斷言 that men are superior to比比優(yōu)越優(yōu)越(好好 women. First, there are many jobs which

40、cannot be carried out by women because they are not physically strong enough. Second, most of the world-famous scientists and statesmen are male. Finally, most of society上流社會上流社會 seems to be dominated占首要地位占首要地位 by men. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 Personally親自；就個(gè)人來說親自；就個(gè)人來說 , I am a feminist男女平等主義者男女平等主義者 and stand for

41、 womans rights. Since both men and women are equally important in human life and activities, they should have equal standing地位地位 . 分析：本文緊扣提綱，立足于實(shí)際，展開論述。論點(diǎn)鮮明，分析：本文緊扣提綱，立足于實(shí)際，展開論述。論點(diǎn)鮮明， 用詞較豐富。用詞較豐富。 13. “The Role of Migrant Workers” 1.外來工對城市建設(shè)的貢獻(xiàn)。外來工對城市建設(shè)的貢獻(xiàn)。 2.外來工帶來的問題。外來工帶來的問題。 3.我們應(yīng)怎樣面對。我們應(yīng)怎樣面對。 Th

42、e Role of Migrant Workers As is commonly known, migrant workers have made a great contribution to the prosperity of cities. They are an indispensable必不可少的必不可少的 part of our workforce. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 However, migrant workers also bring problems. First, they have trouble getting their children into child car

43、e centers and schools because they are unregistered residents in the city. Second, most of the migrant workers swarm云集云集 into big cities just to make money. Being unskilled and inexperienced, some of them can barely幾乎不幾乎不 afford to live a basic life. Therefore, they are a potential threat to the pea

44、ce and stability of the society. In my opinion, we should appreciate the great contribution they have made, but at the same time monitor the resulting problems. 點(diǎn)評：本題是近年來討論的熱點(diǎn)問題，本文緊扣提綱，點(diǎn)評：本題是近年來討論的熱點(diǎn)問題，本文緊扣提綱， 展開論述。首段先明確了外來工對城市建設(shè)的貢獻(xiàn)，展開論述。首段先明確了外來工對城市建設(shè)的貢獻(xiàn)， 第二段一一列舉出外來工潛在的問題，最后一段提出第二段一一列舉出外來工潛在的問題，最后一

45、段提出 個(gè)人見解。個(gè)人見解。 大學(xué)英語作文講評 14. “What does friendship mean?” 1.友誼是認(rèn)識永恒的主題。友誼是認(rèn)識永恒的主題。 2.友誼到底意味著什么。友誼到底意味著什么。 3.友誼的重要性。友誼的重要性。 What does Friendship Mean? What does friendship mean? There is no definite answer. As on eternal無休止的；永恒的無休止的；永恒的 theme主題，主題， 題目題目 in literature, friendship is indispensable to da

46、ily life. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 Friendship is very important to our life. When you are happy, friendship is like adding flowers to carpet; when you are sad, having friends are a consolation安慰，慰安慰，慰 藉藉 ; if you are in trouble, friends will surround you and remove the barriers for you; if you are facing difficulti

47、es, you can turn to friends for help. We admire欽佩欽佩,羨慕羨慕 the great friendship between Marx and Engle, which drew them together and pushed them on the road to exploring and fulfilling communism. Friendship is not almighty全能的，萬能的全能的，萬能的 , but no one can live happily without it. 點(diǎn)評：本文類似抒情式的議論文，第二段中運(yùn)用了排

48、點(diǎn)評：本文類似抒情式的議論文，第二段中運(yùn)用了排 比句，并巧妙地運(yùn)用恩格斯和馬克思的例子來證明友誼比句，并巧妙地運(yùn)用恩格斯和馬克思的例子來證明友誼 的重要性。的重要性。 大學(xué)英語作文講評 15. A Letter to a Schoolmate You do not need to write your own address and your real name. The letter is to a good friend John, congratulating him on his admission準(zhǔn)許進(jìn)準(zhǔn)許進(jìn)(加加)入入 to a prestigious.有名望的，有威信的有名望的，

49、有威信的 university. You should base your composition on the following outline: 1.對朋友進(jìn)入大學(xué)表示祝賀。對朋友進(jìn)入大學(xué)表示祝賀。 2.介紹大學(xué)生活和中學(xué)生活的異同。介紹大學(xué)生活和中學(xué)生活的異同。 3.對如何成功地過好大學(xué)生活提出自己的建議。對如何成功地過好大學(xué)生活提出自己的建議。 A Letter to a Schoolmate 大學(xué)英語作文講評 August 16th, 2006 Dear friend, The last time that I met you, I was surprised to find th

50、at your eyes were swollen and your face was pale. Later I was told that you have been addicted to online gaming for a long time. As is commonly known, it is very harmful to spend too much time playing games online. Firstly, it is a waste of time. Secondly, it does great harm to your health if you of

51、ten stay up late at nights. Thirdly, your mental health身心健康will be seriously affected too. 大學(xué)英語作文講評 I hope you will shift your attention to your studies and work. Try to take regular exercises, communicate with others more often and concentrate on your studies. In this way, you will have a more富有成效的

52、富有成效的 lifestyle. I look forward to your reply. Yours Sincerely, Chen 點(diǎn)評：本文是一封建議信，信中勸告朋友戒玩網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲，說明沉溺于點(diǎn)評：本文是一封建議信，信中勸告朋友戒玩網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲，說明沉溺于 網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲的危害，并提出如何擺脫網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲的忠告。網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲的危害，并提出如何擺脫網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲的忠告。 寫作提綱提示：寫作提綱提示： 第一段：得知朋友玩網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲成癮，非常吃驚，同時(shí)感到非常痛心。第一段：得知朋友玩網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲成癮，非常吃驚，同時(shí)感到非常痛心。 第二段：分析沉溺于網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲的種種危害第二段：分析沉溺于網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲的種種危害損害身心健康，浪費(fèi)時(shí)損

53、害身心健康，浪費(fèi)時(shí) 間和精力。間和精力。 第三段：勸告朋友及時(shí)從沉迷網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲中擺脫出來。第三段：勸告朋友及時(shí)從沉迷網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲中擺脫出來。 大學(xué)英語作文講評 16. Writing a letter to a friend who is looking for job August 17th, 2006 Dear friend, I am writing this letter to advise you to apply for the position of English translator in our company. We are in urgent need of good translators and I am sure that you have a