讀后續(xù)寫之提分秘籍(共6頁)

1、精選優(yōu)質(zhì)文檔-傾情為你奉上讀后續(xù)寫之提分秘籍細(xì)節(jié)描寫考試說明中評分原則部分規(guī)定，讀后續(xù)寫閱卷時(shí)按5個檔次給分。參考最高檔次第五檔（21-25分）的描述并考慮寫作部分評分的其它因素，可以認(rèn)為一篇優(yōu)秀的讀后續(xù)寫具備以下特征：1. 內(nèi)容豐富充實(shí)，與所給短文融洽連貫；2. 連接成分應(yīng)用得當(dāng)，行文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊一體，與所提供各段落開頭語的銜接緊密合理；3. 使用并用下劃線標(biāo)示5個以上短文中標(biāo)出的關(guān)鍵詞語；4. 詞匯豐富高級，語法準(zhǔn)確多變（主被動句式、各類從句、特殊句式、非謂語動詞等的使用情況靈活恰當(dāng)、不拘一格、游刃有余）；5. 詞數(shù)充分，150詞左右。評分細(xì)則規(guī)定少于130詞的，從總分中減去2分；6. 拼寫準(zhǔn)

2、確，英式或美式拼法皆可；7. 標(biāo)點(diǎn)合理，使用得當(dāng)。讀后續(xù)寫基本是以記敘文為主，而記敘文是以記人敘事為主要內(nèi)容，以敘述為主要表達(dá)方式來反映豐富多彩的現(xiàn)實(shí)生活的一種文體。一般來說，完成一篇完整的記敘文寫作，需要選取合適的角度、按照一定的順序組織素材進(jìn)行敘述，其中包括六個基本要素：時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物，事情的起因、經(jīng)過和結(jié)果，即我們通常所說的五個“W”（what, who, when, where, why）和一個“H”（how）。除此之外，鮮明的主題和生動的語言，也是一篇優(yōu)秀的記敘文所不可或缺的。描寫作為記敘文的一種輔助的表達(dá)方式對加強(qiáng)文章的表現(xiàn)力發(fā)揮著重要的作用，它要求我們善于捕捉細(xì)節(jié)、刻畫細(xì)節(jié)，有

3、時(shí)還可以用上比喻、擬人、夸張等修辭手法。一篇好的作文往往因?yàn)橐粌商幖?xì)節(jié)描寫而出彩。同樣地，議論、抒情的表達(dá)方式對記敘文主題的展現(xiàn)也發(fā)揮著重要的作用。一、情感心理描寫在寫作中，對人物情感的描寫常常能使人物的形象顯得生動鮮活。人的情感可以分很多種，如喜悅、滿意、失望、悲傷、憎恨、憤怒、驚訝、恐懼、贊賞等等。在英語中有很多不同的詞和句式來表達(dá)這些不同的情感。 u 喜悅 1. He is very happy and sweet. 他又高興又甜蜜。 2. They didnt know what to do with themselves for joy. 他們高興得不知道怎么辦好。 3. He ju

4、mped for fun. 他高興得跳了起來。 4. Her face brightened up. 她喜形于色。 More examples:1. The smile on her face shone like a diamond.2. His eyes twinkled with pleasure.3. I was wild with joy.4. I was pleased beyond description.5. She wore a shining smile on her face.6. Her smile lit up the whole room.7. She shed t

5、ears of joy.8. She was overflowing with happiness.9. Her flushed face was shining with excitement.10. I was floating on air.u 滿意 1. The result is satisfactory. 結(jié)果令人滿意。 2. It is difficult to please everybody. 眾口難調(diào)。 3. There is always a smile of contentment on her face. 她臉上總是掛著心滿意足的微笑。 4. She belongs

6、to those who are very difficult to satisfy. 她屬于那種極難討好的人。 5. Seeing their task finished gives them a sense of satisfaction. 看到任務(wù)完成了，他們感到很滿意。 u 驚訝 1. Im surprised to find you here. 在這里看到你我很奇怪。 2. Its nothing to be surprised about. 這不值得大驚小怪。 3. To my surprise, he didnt come yesterday. 令我吃驚的是他昨天沒有來。 4.

7、She looked at me in amazement. 她驚奇的看著我。 5. Her appearance fairly took my breath away. 她的美貌令我神魂顛倒。 6. Everyone looked at her in astonishment. 大家都驚訝地看著她。 u 悲傷 1. He looks so sad. 他看起來很悲傷。 2. He is no stranger to sorrow. 他生活在悲傷中。 3. His sad story makes her feel pity. 他的悲慘經(jīng)歷使她深表同情。 4. His wifes disease

8、took away his appetite. 妻子的病令他茶飯不思。 5. The news depresses her. 這個消息讓她愁苦。 More examples:1. He stood silently, tears rolling down his cheeks.2. I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness.3. Hearing the news, so desperate was he that he drowned sadness in wine.4. She burst into tears and ran out

9、of the room.5. She sobbed, hiding her face in her hands.6. I tried to fight back tears. 7. My eyes were filled with tears.8. A frown（皺眉）now stood on his face.9. These days he was in low spirits.u 憤怒 1. She was burning with anger. 她怒火中燒。 2. He easily loses his temper. 他很容易發(fā)脾氣。 3. He was in a rage. 他大

10、發(fā)雷霆。 4. She was red with anger. 她因?yàn)榘l(fā)怒臉漲得通紅。 More examples:1. I was seized by anger.2. His anger boiled over.3. He could hardly/scarcely contain his rage.4. His voice trembled with anger.5. He gave me a look of burning anger.6. He glared at me with burning eyes.7. His face clouded with anger.u 感動1. T

11、ouched deeply/immensely, we2. Tears filling her eyes, she offered her heartfelt gratitude.3. With tears streaming down her face, she.u 害怕He turned to me, with his eyes full of horror.She was struck with horror when.She was choked by fear.Her face turned pale and stood there tongue-tied.Fear flooded

12、over him.Her heart beat so violently that she felt nearly suffocated（窒息）.She shook all over, feeling like sitting on pins and needles.二、動作描寫動作描寫也是描寫人的重要一點(diǎn)。利用適當(dāng)?shù)脑~語對表達(dá)人們的心理和性格有很大的幫助。u 表達(dá)說話的動詞： speak:說，講，說話，演說。著重開口發(fā)音。 say:說，說話。意義非常廣泛，是一般用語。著重內(nèi)容，指連貫的說話。 talk:講，說話。著重說話的動作，而不著重所說的話。它多指兩個人或多個人在一起講話。 tell:說

13、，告訴，講。指把一件事情傳達(dá)給別人或講述一個故事等。有連續(xù)敘述的意思。 chat:閑談，聊天。多指非正式的，輕松的，愉快的，沒有中心地、沒有特殊目的地談話或聊天。含有親熱的意味。 1. gossip:只在后面說人是非，閑談他人的事情。 2. Can you child speak yet? 你的孩子會說話了嗎？ 3. He said he wanted to go to town. 他說他想去城里。 4. I want to talk to you about an urgent matter. 我想和你談一件緊急的事。 5. Tell me what happened. 告訴我發(fā)生了什么事。

14、 6. They dropped in for a chat last night. 他們昨晚順便來閑聊了一會兒。 7. You shouldnt listen to gossip. 你不應(yīng)該聽流言蜚語。 u 表示笑的動詞： smile:“微笑”。通常指好意的微笑，無聲的微笑，如表示親切、愉快等。 laugh:“笑”，“發(fā)笑”。指一般的笑。 beam:“笑”。指面露喜色，帶有笑容的意思。 1. She smiled when she saw me. 她看見我時(shí)露出微笑。 2. We all laughed loudly when she made a joke. 她說了個笑話，我們都大聲笑起來

15、。 3. He beamed on his visitors. 他對著客人們微笑。 u 表示哭我們可以說： cry:“哭泣”、“流淚”。意義及用法最廣泛。多強(qiáng)調(diào)聲音，指呼號和叫喊地哭，一般由于痛苦，悲哀，恐懼，也可能是歡呼引起的。 weep:“哭泣”、“流淚”。指不出聲的哭，著重在由于悲傷而流淚。 sob:“哽咽”，“嗚咽”，“啜泣”。指盡力抑制自己的感情時(shí)發(fā)出抽泣的聲音。也可以指哭訴。 1. She started to cry when she heard the sad news. 當(dāng)她聽到這個悲痛的消息時(shí)，她開始哭了。 2. She wept the death of the chil

16、d. 她哀悼孩子的死亡。 3. The child sobbed loudly. 這個孩子大聲地哭泣。 u 表示走的動詞： go:“走”，意義范圍較廣，是一般用語。表示向一定的地點(diǎn)運(yùn)動。 walk:“步行”，“走”。表示有目的或無目的的步行、散步、游玩。 pace:“走過”，“踱步”。尤指以普通的步子走。 wander:“徘徊”，“到處走”，“漫游”。側(cè)重?zé)o確定路線。 1. We went by plane. 我們是乘飛機(jī)去的。 2. I cant walk about in this heat. 在這種大熱天我簡直無法走動。 3. The fence is only ten paces fr

17、om the house. 圍墻離屋子只有十步遠(yuǎn)。 4. The children wandered in the woods. 孩子們在森林里漫步。動作描寫美句欣賞1. The first actor was dragging through the snow when the second began walking towards him trembling with cold.第一位演員在雪地里拖著腳步艱難移動，這時(shí)候第二位演員朝他走去，身子在寒氣中不僅顫抖。2. I still remember the shock that rooted me flat against the wa

18、ll.我仍然記得當(dāng)時(shí)驚呆了，靠在墻上，一動不動。3. The pounding in my ears drowned out the rest of the words, only a word here and there filtered through.我的耳朵里嗡嗡作響，聽不見他們后來講的話，只是東一點(diǎn)西一點(diǎn)滲入的只言片語。4. I stared at him in shock and a small sound of dismay escaped my throat.我驚愕地盯著他，不禁發(fā)出輕輕的沮喪聲。5. Standing with all the dignity I could

19、 muster, I said nothing.帶著所有的尊嚴(yán)，我站在那里一句話都沒說。6. I clasped my hands behind my back so he wouldnt see them shaking.我緊握著雙手藏在背后，這樣他就看不見我的手在發(fā)抖。7. The last words came out in an eager rush.最后幾個字是急切地蹦出來的。8. He went back to hoeing the weeds that sprang up between the delicate little bean plants.他又去鋤生在在青嫩的豆苗間的

20、雜草了。9. The next day, it was a very sad and withdrawn girl who dragged into the principal's office.第二天，我沉默不語，一副十分傷心的小女孩的模樣，拖著腳步走近校長辦公室。10. He looked out of the window, biting his lips, as if thinking.他一邊看著窗外，一邊咬著嘴唇，仿佛在思考。三、練一練：找找下面的勵志美文中動作、神態(tài)、心理描寫If the Dream Is Big Enough, the Facts Dont Count I

21、 used to watch her from my kitchen window, she seemed so small as she muscled her way through the crowd of boys on the playground. The school was across the street from our home and I would often watch the kids as they played during recess. A sea of children, and yet to me, she stood out from them a

22、ll. I remembered the first day I saw her playing basketball. I watched in wonder as she ran circles around the other kids. She managed to shoot jump shots just over their heads and into the net. The boys always tried to stop her but no one could.I began to notice her at other times, basketball in ha

23、nd, playing alone. She would practice dribbling and shooting over and over again, sometimes until dark. One day I asked her why she practiced so much. She looked directly in my eyes and without a moment of hesitation. She said, “I want to go to college. The only way I can go is if I get a scholarshi

24、p. I like basketball. I decided that if I were good enough, I would get a scholarship. I am going to play college basketball. I want to be the best. My Daddy told me if the dream is big enough, the facts dont count.” I had seen over and over again. Well, I had to give it to hershe was determined. I

25、watched her through those junior high years and into high school. Every week, she led her varsity team to victory. One day in her senior year, I saw her sitting in the grass, head cradled in her arms. I walked across the street and sat down in the cool grass beside her. Quietly I asked what was wron

26、g. “Oh, nothing,” came a soft reply. “I am just too short.” The coach told her that at55”she would probably never get to play for a top ranked teammuch less offered a scholarshipso she should stop dreaming about college. She was heartbroken and I felt my own throat tighten as I sensed her disappoint

27、ment. I asked her if she had talked to her dad about it yet. She lifted her head from her hands and told me that her father said those coaches were wrong. They just did not understand the power of a dream. He told her that if she really wanted to play for a good college, if she truly wanted a schola

28、rship, that nothing could stop her except one thing her own attitude. He told her again, “If the dream is big enough, the facts dont count.” The next year, as she and her team went to the Northern California Championship game, she was seen by a college recruiter. She was indeed offered a scholarship, a full ride, to a Division I, NCAA womens basketball team. She was going