深度剖析解讀2020江蘇南京鹽城高三期末一模、2020浙江春季高考英語(yǔ)作文

1、深度剖析解讀2020江蘇南京鹽城高三期末一模、2020浙江春季高考英語(yǔ)作文深度剖析2020南京鹽城高三期末一模、2020浙江春季高考英語(yǔ)作文解讀2020南京鹽城一模作文題：教育部發(fā)布了一項(xiàng)給中小學(xué)教師的懲罰權(quán)的規(guī)定，請(qǐng)談?wù)勀愕囊庖姾徒ㄗh。如何寫概要China Ministry of Education issued a new regulation allowing primary and middle school teachers to take disciplinary actions against their students, to which the public respond

2、 with different opinions. (29wds)(一件事引起不同的觀點(diǎn)，有很多表達(dá)方式，但是這種還是很是很獨(dú)特的：，to which thepublic respond with different opinions.)如何寫正文Personally, the policy facilitates students sound growth. First, it can impress them by the importance of rules and regulations, which are the cornerstone of a good community.

3、Those who break them but get away with punishment will take it for granted and likely commit crimes in future. Besides, it hangs like Damocles Sword and help cultivate self-discipline.However, the policy serves its purpose only when applied properly. For one thing, physical punishment should be acco

4、mpanied by psychological help so that pupils can realize the root of their misbehavior. For another, it shouldn do harm to their health, not to mention insulting them.In conclusion, since the disciplinary action can mend one s way and keep schools running on thetrack, why should we say no to it?. (1

5、26wds)寫作思路上：從兩個(gè)方面： 1.規(guī)矩的重要性 2.有利于學(xué)生的自律。寫作技巧上：1 .說(shuō)讓人意識(shí)到重要性，可選詞匯很多，我用的是impressbthe importance of 后面的非限制性定從實(shí)際上是具體說(shuō)明重要性為何，此處用了比喻：the cornerstone of a goodcommunity2 .闡述重要性，不僅從正面寫，還從反面寫：如果違反規(guī)則卻不受懲罰，會(huì)有怎樣的后果。3 .第二點(diǎn)我一帶而過了，實(shí)際上還可以充分展開的，這里用了諺語(yǔ)：Damocles Sword4 .主題句一定要簡(jiǎn)潔，不要拖泥帶水，所以我這里這樣寫的：Personally, the policy f

6、acilitates students nd growth. souHowever, the policy serves its purpose only when applied properly.尤其是第二句，雖然看起來(lái)簡(jiǎn)單，但實(shí)際上是包含了省略結(jié)構(gòu)，可以借鑒一下。5 .最后一段或最后一句力求簡(jiǎn)潔，但一定要有力，不建議用老套的句型，不妨用反義疑問句。2020年浙江卷春季高考讀后續(xù)寫（孫三五）一、題目閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Im going to miss you so much, Poppy, said the tall, thin teenager.

7、He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions（ 情 緒）get the better of him.His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon b

8、e living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. I guess this is it, he said. Ill see you back home in a month, okay? His parents nodded, and

9、 they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boys mother turned to the dog, Okay, Poppy, time to go back home. The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didnt seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy

10、, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didnt.They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasnt her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried.

11、 What should we do to cheer Poppy up? asked Dad. Weve tried everything.I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy, smiled Mom. Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Lets get a little dog for Poppy. It didnt take long before they walked through the front doo

12、r carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging（ 擺動(dòng)）ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.注意：1 .所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2 .至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3 .續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好；4 .續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。二、范文分析

13、實(shí)例寫記敘文不難，一篇流水文加上一些好詞點(diǎn)綴就可以成了。但是寫好記敘文很難， 體現(xiàn)在以下兩個(gè)方面：第一、立意難首先要仔細(xì)分析文章到底在表達(dá)什么，這就要認(rèn)真分析每個(gè)角色：Parents:不忍和孩子分離The boy:和父母一樣的感受Poppy:不忍the boy的離家再看環(huán)境：The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. 家沒有孩子住就同墳?zāi)挂粯?。這個(gè)比喻讓人心碎，可以說(shuō)是所有獨(dú)巢老人的感受?？梢哉f(shuō)，這前面寫的就是孩子離家?guī)?lái)的依依不舍，為了讓小狗不感到孤單，給它找個(gè)伴。怎么續(xù)寫？第一種：繼續(xù)寫孤獨(dú)，然后一條新的小狗

14、帶來(lái)了歡樂。這種寫下去，也可以，但是沒有亮點(diǎn)。我覺得要寫得更加耐讀，就需要站在人文的角度。第二種：所有孩子長(zhǎng)大了都會(huì)離家，這是必然的，人生就是不斷的離別。在離別中，我們逐漸成長(zhǎng)起來(lái)。這就是我的想法，有一種悲觀主義情調(diào)，但同時(shí)也有樂觀主義。于是我這樣寫：父母的成長(zhǎng)：從開始不習(xí)慣到最后恍然大悟。孩子的成長(zhǎng)：從開始的依戀到最后成熟，很快就能適應(yīng)新環(huán)境。狗狗的成長(zhǎng)：從開始追著主人不放到最后和新同伴的交往。這種成長(zhǎng)怎么去體現(xiàn)，我認(rèn)為最好通過各種照應(yīng)來(lái)暗示，本文通過：情緒、動(dòng)作、環(huán)境三個(gè) 角度。第二、風(fēng)格統(tǒng)一難。我在讀這篇文章時(shí)，努力進(jìn)入一種代入感， 我先假想自己是父母，我體會(huì)到父母心中的蒼涼; 我假想自

15、己是小狗，我想到我養(yǎng)過的好多狗，這是真的，不是寵物，而是看家狗。小時(shí)候他 們的種種可愛，譬如那種謹(jǐn)慎感，沒事就舔我的手等等。往事不堪回首，后來(lái)這些狗都分別死去。我想象我是孩子，第一年進(jìn)入大學(xué)后回家，我迫不及待告訴父母學(xué)校里發(fā)生的一切， 連普通話都沒有改成方言。這種代入感讓我寫的時(shí)候，把悲觀主義情調(diào)和樂觀主義強(qiáng)調(diào)給不斷交織起來(lái)。都是非常常見的，我認(rèn)為：真情為至于其它的用詞，實(shí)際上我并沒有用什么高大上的好詞, 王。Para 1 Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. It lifted and lowered its head alt

16、ernately with caution, its eyes shining out of curiosity. Say hello to your new friend, PoppyDad said in an encouraging voice. Poppy gave him a seemingly knowing look, scratching the box with its front paw. The little creature slowly stood up, jumped out with pains-taking efforts and yapped around P

17、oppy. They sniffed each other like old friends. The parents gasped in surprise even with kind of envy. They cannot imagine the two dogs enjoyed each other s company in ablink of an eye.A few weeks later the boy arrived home from university. He cannot wait to tell his parents about his new friends in the university. Strangely, he wasn t greeted with Poppy s eager barking tunbelievable scene