研究生學術英語寫作教程Unit10SubmittingPaper

1、Unit Ten Submitting PaperObjectives- Know the paper processing procedures- Become aware of politeness in letter writing- Write a submission cover letter and reply to the decision letterContents- Reading and discussion: A submission cover letter and a decision letter.- Language focus: politeness- Wri

2、ting practice: submission cover letter; reply to a decision letter; inquiry letter1. Reading Activity Your research paper is finished. The next step is to submit the paper to a suitable academic journal. This unit aims to show you the review procedure, hopefully bring you an awareness of two languag

3、e features of academic writing, and finally help you correspond with the edit-in-chief on your own.1.1 Pre-reading Task Before you learn the detailed information, please discuss the following questions.What should you consider about the journal you are going to submit the paper to?What should you do

4、 to your paper before submission?What should be included in your submission E-mail?How can we sound polite when we write the submission cover letter and reply to the decision letter? 1.2 Reading PassagesLetter 1-A submission cover letterDear Dr. James Joyce,This is a manuscript entitled "A NOVE

5、L ROOT-END FILLING MATERIAL BASED ON HYDROXYAPATITE, TETRACALCIUM PHOSPHATE AND POLYACRYLIC ACID " by Ling Huchong and Qiao Feng from State Key Laboratory of Bioelectronics, School of Biological Science and Medical Engineering, Southeast University, Nanjing, China. It is submitted to be conside

6、red for publication as an "Original Article" in your journal. No conflict of interest exits in the submission of this manuscript, and manuscript is approved by all authors for publication. I would like to declare on behalf of my co-authors that the work described was original research that

7、 has not been published previously, and not under consideration for publication elsewhere, in whole or in part. In this work, we developed a novel filling material hydroxyapatite/tetracalcium phosphate/polyacrylic acid cement (HA/TTCP/PAA), and further examined its chemical composition, physical pro

8、perties and cytotoxicity in comparison with glass ionomer cement (GIC) and Portland cement (PC). I hope this paper is suitable for “INTERNATIONAL ENDODONTIC JOURNAL”. The following is a list of possible reviewers for your consideration:1) Professor Duan Yu E-mail: duanyu2) Professor Shi Tai E-mail:

9、shitai We deeply appreciate your consideration of our manuscript, and we look forward to receiving comments from the reviewers. If you have any queries, please dont hesitate to contact me at the address below.Enclosed please find the paper. Thank you and best regards. Yours sincerely, Ling HuchongCo

10、rresponding author:Prof. Dr. Qiao Feng State Key Laboratory of BioelectronicsSchool of Biological Science and Medical EngineeringSoutheast UniversityNanjing 210096P.R. ChinaTel: (+8625) 12345678Fax: (+8625) 12345678E-mail: qiaofeng1.3 Reading Comprehension1.3.1 List the contents that should be inclu

11、ded in letter 1._Letter 2-A decision letterFrom:iejeditorcardiff.ac.ukTo:Qiao FengCC:Ling HuchongSubject:Manuscript ID IEJ-12-00123, International Endodontic JournalBody:Dear Dr. Qiao, Manuscript ID: IEJ-12-00123 Manuscript Title: Hydroxyapatite/Tetracalcium Phosphate/Polyacrylic Acid Cement: Chemic

12、al-Physical Properties and Cytotoxicity I have received the comments of the referees(s) and decided that your manuscript requires major changes and then go through the refereeing process again. However, please note that resubmitting your manuscript does not guarantee eventual acceptance. Should you

13、wish to revise and resubmit your manuscript, please revise your paper taking into account any points they have raised - their comments can be found at the end of this email. Also double check that in the body of the text and in the Reference section the names of authors are spelt correctly including

14、 any non-English characters where appropriate. You will be unable to make your revisions online using the originally submitted version of the manuscript. Instead, revise your manuscript on your PC/MAC using your word processing programme and save it on your computer. Please highlight the changes to

15、your manuscript within the document by using the "track changes" mode in MS Word or equivalent. To upload your revised manuscript, log on to and enter your Author Centre, where you will find your original manuscript title listed under "Manuscripts with Decisions". Under "Act

16、ions," click on "Create a Revision". Your manuscript number has been appended to denote a revision. When submitting your revised manuscript, you will be able to respond to the comments made by the referees(s) in the space provided. You can use this space to document any changes you ha

17、ve made to the original manuscript. Please be as specific as possible in your response to the referee(s). I look forward to receiving your revised manuscript. Kind regards Paul Dummer Editor-in-Chief,International Endodontic Journal iejeditorcardiff.ac.uk Editor comments to authors: Editor Comments

18、to the Author: (There are no comments.) Referee(s) comments to authors: Referee: 1 Comments to Author Title: Hydroxyapatite/Tetracalcium Phosphate/Polyacrylic Acid Cement: Chemical-Physical Properties and Cytotoxicity This manuscript introduces the reader to a new retrograde filling material and des

19、cribes the tests that were conducted and the comparison to currently used materials. The section Discussion was well done and discussed the relevance of each test to published research as well as relevant clinical applications. It would be helpful if the title would reflect that this report is on a

20、root end filling material. General comment. The entire manuscript needs to be edited for proper use of the English language and syntax. Introduction The sentence: “However, its defects prohibit clinical applications.”. The word “defect” is an odd choice. “shortcomings” would be more appropriate. The

21、 sentence: “To overcome these disadvantages, a new material, hydroxyapatite/tetracalcium phosphate/polyacrylic acid cement (HA/TTCP/PAA), with optimum properties, has been developed.” Authors you are reporting on your findings of your novel cement but already conclude in this Introduction that it ha

22、s “optimum properties”. At best you can state that it was your intent to develop a material with optimum or improved properties. Authors: Check instructions for authors for the required journal format for referring to the published literature. Materials and Methods The sentence: “The HA/TTCP/PAA pas

23、te was mixed.and the mixed with distilled water” Authors, after you have crushed the powders it makes no sense to describe the HA/TTCP/PAA as a paste. “The paste of HA/TTCP/PAA, GIC and GPC were placed into a plastic plate 37°C in 100%” Authors, use better description than “plastic plate”. “The

24、 final setting time was the average result of five sample specimens.” The words sample and specimens are synonymous. “Compressive strength was calculated from the mean value of five samples of each group”. You probably mean to say that the mean value for each group was derived from the 5 samples. “T

25、he materials were set in the molds for 24 h at 37°C in 100%humidity”. The meaning the materials were set is not clear. Please explain this method better. “The HA/TTCP/PAA, GIC and GPC pastes were manually shaped separately into an 8 mm diameter ball within 1 min.” Authors, it would be better to

26、 describe this as follows: At standard liquid/powder ratios each material was mixed and immediately, but within 1 min, manipulated into a ball. Although the test that was described lacks any scientific foundation, the figures were convincing. “The unreactive supernatants in the well were carefully s

27、ucked off, and 600 L .” Authors, use a better word than “sucked off” to remove the supernatants. Washout resistance test “The washout resistance result for the HA/TTCP/PAA showed no noticeable disintegration (figure 4); however, GIC paste balls had a large amount of debris” Replace the word “debris”

28、. The actual release of particles or dissolution of the GIC cannot be called debris. “Different from HA/TTCP/PAA, GIC was water sensitive during setting phase, which was supported in the present study by a large sum of debris around its paste ball in PBS, and suggested in Earl and Ibbetsons study by

29、 its easy damage in the early moist setting (Bodrumlu 2008)”. This reviewer does not understand the connection between Earl and Ibbetsons study and the reference made to Bodrumlu. Please clarify. The figures have no numbers. See pages 19-23 of the pdf. Referee: 2 Comments to Author March 24, 2012 Ti

30、tle: Hydroxyapatite/Tetracalcium Phosphate/Polyacrylic Acid Cement: Chemical-Physical Properties and Cytotoxicity Ms. #: IEJ-12-00-00123 GENERAL CONSIDERATIONS: Writing: Word use and grammar are at journal standards and need to be improved throughout. Organization: Good Other: Avoid the use of +/- t

31、o express variation. The preferred method is mean (stdev). For example: 11.0 (0.8) min. The discussion is too long and over-zealous relative to the experimental data (see specifics below). CONTENT Title 1. OK Abstract 1. The conclusion statement should be modified to say that it has low cytotoxicity

32、. Biocompatibility was not adequately evaluated to make the current statement. Also should say it IS promising, not MAYBE promising. The latter makes no sense. Introduction 1. OK, except for the writing inadequacies. Methods 1. p. 5, ll. 22: It is unclear how the washout test was quantified. Please

33、describe more thoroughly. 2. p. 5, ll. 11: How do the authors know that the Et2O treatment didn't affect the biological properites of the the materials? It seems it would have been better 3. p. 5, MTT assay. The 5 mg/mL concentration exposed to L929 for 4 h can be cytotoxic by itself. How did th

34、e authors control for this potential problem? Results 1. Fig, p. 20 (pH). Statistical analyses need to be shown on this graph. 2. Fig. p. 22 (cytotoxicity). These figures are too small for me to really evaluate thoroughly. 3. Table 1: heading suggests that setting times are compare, but I believe th

35、is is an error. It seems that only CS is compared. Please check. Discussion/Conclusions 1. First paragraph, p. 8 (setting). This paragraph seems speculative and askance of the experimental data for the most part. Please rewrite to relate more specifically to the XRD and IR data. 2. Paragraph , p. 9

36、(washout). This paragraph also is speculative and the analysis exceeds the experimental data. The best that can be said here is that the HA/TTCP/PAA cement shows promised in terms of its relative wash-out resistance. 3. Paragraph, p. 9/10 (pH). This text cannot be evaluated without statistical analy

37、sis of the data. 4. Biocompatibility (p. 10). The authors have done 2 tests, but they are really measuring the same thing they way they were performed (both assess the cell mass). Thus the discussion claims are overstated in terms of the utility of these two tests. A more convincing story would be t

38、o evaluate the materials much longer-term (say after 4 weeks or longer). This should be mentioned in the discussion- many individual have published results with longer terms. 5. Conclusions: are overstated. The authors should restrict their claims to say that the new material shows promise relative

39、to GIC and GPC. Little is possible to conclude beyond that! References 1. OK Illustrations (and Tables) Table 1: eliminate +/- signs and replace as suggested above. Transpose table to put the times along the top and the materials down the side. More effective. Fig 1: Helpful to vertically spread out

40、 the figure so that there is more space between traces at different times. Fig 2: wavenumber labels are too crowded to bottom curve. Add space. Fig. 3: Add stats to graph. I suggest that this would be better plotted as a line graph (pH vs. time), and avoid all the different column fills and crowded

41、legend, which are very distracting. Fig. 4. Unclear what the top vs. bottom rows are without looking at caption. Please label. Fig. 5 ab. Separate these into separate figures. Make them bigger, please. Complete the graph frame. Eliminate box around the legend. Space between numbers and units on the

42、x-axes. (e.g. 48 h, not 48h). Use of lowercase letter labels would be more effective than all the lines to show statistical differences. Date Sent:03-Apr-20121.3.2 Understanding letter 2Main idea:_The author should _ 2. Language Focus：Politeness2.1 Highlight the polite expressions in the two letters

43、.2.2 Make a response to the reviewer's comments in a polite way. The following sentence patterns are only for reference. We are very sorry for our negligence of We are very sorry for our incorrect writing It is really true as Reviewer suggested thatWe have made correction according to the Review

44、ers comments.We have re-written this part according to the Reviewers suggestionAs Reviewer suggested thatConsidering the Reviewers suggestion, we have Special thanks to you for your good comments.1. The entire manuscript needs to be edited for proper use of the English language and syntax._2. Check

45、instructions for authors for the required journal format for referring to the published literature. _3. Avoid the use of +/- to express variation. _3. Writing project3.1 The following is a cover letter template for submission of new manuscripts. Please write a cover letter for submission of your own

46、 research paper with this template.A cover letter template for submission of new manuscriptsDear Dr. Kravitz and Dr. Feldman,Paragraph 1: Overview (Article title, type, design, major finding)“We are pleased to submit our manuscript entitled: “XXX”, for consideration as a journal article type for ins

47、tance, original article or systematic review. Include one sentence on study design, where relevant. Example follows. “This study is a retrospective cohort study, comparing X outcomes of Y patients from Z health systems, from 19XX to 20XX. We found/illustrate major finding or conclusion.” Paragraph 2

48、: Context: Some authors will not need this paragraph. Ask yourself, what information would aid the editors in their decision-making process? Are there contextual factors that might inform the editors? Items for this paragraph might include potential conflicts, concurrent submissions from the same da

49、taset, interested groups/history, and what this manuscript contributes to the field beyond work published, submitted, or in preparation by your group. Examples: · Manuscripts from the same data set being submitted somewhere else, or you are planning to submit a related article elsewhere (all me

50、dia types). This helps us think about your study in context.“This manuscript is one of three papers describing the major findings of our study on XXXX outcomes in HIV populations. One paper on biologic outcomes XXX is under review at XXX journal, while another qualitative paper describing the experi

51、ence of men and women undergoing XXX treatment is under preparation for submission to XXX. The XXX funders website has published an abstract with preliminary data from our annual report.”· How work was developed (i.e. an organization encouraged project for a specific purpose. “This secondary da

52、ta analysis is culled from a prior study of quality of XXX care reference . . . and was triggered by work I had done for the Department of Health. They wanted to put navigators in place to reduce delays in XXX process in state hospitals but had no recent data about actual times to treatment. When we

53、 looked at our data, we were surprised to find that women with Medicaid did not receive worse care than women with commercial or Medicare insurance.”· Appendices that you have included for online publication only. “Given space restrictions, we have included our survey instruments and an extende

54、d set of blinded qualitative comments for inclusion as online appendices. Additionally, Im enclosing a multi-media DVD that can be uploaded to the publishers website. The login and password for this curriculum are.”Paragraph 3: Importance Why should this manuscript be published in *? Why will our readers be interested? What is the potential impact of your work (dont overstate it)? What is the unique contribution of your work to what is known about this topic? This should be 1-4 sentences. All authors should include this information.Paragr