專四作文評(píng)分細(xì)則及樣卷分析

1、TopicnRecently some banks extend their business to university campus and offer credit cards to students. A lot of people worry that credit cards may bring harm to students, while others dont think so. What is your opinion?nWrite on ANSWER SHEET THREE a composition of about 200 words on the following

2、 topic: nWill Credit Cards Bring Harm to the Students?InstructionsnYou are to write in three parts.nIn the first part, state specifically what your opinion is.nIn the second part, support your opinion with appropriate details.nIn the last part bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a

3、 summary.nMarks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.Will Credit Cards Bring Harm to the Students?n Recently, in order to extend business to university campus, some banks offer credit cards to college

4、 students. Many people worry that credit cards may do harm to students, while others dont think so. In my opinion, credit cards are good for students if they are used appropriately.n First, when a student uses credit cards, he neednt bring much cash with him every day. And the less cash he brings, t

5、he less he needs to worry about being stolen. Second, using credit cards can minimize the chances of receiving forged notes. Students are not quite good at distinguishing forged notes, and thus often become victims of coiners. If they use credit cards, it will be very possible for them to avoid rece

6、iving forged notes because they dont need to get the changes. Third, using credit cards can help students to know more about credit. If they dont repay their credit account in time, they will have to pay more interests and whats worse, they will get a bad credit record which will bring inconvenience

7、 to them in the future.n Therefore, I believe that credit cards will not bring harm to students if used reasonably. 評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)n滿分15分，分五個(gè)等級(jí)，14分、11分、8分、5分和2分，可以酌情加一或減一分，但不得加或減半分。n具體標(biāo)準(zhǔn)為：n14分：切題。表達(dá)思想清楚，文字通順，連貫性較好，基本無(wú)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。n11分：切題。表達(dá)思想清楚，文字連貫，但有少量語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。n8分：基本切題。表達(dá)思想比較清楚，文字上連貫，但語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤較多，其中有少量嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤。n5分：基本切題。表達(dá)思想不夠清楚，

8、文字連貫性差，有較嚴(yán)重的語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。n2分：條理不清，思想紊亂，語(yǔ)言支離破碎或大部分句子均有錯(cuò)誤，且多數(shù)為嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤。n交白卷，或作文與題目毫不相干，或只寫幾個(gè)單詞，以0分計(jì)算。n評(píng)分對(duì)于字?jǐn)?shù)的要求：累計(jì)字?jǐn)?shù)在150-170之間，扣1分；130-150之間，扣2分；110-130之間，扣3分；90-110之間，扣4分；90以下，至多給5分。若照抄提示中原句，均不得計(jì)入所寫字?jǐn)?shù)。n14-15分分 內(nèi)容切題內(nèi)容切題, 完整完整, 條理清楚條理清楚, 文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn), 語(yǔ)語(yǔ)法正確法正確, 語(yǔ)言通順恰當(dāng)語(yǔ)言通順恰當(dāng), 句式用詞富有變化句式用詞富有變化,基本無(wú)語(yǔ)言基本無(wú)語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤。錯(cuò)誤。n11-13

9、分分 內(nèi)容切題內(nèi)容切題, 完整完整, 條理較清楚條理較清楚, 文章結(jié)構(gòu)較嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)文章結(jié)構(gòu)較嚴(yán)謹(jǐn), 語(yǔ)言比較通順恰當(dāng)語(yǔ)言比較通順恰當(dāng), 少量語(yǔ)法，拼寫錯(cuò)誤。少量語(yǔ)法，拼寫錯(cuò)誤。n8-10分分 內(nèi)容基本切題內(nèi)容基本切題, 完整完整, 條理基本清楚條理基本清楚, 文章結(jié)構(gòu)文章結(jié)構(gòu)基本嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)基本嚴(yán)謹(jǐn), 語(yǔ)言基本通順恰當(dāng)，少量嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤語(yǔ)言基本通順恰當(dāng)，少量嚴(yán)重錯(cuò)誤, 一些詞一些詞使用不當(dāng)。使用不當(dāng)。n5-7分分 內(nèi)容基本切題內(nèi)容基本切題, 完整完整, 條理不夠清楚條理不夠清楚, 較明顯的較明顯的母語(yǔ)痕跡，較多語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤母語(yǔ)痕跡，較多語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤, 許多詞使用不當(dāng)。許多詞使用不當(dāng)。n2-4分分 內(nèi)容偏題內(nèi)容偏題, 不

10、完整不完整, 思路混亂思路混亂, 語(yǔ)句不完整語(yǔ)句不完整, 只有只有少數(shù)句子可以理解少數(shù)句子可以理解, 詞匯拼寫錯(cuò)誤嚴(yán)重。詞匯拼寫錯(cuò)誤嚴(yán)重。 TEM-4作文試題及樣卷評(píng)分作文試題及樣卷評(píng)分 2006年年TopicnRecently a Beijing information company did a survey of student life among more than 700 students in Beijing, Guangzhou, Xian, Chengdu, Shanghai, Wuhan, Nanjing and Shengyang. The results have sh

11、own that 67 percent of students think that saving money is a good habit while the rest believe that using tomorrows money today is better. What do you think? InstructionsnWrite a composition of about 200 words.nYou are to write in three parts.nIn the first part, state specifically what your opinion

12、is.nIn the second part, support your opinion with appropriate details.nIn the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.nYou should supply an appropriate title for your composition.Sample 1 The Good Habit Nowadays, more and more young people think that it is better

13、that using tomorrows money today than saving money, while in my opinion, I think its right.n For the first, our contrair has to develop. So it calls us to use more money to let the nation develop.n And then, that may make our life more comfortable. For example, I heard a story. There are two man. A

14、use tomorrows money to buy a new houseas he has to pay money to the bank every months while B start keeping money. n nTwenty years later, B finally keeping enough money to buy a new house, but A has been lived in it for twenty years and pay enough money to the bank.n At the end, if we have the abili

15、le to pay the list, why we dont use tomorrows money to let our life more wonderful?n So, thats what I think.n5-6分。結(jié)構(gòu)基本符合，但語(yǔ)言過(guò)于簡(jiǎn)單，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多，內(nèi)容模糊不清，題目不正確，字?jǐn)?shù)少于170。n舉例不可信。舉例應(yīng)該真實(shí)可信，比如親身經(jīng)歷、朋友體驗(yàn)或者名人軼事等。n文章結(jié)尾太簡(jiǎn)單。Sample 2：Saving Money is a Good Habit I think saving money is a good habit. Because saving money can

16、 make you learn how to use less money to buy more things. Saving money can make you become a rich man. If some thing happen one day, you must use some money to solve the problem, but nobody can lend to you the money. Your saving money can help solve the problem.n n Nowdays, some students use their p

17、arents money to buy a lot of unnessary things. Such as, Some students change their mobil phone every month. Its not a good habit. Although their parents have a lot of money, they cant use money in that way. Its waste of money.n If you save money as a habit. You can think carefully before you buy eve

18、rything. “This thing is necessary for me? Can I buy the cheaper one?” All those questions can be asked by yourself.n If you want to buy a very useful thing, but you dont have enough money, you can save money for it. After some time, you can buy it for your-self. n Saving money is a good habit. It ma

19、ke you become rich. It make you learn how to use less money to buy more things.n本卷得分8-9分。文章基本切題，結(jié)構(gòu)基本正確。但語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)單，重復(fù)動(dòng)詞，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤多。n開(kāi)始段沒(méi)有引入主題，而是直接提出作者觀點(diǎn)，太突然。而且有許多非完整句。n文章沒(méi)有深度，思考膚淺。Sample 3: Saving money is a good habitn The other day, I heard a conversation between a boy and a girl. “Why are you always lack of

20、 money? As far I know, your parents give you ample money for your daily life”. said the girl. “Yes, I always use tomorrows money today”. Said the boy. “Its a bad habit, and you should your money!” the girl shouted. This is a very common phenomenon among the university students. Owing to their argume

21、nt, certainly, I am in favor of the girls view. n What possibly contributes to the preference can be listed as follow. In the first place, money is very important for us. We use money buy food, buy clothes and so on. But, money is very precious, because its very hard to make money. So money should b

22、e used when its necessary. n In the second place, there are so many poor children who quit school for lack of money in poor religion. So its very significant to save our money to help those poor children. And they are look forward to your help! The last but the least important is that if you always

23、use tomorrows money today, you will form a bad habit. But your money is limited. So you may rob others of money.n In short, I hold a firm belief that saving money is a good habit and we should keep it forever. Its the high time that we took some measures to save money!n9-10分。文章切題，結(jié)構(gòu)正確，有內(nèi)容，有句式變化。但語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)

24、誤多，隨意，粗心漏詞。n說(shuō)理缺乏邏輯。比如很多小孩失學(xué)不是我們需要節(jié)約用錢的理由，再比如錢不夠用就會(huì)去搶別人的錢嗎？n文章的入題不錯(cuò)，但故事交代很馬虎，語(yǔ)言也很平凡，且不夠簡(jiǎn)練。n文章結(jié)尾主題被簡(jiǎn)單重復(fù)，思想沒(méi)有升華。Sample 4 n There is no concensus among the people on the issue of the choice between saving money and using tomorrows money today. The attitudes toward this problem vary from person to person

25、. And in my humble opinion, it is essential for us to save more money today instead of using tomorrows money. There are many reasons that may account for my point, and the following are the most conspicuous aspects.n To start with, we Chinese people boast a good tradition of being economical. The tr

26、aditional Chinese culture regards waste as a poor moral standard. As a university student, we need to keep on carrying forward our nations fine moral standard, i.e. saving. And saving money is conducive not only to the cultivation of a good moral, but also to release the heavy burden resulting from

27、some accidents in the future. In other words, saving todays money could meet our urgent need of it in the future.n nLast but not least, the fierce competition well face after we graduate is full of uncertainties. Once we could not find a job which offers high salaries, it will be impossible for us t

28、o return the money to the creditors.n To put it into a nutshell, I am a great believer that saving money is a good habit because it really exerts positive impacts on both the present and the future.n本卷得分12分。語(yǔ)言通暢，詞匯豐富，觀點(diǎn)明確，條理清楚，結(jié)構(gòu)正確。但有少量語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤和拼寫錯(cuò)誤。沒(méi)寫題目（如果有題目可給13分）。n TEM4便條評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及樣卷便條評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)及樣卷n 2007Note Wr

29、itingnWrite a note of about 50-60 words based on the following situation： nYour classmate, Jimmy, is head of the universitys swimming club. He has invited you to join the club, but you like some other sport. Write a note, declining his invitation and explaining why. nMarks will be awarded for conten

30、t, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Sample1: (8分分)n April 22, 2007nDear Jimmy,n I received your short message, and Im glad to learn that you have been promoted as head of our universitys swimming club. Congratulations! You deserve that. As to your invitation for me to join your club, Im af

31、raid I cant make it. n As you know, I am unable to swim and staying in water makes me uneasy. Funny, right? Whats more, I joined our schools basketball team two weeks ago. And I guess well exercise a lot for the competition held next month. So there is probably no time for me to learn swimming. Well

32、, maybe you could drop in and watch our competition next month.n Yours, SherrySample 2: (9分分)n April 22, 2007nDear Jimmy,n Thank you so much for inviting me to join the swimming club. Id like to but Im afraid I cannot. To learn tennis has long been my dream and the best tennis teacher will be leavin

33、g next year. So this is the last chance for me and I would like very much to seize it.n Best wishes.n Yours,n TomSection B Note-Writing (10 points)nApril 28, nDr Smith,n An English speech contest in honor of the 70th anniversary of the university will take place on the evening of May 12 (Saturday). The organizing committee would like you