2023屆初三上英語單元考試優(yōu)秀作文選三

2023屆初三上英語單元考試優(yōu)秀作文選三201-202霧霾（haze）是一種大氣污染。中國的霧霾越來越嚴重了。請以“TheHazeinChina”為題，寫一篇90詞左右的短文，客觀地介紹中國霧霾的現(xiàn)狀，霧霾的危害以及如何減少霧霾。初三2班陳鈺銘TheHazeinChinaHazeisakindofairpollution.ThehazeprobleminChinaisbecomingmoreandmoreserious,especiallyinBeijing.Ithascausedmanyproblems.Thehazeismainlycausedbyfactories.Itdoesgreatharmtopeople.Peoplewholiveinthehazealwayshavebreathingproblems.Thehazemakestheairdirtyandpeoplehardlyseeclearlyontheroad.Therefore,moretrafficaccidentshappenbecauseofthehaze.Sincethehazeisharmfultoboththeenvironmentandhumanbeings,wemustdoeverythingwecantoreduceit.Herearesomesuggestions:First,weshouldridebikesmoreofteninsteadofdrivingcars.Thecarsproducetoomuchharmfulgaswhenworking.Second,peopleoughtn’ttoburnwaste,becauseitalsoharmstheairquality.Third,weshouldplantmoretreestocleantheair.Inshort,Ihopethehazeproblemcanbesolvedassoonaspossible.教師點評：1、行文流暢，結構合理清晰。2、擅于使用剛學的新詞組來給文章潤色。初三年3班林滟雯TheHazeinChinaIfyougotoBeijing,ShanghaiorotherbigcitiesinChinanow,allthatyoucanseewillbegraycloudyskyandsmogeverywhere.Butit’snotsmog;it’sthehaze,akindofharmfulairpollution.ThisterriblephenomenonisbecomingmoreandmoreseriousinChina.Thehazecancausemanykindsofbreathingproblems,evenlungdisease.It’sgreatofharmtopeople’shealth.Sohowcanwedefeatthiskillerofhealth?Firstandforemost,everyonehadbetternotdrivecarsoften,andrideabikeinstead.Second,thefactoriesshouldreducethedischargeofgas.Lastbutnotleast,thegovernmentoughttoplantmoretrees.Ifwecanfollowtherulesabove,ourairwillbeclearerandourworldwillbebetter.教師點評：本文語言流暢，句型多樣，能緊扣題目要求，寫出自己的觀點。比如在闡述觀點時，使用了Firstandforemost（首要的是）…,Second,…Lastbutnotleast（最后但同樣重要的是）…體現(xiàn)了作者靈活的句式運用能力。初三年4班陳銘爾TheHazeinChina①It’sreportedthatthehazeinChinahasbecomemoreandmoreserious.Theairinmanyplacesisbadbecauseofthehaze.It’simportantforhumanbeingstohavefreshair.However,manypeopleinChinadon’thave.What’sworse,thehazecancausecancer.Howterrible!②So,weshoulddosomethingtochangethesituation.First,wecanplantmoretrees,becausetreescancleantheair.Second,wemuststopusingmanychemicals.InChina,somefactoriesusetoomanychemicalsandtheyproducemuchterriblegas.Third,ourgovernmentcanmakelawsagainstairpollution.Anyonewhobreaksthelawswillbepunished.③Asthesayinggoes,“Notacleanenvironment,thelivingconditionsfavorablemeaningless.”Fromnowon,Let’sdoeverythingwecantoreducethehaze!教師點評：本文非常清晰的闡述了霧霾的現(xiàn)狀、危害及解決措施。好的開頭（①句）+自然連貫的過度詞句（however;what’sworse,句②）+

引用名言的結尾（句③譯為：沒有一個清潔的環(huán)境，再優(yōu)裕的生活條件也無意義。）=好文章。初三5班王哲軼TheHazeinChinaInrecentyears,thehazehasappearedinmanypartsofChina,includingBeijing.Inacitywhereairpollutionisserious,whenthewindblowsstrongly,thehazemayforminashortwhile.Thehazedoesgreatharmtopeople’shealth.Itcancausepeopletohaveabreathingproblem,evencancer.What’sworse,thetrafficcanbemuchmoredangerousbecausethedriverscannotseeclearly.Asaresult,theremaybemoreaccidentsinsuchbadweather.Tochangethesituation,plantingmoretreesisagoodway.Andpeoplehadbettergooutonfootinsteadofdrivingacar.Ontheotherhand,thegovernmenthasadutytostopfactoriesproducingtoomuchterriblegas.Inshort,solvingtheproblemofhazeneedseveryone’sefforts.教師點評：本文行文流暢，層次分明。文中恰如其分地使用一些好詞好句，使得文章讀起來膾炙人口。初三6班劉怡昕TheHazeinChinaHazeisakindofairpollution,andit’smoreandmoreseriousinChinaespeciallyinBeijing.Itnotonlycausespeopletohavebreathingproblemsbutalsocausestrafficaccidents.Soithasbadeffectsonourhealthaswellasourdailylife.Thegovernmenthasdonesomethingtoreducehaze,butit’snotenough.Moreshouldbedonebyus.First,wecanencourageourfriendstousecarslessandusebicyclesmore.Second,wecanplanttreestomaketheairfresher.Third,wecanwritetothelocalgovernmenttoaskthemtostopfactoriesproducingharmfulgas.Inaword,weshoulddoourbesttoreducehaze.Althoughonepersoncandoabit,manypersonscandoalot.教師點評：本文語句通順，中心明確，表達正確。連詞運用得恰到好處。結尾簡潔有力，畫龍點睛！初三7班莊煜權TheHazeinChinaAsweknow,thehazeinChinahasappearedformanyyears.Ithasbecomeoneofthemostseriousproblemsinmanybigcities.Thehazeisakindofairpollution.Itisharmfultopeople’shealthandmakesusbeinabadmood.Wecanhardlybreatheasusualbecauseofit.What’sworse,itmaycausemoreaccidentsbecausedriverscan’tseeclearlyontheroad.Whatshouldwedotoreducethehaze?First,Ithinkweshouldcometounderstandtheimportanceofprotectingtheenvironment.Second,thegovernmentshouldtakemeasurestostopthechemicalfactoriesfromproducingtheterriblegas.Third,weshouldpassmorelawsagainstthehaze.Inshort,weshoulddoeverythingwecantoreducethehazeandprotectourenvironment.Let’sbegreenerpeople.教師點評：1、本文條理清晰，內(nèi)容緊扣主題，結構合理。2、正確地使用了一些已學詞組（劃線部分），做到學以致用。初三8班葉寧忻TheHazeinChinaThehazeisakindofairpollution.Nowadays,thehazeinChinaisgettingmoreandmoreserious,especiallyinsomedevelopedcitiessuchasBeijing,TianjinandShanghai.Thehazedoesgreatharmtopeoplebecauseitmaycausepeopletocough,getasorethroatandevenmaycauselungcancer.Ontheotherhand,therearemoreaccidentsbecausepeoplecan’tseeclearlywhenwalkingordrivingontheroad.So,whatshouldwedotoreducethehaze?First,weshouldplantmoretreesandstoppeoplefromcuttingthemdown.Second,weshouldridebikesorwalkinsteadofdrivingcarsbecausecarswillproduceterriblegaswhentheyareworking.Third,everyoneshouldcometounderstandthedangerofthehazeandtheimportanceofreducingit.Althoughwehavepassedlawsagainsttheairpollution,westillhavealongwaytogo.Let’stryourbesttomaketheaircleanerandfresher.教師點評：1.文章結構合理清晰，貼合題意。2.劃線句子優(yōu)美，詞組使用恰當合理，句子間條理清晰。初三9班吳昕怡TheHazeinChinaWiththedevelopmentofscience,moreandmoreenvironmentalproblemsareappearing.Suchasairpollution.Ithascausedthehaze.Andthehazeismoreandmoreserious.Especiallyinbigcities.Hazeisharmfultohumans’lives.Ifsomeonewalksonthestreetinthiskindofweather,hecanhardlyseeanything.Asaresult,therewillbemoreaccidentsthanbefore.Ofcourse,hazewouldalsomakepeoplefeeluncomfortableandunpleasant.Andhowcanwereducethehaze?Herearesomesuggestions.First,weshouldhavealowcarbonlife.Itmeansthatweshouldoftenwalkorridebikestoworkorgotoschoolinsteadofdrivingcars.Second,peopleshouldn’tburngas,oilandcoaltoomuch,Besides,scientistscandiscoverbetterenergyforhumans.Finally,weshouldplantmoretreestoreducecarbondioxide,Ifeveryonecandoeverythingwecantoprotecttheenvironment,theearthwillbecomenicerandnicer.教師點評：1.關于如何做的這一段條理清晰，內(nèi)容貼合主題。2.多處用到本學期學的內(nèi)容，學以致用。初三10班謝舒陽TheHazeinChinaHazeisakindofairpollutionandit’sveryseriousinsomebigcitiesinChina,includingBeijing,Shanghai.Asweknow,hazeisbadforhumans’health.Itcannotonlycausepeopletohaveapainintheirthroatoreyesbutevencausecancer.Besides,badairwillmakepeoplefeeluncomfortableandunpleasant.Whatshouldwedotosolvethisproblem?First,weshouldreducetheterriblegasmadebyfactoriesandcars.Second,weshouldn’tcutdowntoomanytreesandweshouldplantmoretreesinstead.Treescanmaketheairfresher.Third,everyoneshouldtryhisorherbesttoprotecttheenvironment.Weshouldwalktoschoolifyouhaveenoughtime.Hazeisharmfultopeople’shealth.Wemustdoeverythingwecantoreduceit.Let’sbecomegreenerpeopleandourworldwillbecomebetterandbetter.教師點評：1.文章內(nèi)容緊扣主題，結構合理，中間的過渡段使得文章條理更清晰。2.劃線部分可借鑒。初三11班林雅銘TheHazeinChinaAsweallknow,thehazeisakindofairpollutionanditisharmfultoourhealth.However,thehazehasbecomemoreandmoreseriousinChina.Inrecentyears,manybigcitiesinChinaespeciallyBeijinghavefoughtagainstthehaze.Manypeoplelivinginthesecitieshavebreathingproblems.Becauseofthehaze,wemayhavenochancetoseetheclearandbluesky.Anditreallydoesgreatharmtopeople’shealth.Itmightcausepeopletohavecancer.Sowemustdosomethingusefultoimprovethesituation.Wecangotoschoolbybusinsteadoftakingcars.Andthegovernmentshouldstopthechemicalfactoriesfromproducingterriblegas.Let’stryourbesttomaketheenvironmentbetterandbetter!教師點評：1.文章結構合理，條理清晰，緊扣主題。2.能恰當運用所學詞組或句型，做到學以致用。初三12班吳少穎TheHazeinChinaThehazeisakindofairpollution.ThehazeinChinaisbecomingworseandworse.InmanypartsofChina,theskyisgrayandtheairisbad.Withtheincreaseinpopulationandthedevelopmentofindustry,thehazehasbecomeaseriousproblem.Itdoesgreatharmtopeople’shealth.Wemaycoughandbecomesick.It’shardforustobreathe.Thehazecancausebreathingproblemsandevencancer.Wemustdosomethingtochangethesituation.Forexample,weshouldplantmoretreesanddoourbesttoprotecttheenvironment.It’simportantforthegovernmenttostopthefactoriesfromproducingterriblegas.Let’sdoeverythingwecantoreducethehaze!教師點評：1.能根據(jù)現(xiàn)實情況點出霧霾的危害性，并倡議大家重視環(huán)境保護。2.能恰當運用所學詞組或句型，做到學以致用。初三（14）鄭昊TheHazeinChinaHazeisakindofairpollution.It’sawfulandunhealthyforus.Thehazeinchinaismoreandmoreterriblenow.ThehazehasaffectedmanyareasofChina,especiallyinsomedevelopedcitiessuchasBeijing,Tianjingandsoon.“Thehazeisakiller.”somescientistssaid.Asamatteroffact,thehazehascausedmanyproblems.First,thehazeisharmfultoourhearth,itcanhurtourlungsalot.Second,thehazecanalsocausesometrafficaccidentsbecausethedriverscan’tseeanythingclearly.Third,manypeoplecomefromothercountriesdon’twanttovisitChinaagainbecauseoftheterriblehaze.Ifwecansolvethisproblem,ourcountrymustbemorepopulararoundtheworld.Then,howtosolveit?Quiteafewpeoplehavedifferentanswers.Ourgovernmentcandisencouragefactoriespollutingtheenvironment.Peopleshoulddrivecarsless.Wecanplantmoretrees.AlltheChineseshouldpayattentiontoprotectingourcountryfromthehaze.Stopthehazefromhurtingtheenvironment.Let’sdoeverythingwecan!IbelievethatChinawillbemoreandmorebeautiful.教師點評：本文結構合理，緊扣主題。行文很有條理，過渡銜接得好，表述清楚到位。要是能在多運用些有亮點的句子會更加完美。初三15班黃詩洋TheHazeinChinaHazeisakindofairpollution.ThehazeismoreandmoreseriousinChina,especiallyinnorthernareas.Thehazedoesgreatharmtopeople,animalsandplants.Anditcancausebreathingproblemsandsoreeyes.ManypeopleinnorthernareasofChinacan’tgooutbecauseofthehaze.Thehazeisveryharmfultous.Soweshouldtryoutbesttoreduceit.Ihavesomesuggestions.First,weshouldgotoschoolorworkbybike.It’sgoodfortheenvironment.Second,weshouldn’tburntoomuchoil,coalorwood.Finally,weshouldstopthefactoriesfromproducingterriblegas.Ithinkifwedoourbesttoreducethehaze,theenvironmentwillbebetter.教師點評：1、本文條理清晰，內(nèi)容緊扣主題，結構合理。2、正確地使用了一些已學詞組（劃線部分），做到學以致用。初三17班陳千紅TheHazeinChinaAsweknow,akindofairpollutioncalledhazeisbecomingworseandworseinChina.ItoftenappearsinmanybigcitiessuchasBeijing.Becauseofhaze,peoplealwaysbreathehardlyandcan’tseeanythingoutsideclearly.It’sbadforpeople’shealthandit’sdangerousforustowalkordriveonthestreet.Worstofall,hazecanevencausecancerandsomepeoplemaylosetheirlives.Itreallyisaseriousproblemthatwemustdealwith.First,weshouldreducetheterriblegasproducedbycarsandfactories.Second,wehadbetterridebikesorwalkinsteadofdriving.Last,weshouldplantmoretrees.Now,ourgovernmentistakingmanymeasurestosolvethisproblem.AndIbelieveourenvironmentwillbecomebetter.教師點評：本文結構清晰，脈絡分明，分段合理，語言流暢自然。2.能夠正確合適的使用所學的短語和定語從句，學以致用。初三18班陳琳炟TheHazeinChinaThehazeisakindofairpollution.ThehazeinChin