讀后續(xù)寫微技能的教學(xué)設(shè)計

讀后續(xù)寫微技巧

讀后續(xù)寫的具體內(nèi)容提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給段落開頭語和所標(biāo)示關(guān)鍵詞進(jìn)行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。讀后續(xù)寫的能力要求一、記敘文閱讀理解能力二、由讀到寫的思維能力三、記敘文書面表達(dá)能力一、記敘文閱讀理解技巧淺層的信息定位技巧：深層的文本分析技巧：

找故事的主要要素理清故事的發(fā)展線索明確文本的主要矛盾關(guān)注故事的語言風(fēng)格閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。

Twentyyearsago,Idroveataxiforaliving.OnenightIwenttopickupapassengerat2:30a.m.WhenIarrivedtocollect,Ifoundthebuildingwasdarkexceptforasinglelightinagroundfloorwindow.

Iwalkedtothedoorandknocked,"Justaminute,"answeredaweak,elderlyvoice.

Afteralongtime,thedooropened.Asmallwomaninhereightiesstoodbeforeme.Byhersidewasasmallsuitcase.

Itookthesuitcasetothecar,andthenreturnedtohelpthewoman.Shetookmyarmandwewalkedslowlytowardsthecar.

Shekeptthankingmeformykindness."It'snothing,"Itoldher."IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated."

"Oh,you'resuchagoodman."Shesaid.Whenwegotintothetaxi,shegavemeanaddress,andthenasked,"Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown?"

"It'snottheshortestway,"Iansweredquickly.

"Oh,I'minnohurry,"shesaid."I'monmywaytoahospice

(臨終醫(yī)院).Idon'thaveanyfamilyleft.ThedoctorsaysIdon'thaveverylong."

Iquietlyreachedoverandshutoffthemeter(計價器).Forthenexttwohours,wedrovethroughthecity.Sheshowedmethebuildingwhereshehadonceworked,theneighborhoodwhereshehadlived,andthefurnitureshopthathadoncebeenaballroomwhereshehadgonedancingasagirl.

Sometimesshe'daskmetoslowdowninfrontofaparticularbuildingandwouldsitstaringintothedarkness,sayingnothing.

Atdawn,shesuddenlysaid,"I'mtired.Let'sgonow."Wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme.

"HowmuchdoIoweyou?"sheasked.

"Nothing."Isaid.

"Youhavetomakealiving,"sheanswered."Oh,thereareotherpassengers,"Ianswered.Shesaidthankstome,butshelookedsosad.Readforkeyelamentswho:what:where:I,anoldwomanAnoldwomanaskedmetodrivethroughdowntowntoahospice

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inthetaxiReadfortheorganizationInwhatorderisthematerialdeveloped?Twentyyearsago,Idroveataxiforaliving.OnenightIwenttopickupapassengerat2:30a.m.WhenIarrivedtocollect,Ifoundthebuildingwasdarkexceptforasinglelightinagroundfloorwindow.

Iwalkedtothedoorandknocked,"Justaminute,"answeredaweak,elderlyvoice.

Afteralongtime,thedooropened.Asmallwomaninhereightiesstoodbeforeme.Byhersidewasasmallsuitcase.

Itookthesuitcasetothecar,andthenreturnedtohelpthewoman.Shetookmyarmandwewalkedslowlytowardsthecar.

Shekeptthankingmeformykindness."It'snothing,"Itoldher."IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated."

"Oh,you'resuchagoodman."Shesaid.Whenwegotintothetaxi,shegavemeanaddress,andthenasked,"Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown?"

"It'snottheshortestway,"Iansweredquickly.

"Oh,I'minnohurry,"shesaid."I'monmywaytoahospice

(臨終醫(yī)院).Idon'thaveanyfamilyleft.ThedoctorsaysIdon'thaveverylong."

Iquietlyreachedoverandshutoffthemeter(計價器).Forthenexttwohours,wedrovethroughthecity.Sheshowedmethebuildingwhereshehadonceworked,theneighborhoodwhereshehadlived,andthefurnitureshopthathadoncebeenaballroomwhereshehadgonedancingasagirl.

Sometimesshe'daskmetoslowdowninfrontofaparticularbuildingandwouldsitstaringintothedarkness,sayingnothing.

Atdawn,shesuddenlysaid,"I'mtired.Let'sgonow."Wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme.

"HowmuchdoIoweyou?"sheasked.

"Nothing."Isaid.

"Youhavetomakealiving,"sheanswered."Oh,thereareotherpassengers,"Ianswered.Shesaidthankstome,butshelookedsosad.

OnenightIwenttopickup……Iwalkedtothedoorandknocked……

Itookthesuitcase……Iquietlyreachedover……wedrovethroughthecity.Wedroveinsilencetotheaddress……Sequenceofevents二、由讀到寫的思維技巧細(xì)讀兩段續(xù)寫的開頭語，理順續(xù)寫段落的邏輯關(guān)系；圍繞劃定的關(guān)鍵詞，合理創(chuàng)新故事情節(jié)。Para.1:Almostwithoutthinking,Ibentandgaveherahug.

HowdidIfeelthen?WhatwouldIsaytoher?

Para.2:Thenextday……Whathappened?Whatwouldshetellme?Theunderlinedwordswhere020304droveataxiinnohurry,familyparticularbuildingsayingnothingmakealivinglongmymothertreated.三、記敘文書面表達(dá)技巧(一)語言的豐富性

(二)語篇的連貫性

(一)語言的豐富性1.詞匯、句式、語法的多樣性2.情感表達(dá)的多樣性3.動詞使用的豐富性1.詞匯、句式、語法的多樣性比喻、擬人、夸張等修辭格的使用情況。。主被動語態(tài)、非謂語動詞、獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)、with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)、虛擬語氣的使用情況。常見初級詞匯、高級詞匯，以及不同詞性的使用情況。比喻、擬人、夸張等修辭格的使用情況。句式結(jié)構(gòu)：語法結(jié)構(gòu)：詞匯選擇：修辭手法：Usemorespecificwordstoreplace“say”.shout,scream,yell,roar,cry,whisper,interrupt,add,continue,tell,remark,predict,repeat,guess,implyrefuse,agree,admit,complain,smile,urge,apologize,sigh,beg,explain，promise,comfort,warnask,wonder,doubt,answer,reply方式態(tài)度問答firmly/excitedly/seriously/jokingly/sincerelyingreatsurprise/alowvoice/asoftvoicewithdelight/excitement/embarrassment/pride/respect/alarm/satisfaction/caution/patience/certaintyMakeyour“say”morespecific.eyeshandsheadstare/glareat/lookherintheeye/withhereyesshining/filledwithtearsHiseyessparklewithexcitement/gratitudepathimontheshoulder/headgrasp/holdone'shandspointtosb/sthwavehishandsnod/shakehisheadviolentlyHethoughtforamomentMakeyournarrationmorevividwithappropriatemovement.(二)語篇的連貫性

1.內(nèi)容連貫故事大意一致，寫作意圖一致2.語句連貫——銜接詞的準(zhǔn)確使用but/howeverthoughunfortunatelyinsteadonthecontrarybesidesmoreoverfurthermorewhat'smorewhat'sworseworsestillsothusthereforeasaresult參考范文：Almostwithoutthinking,Ibentandgaveherahug.Sheheldontometightly.Beforethewomanleft,Isaidtoher,“Mymothertreatedeveryonekindly,sheisagreatperson,butshepassedawayyearsago.youarelikemymother,”thewomansaid,“thanky