2022高三高考英語(yǔ)二輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)微技能

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)微技能一、題型解讀讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)是隨著我國(guó)高考改革由教育部考試中心研制的英語(yǔ)高考新題型，2016年10月在浙江省首次使用。該題型通過(guò)讀寫(xiě)結(jié)合，檢測(cè)學(xué)生的英語(yǔ)書(shū)面語(yǔ)言理解與表達(dá)能力。要求學(xué)生能夠梳理故事文體的結(jié)構(gòu)、分析故事發(fā)展的線索、想象故事發(fā)展的情節(jié)以及續(xù)寫(xiě)故事的發(fā)展和結(jié)局。2020年山東省新高考英語(yǔ)卷首次采用讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)題型。讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)考題，提供一段350詞以?xún)?nèi)的語(yǔ)言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文(150詞左右)。從試題結(jié)構(gòu)看，讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)評(píng)價(jià)的是書(shū)面理解能力和書(shū)面表達(dá)能力。因此，在寫(xiě)作之前，首先讀懂文本，理清故事情節(jié)，然后構(gòu)思故事的發(fā)展和結(jié)局。二、命題特點(diǎn)該題型一方面考查考生對(duì)所學(xué)語(yǔ)言的實(shí)際運(yùn)用能力，另一方面也培養(yǎng)學(xué)生的發(fā)散思維能力。讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)不是隨心所欲地寫(xiě)，而是根據(jù)題目要求，再讀懂原文的基礎(chǔ)上，利用原材料的素材、線索和情節(jié)等充分發(fā)揮想象力和創(chuàng)造力來(lái)續(xù)寫(xiě)。通過(guò)對(duì)試題的分析，我們可得出讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的四大命題特點(diǎn)三、評(píng)分原則1．本題總分為25分，按七個(gè)檔次進(jìn)行評(píng)分。2．評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)主要從內(nèi)容、詞匯語(yǔ)法和篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三個(gè)方面考慮，具體為：續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容的質(zhì)量、完整性以及與原文情境的融洽度。所使用詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)的準(zhǔn)確性、恰當(dāng)性和多樣性。上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。3．評(píng)分時(shí)，應(yīng)先根據(jù)作答的整體情況確定其所屬的檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來(lái)綜合衡量確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。4．評(píng)分時(shí)還應(yīng)注意：詞數(shù)少于120的，酌情扣分；

書(shū)寫(xiě)較差以致影響交際的，酌情扣分；單詞拼寫(xiě)和標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是寫(xiě)作規(guī)范的重要方面，評(píng)分時(shí)應(yīng)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮英、美拼寫(xiě)及詞匯用法均可接受。四、評(píng)分檔次檔次描述第七檔(22—25分)創(chuàng)造了新穎、豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫(xiě)完整，與原文情境融洽度咼；使用了多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)流暢，語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤很少，且完全不影響理解；自然有效地使用了段落間、語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義連貫。第六檔(18—21分)創(chuàng)造了比較豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，比較有邏輯性，續(xù)寫(xiě)比較完整，與原文情境融洽度較咼；使用了比較多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)比較流暢，有個(gè)別錯(cuò)誤，但不影響理解；比較有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。第五檔(15—17分)創(chuàng)造了基本合理的內(nèi)容，有一定的邏輯性，續(xù)寫(xiě)基本完整，與原文情境相關(guān)；使用了比較恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)方式不夠多樣性，表達(dá)有些許錯(cuò)誤，但基本不影響理解；使用了語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。第四檔(11—14分)創(chuàng)造了基本完整的故事內(nèi)容，但有的情節(jié)不夠合理或邏輯性不強(qiáng)，與原文情境基本相關(guān)；使用了簡(jiǎn)單的詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，有部分語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤和不恰當(dāng)之處，個(gè)別部分影響理解；尚有語(yǔ)句銜接的意識(shí)，全文結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，意義基本連貫。第三檔(6—10分)內(nèi)容和邏輯上有一些重大問(wèn)題，續(xù)寫(xiě)不夠完整，與原文有一定程度脫節(jié)；所用的詞匯有限，語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，錯(cuò)誤較多且比較低級(jí)，影響理解；未能有效地使用語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)不夠清晰，意義欠連貫。第二檔(1—5分)內(nèi)容和邏輯上有較多重大問(wèn)題，或有部分內(nèi)容抄自原文，續(xù)寫(xiě)不完整，與原文情境基本脫節(jié)；所使用的詞匯非常有限，語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，錯(cuò)誤極多，嚴(yán)重影響理解；幾乎沒(méi)有使用語(yǔ)句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)不清晰，意義不連貫。

第一檔(0分)未作答；所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容太少或無(wú)法看清以致無(wú)法評(píng)判；所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容全部抄自原文或與題目要求完全不相關(guān)。五、寫(xiě)作步驟1．細(xì)讀文本要素，品讀主旨意圖。閱讀是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的起點(diǎn)，起點(diǎn)的質(zhì)量高低直接影響著續(xù)寫(xiě)能達(dá)到的高度。(1)在細(xì)讀文本要素的過(guò)程中，考生應(yīng)梳理關(guān)鍵信息，從內(nèi)容層面弄清楚文章的體裁、題材、中心人物、主要故事、發(fā)展線索等；從語(yǔ)言層面感知語(yǔ)篇的語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格、行文邏輯、故事發(fā)展等。(2)在品讀主旨意圖的過(guò)程中，考生應(yīng)從情感層面通過(guò)關(guān)鍵詞和故事脈絡(luò)來(lái)探究和確立文章的寫(xiě)作風(fēng)格、感情基調(diào)、主旨大意等。讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)不僅要求故事情節(jié)合理發(fā)展，也需要寫(xiě)作風(fēng)格一脈相承。最佳的續(xù)寫(xiě)應(yīng)是在內(nèi)容、語(yǔ)言和情感方面與原文風(fēng)格保持一致。2．預(yù)測(cè)發(fā)展趨勢(shì)，建構(gòu)合理情節(jié)。在提煉出人物、故事及主旨等文本要素后，考生應(yīng)當(dāng)結(jié)合兩段續(xù)寫(xiě)段落的首句充分發(fā)揮想象，預(yù)測(cè)故事的大致走向進(jìn)而勾勒出更加豐富、合理的故事情節(jié)。最后根據(jù)主旨和故事發(fā)展對(duì)信息作出選擇、拓展細(xì)節(jié)、組織內(nèi)容，從而完成續(xù)寫(xiě)這一創(chuàng)造性的思維過(guò)程。3．梳理寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)，善用語(yǔ)言，關(guān)注銜接。在完成讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的過(guò)程中，細(xì)讀是起點(diǎn)，建構(gòu)是中點(diǎn)，寫(xiě)作是重點(diǎn)。在前面信息建構(gòu)的基礎(chǔ)上，學(xué)生將選出的信息和拓展的細(xì)節(jié)建構(gòu)成故事發(fā)展的要點(diǎn)。寫(xiě)作中，學(xué)生還要注意與原文在文體和語(yǔ)言上保持一致。心靈雞湯系列的文章語(yǔ)言應(yīng)似和風(fēng)細(xì)雨，娓娓道來(lái)；故事類(lèi)的文章，用詞應(yīng)簡(jiǎn)單形象；短篇小說(shuō)類(lèi)的文章，結(jié)局較為意外，或諷刺或幽默或感人。此外，學(xué)生還應(yīng)注意續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容與所給段落首句的銜接程度，并確保所續(xù)寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容和主旨積極向上、富有正能量。L文章屮心內(nèi)L文章屮心內(nèi)容，段廿旬相結(jié)合細(xì)構(gòu)思—_情樣笈展是主侔、一細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)是關(guān)梃-初涉或稿梢寫(xiě)作|卿旬式一過(guò)底有效信息—出幄文章要盍六、高分策略1．避免失分點(diǎn)失分點(diǎn)1不符合基本要求：詞數(shù)少于120詞；兩段的詞數(shù)比例失調(diào)；隨意分段；時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤抄襲原文等。失分點(diǎn)2內(nèi)容不合邏輯：缺乏合理想象；續(xù)寫(xiě)部分內(nèi)容與上文不連貫：續(xù)寫(xiě)部分與已提供材料之間的邏輯，續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段內(nèi)容之間的邏輯以及續(xù)寫(xiě)部分與所給開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)之間的邏輯。失分點(diǎn)3語(yǔ)言不夠豐富恰當(dāng)：所使用語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)與詞匯的豐富性、準(zhǔn)確性不夠；刻意使用生僻詞匯和復(fù)雜句式，不考慮與原文語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格的一致性。失分點(diǎn)4腦洞開(kāi)太大：想象不合理；續(xù)寫(xiě)部分立意不高；價(jià)值觀有爭(zhēng)議。2．掌握提分點(diǎn)（1）四審題目，不失基本分審要求：詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右（不少于120詞）。審體裁、時(shí)態(tài)：明確前文的體裁，確定續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的格式和語(yǔ)言；確定前文的時(shí)態(tài)，避免續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容出現(xiàn)時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤。審前文大意和要點(diǎn)：讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)一般是記敘文，所以應(yīng)找出前文中的六要素，以確保續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容與前文的連貫性。審續(xù)寫(xiě)所給段首句:研讀續(xù)寫(xiě)題目所給出的第一句話，注意續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容與前文內(nèi)容的融合性，以及所續(xù)寫(xiě)的兩段內(nèi)容之間的銜接性。（2）三大技巧，巧奪能力分立意“高大上”，情節(jié)豐富合理（細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)：動(dòng)作、心理、評(píng)價(jià)與感悟），使文章脫穎而出。升級(jí)詞匯與句式，增加得分亮點(diǎn)。（高級(jí)詞匯，句式靈活）書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范工整，卷面開(kāi)啟“美顏”特效，巧得“印象分”。應(yīng)考微技能一份高考作文在閱卷時(shí)往往在半分鐘左右判分?jǐn)?shù)，所以大眾化的詞匯，平庸的表達(dá)會(huì)使閱卷老師產(chǎn)生視覺(jué)疲勞。如果一篇作品突然使用了與眾不同，讓人眼前一亮的詞匯、句型及細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)的話，閱卷老師絕不會(huì)吝嗇給分。因此，我們?cè)谄綍r(shí)的學(xué)習(xí)中應(yīng)多積累一些好詞好句。u高叛詞匯―、表示人物開(kāi)心快樂(lè)1．難以形容地開(kāi)心：indescribablywildjoy2．極為感動(dòng)：beoverwhelminglymoved3．幾乎無(wú)法掩飾他的興奮：canhardlyconcealhisexcitement4．既興奮又開(kāi)心：amixtureofexcitementandhappiness5．激發(fā)某人的激情：kindlesb.with/topassion6．顯示出極大的意愿：showagreatreadiness7.被強(qiáng)烈地吸引：bepowerfullyattractedto8．心情愉快：incheerfulspirits振作精神：keepupone'sspirits滿(mǎn)意的表情：asatisfiedlook.對(duì)感到滿(mǎn)意：becontentwith.對(duì)很高興：bedelightedat為成功而欣喜：beexcitedwithjoyatthesuccess被場(chǎng)面所吸引：befascinatedbythespectacleof被她的美貌所吸引：befascinatedwithherbeauty因而高興：bejoyfulover/about喜愛(ài)，對(duì)著迷：bekeenon快樂(lè)至極：beoverwhelmedwith高興地跳起來(lái)：dance/jumpforjoy欣喜若狂：bewildwithdelight21.一個(gè)令人鼓舞的表情：anencouragingexpression過(guò)一個(gè)愉快的假日：haveapleasantholiday心滿(mǎn)意足，非常幸福：onthetopoftheworld對(duì)（做）感到非常高興：overjoyedat/todo流下幸福的淚水：tearsofhappinessflowdown樂(lè)得大叫：yellwithdelight使某人心情愉快：brightensb.'sheart使某人安心：setone'sheartatrest感到鼓舞的：feelinspired/encouraged精神高漲：beinhighspirits二、表示人物傷心抑郁1.強(qiáng)烈的失落感：astrongsenseofloss陷入絕望：fallintodespair讓他很傷感：puthimintoasentimentalmood避免陷入消極的漩渦：avoidgettingsuckedintoawhirlpoolofnegativity哭泣釋放苦悶情緒：cryinggivessomeemotionalrelease減輕某人的痛苦/煩惱：easesb.ofhispain/trouble因某人的死亡而痛心：breakone'sheartoverone'sdeath使某人悲痛：makeone'sheartbleed傷心而死：dieofabrokenheart悲痛欲絕：cryone'sheartout11．懷著沉重的心情：withaheavyheart沮喪的：withasinkingheart憂(yōu)郁的：withasorrowfulheart驚慌失措：beseizedwithpanic15.有點(diǎn)驚訝：comeassomethingofasurprise感到疲憊不堪：feelexhaustedandoverwhelmed很可能引發(fā)一陣挫敗感：beextremelylikelytoraiseastormoffrustration某人突然感到一陣悲傷：aflashofgriefcomesuponsb.情緒低落：bedowninspirits垂頭喪氣：loseone'sspirit心里悲傷：besadatheart意志消沉：abrokenspirit三、表示人物憤怒怨恨1.引起某人的不快：arouseone'sdispleasure對(duì)某人的行為感到不滿(mǎn)：bedispleasedatone'sconduct易為瑣事而惱火：beeasilyannoyedattrifles氣得說(shuō)不出話：bespeechlesswithindignation不斷地抱怨：complainconstantly對(duì)大發(fā)脾氣：rageatsb.怒火萬(wàn)丈：flamehigh氣得滿(mǎn)臉通紅：flamewithanger勃然大怒：flyintoarage對(duì)某人生氣：getirritatedat對(duì)某人勃然大怒：getmad/crossatsb.愁眉苦臉：haveaworriedlook對(duì)抱怨不予理會(huì)：ignore/disregardacomplaint對(duì)表示不滿(mǎn)：express/voiceacomplaintabout怒氣沖沖地跑出房間：runoutoftheroominaburstofanger憤怒地跺腳：stampone'sfootinanger感到尷尬的：feelembarrassed感到困惑的：feelpuzzled/confused感到沮喪的：feelfrustrated/depressed感到惡心的：feeldisgusted/sickened21.感到惱怒的：feelannoyed22．感到憤怒的：feelirritated感到泄氣的：feeldiscouraged充滿(mǎn)怨恨的眼神：aresentfullook四、表示人物其他情緒1.激發(fā)興趣：find...highlystimulating寬容的精神：aforgivingspirit以和藹可親的態(tài)度：withakindlyandgoodhumoredspirit某人對(duì)一點(diǎn)也不感興趣：erestedin...混合著焦慮與希望的情緒：mixedwiththeemotionofanxietyandhope引起強(qiáng)烈的情感：setoffstrongfeelingsintheheartsof...對(duì)徹底上癮：behopelesslyaddictedto在這些情緒的控制下：underthedominationoftheseemotions五、表示人物的外貌特征1.優(yōu)美的身材：agracefulfigure勻稱(chēng)的形體：ashapelyfigure瘦削的身材：askinnyfigure細(xì)長(zhǎng)的身體：aslimfigure發(fā)育良好的身體：awelldevelopedfigure儀表堂堂：animposing/adashing/ahandsome/astrikingfigure（人）形體很好：haveagoodfigure改善形體：improveone'sfigure看到月光下有一個(gè)模糊的人影：seeadimfigureinthemoonlight炫耀某人優(yōu)美的身段：showoffsb.'slovelyfigure中等身材：anaveragebuild身材魁梧的人：awellbuiltman六、表示人物個(gè)性品質(zhì)1.務(wù)實(shí)的：bedowntoearth保守的性格：conservativepersonality缺乏責(zé)任感：lackofresponsibility4.具有的美德：withthevirtueof責(zé)任感：asenseofresponsibility一個(gè)專(zhuān)心致志進(jìn)行探索的科學(xué)家：ascientistbentonmakingadiscovery高素質(zhì)、有經(jīng)驗(yàn)的老師：highlyqualified，wellexperiencedteachingstaff8.脾氣好的人：agoodhumored/goodnaturedperson9．一個(gè)完美的人：afaultless/perfectperson10．一個(gè)有自制力的人：aselfpossessedperson11．一個(gè)疑心重的人：asuspiciousperson12．有抱負(fù)的人：anambitiousperson13．聰明人：anintellectualperson14．個(gè)性強(qiáng)的人：amanoffinepersonality15．容易相處的人：aneasypersontodealwith16．冷酷無(wú)情的人：acoldbloodedman17．性情和善的男子：agoodnaturedman18．嚴(yán)肅的年輕人：aseriousyoungman19．頭腦簡(jiǎn)單的人：asimplemindedman20．能說(shuō)會(huì)道的人：asmoothspokenman21．消息靈通/見(jiàn)多識(shí)廣的人：awellinformedman22．?huà)轨o有禮的淑女：aquiet，graciouslady23．說(shuō)話直率的人：anoutspokenman24．有教養(yǎng)的女子：aculturedwoman七、表示人物心理活動(dòng)1．鼓起勇氣：masterupcourage2．期待：intheexpectationof不顧對(duì)的憂(yōu)慮：regardlessofconcernover4．感覺(jué)不適：feeloutofplace毫無(wú)倦意：shownosignsoftiredness走神：keepdriftingaway好奇地向某人看：throwacuriousglanceatsb.對(duì)某事不存幻想：beundernoillusionaboutsth.不耐煩地聽(tīng)：listenimpatiently贊賞的目光：anadmiringgaze八、表示人物的動(dòng)作步態(tài)優(yōu)美地走：walkgracefully拖著疲憊的雙腿回家：gohomeontiredlegs朝某人匆匆瞥了一眼：castahastyglanceatsb.聽(tīng)到遠(yuǎn)處隆隆的雷聲：hearthethunderrollinginthedistance穿過(guò)田野的散步：awalkacrossthefields爆發(fā)出陣陣喝彩聲：breakintoshoutsofapplause7．自吹自擂：singone'sownpraise嚴(yán)厲訓(xùn)斥某人：givesb.asharpscolding一躍而起：jumptoone'sfeet漫步向山里走去：wanderintothemountain散步；閑逛：have/takeastroll來(lái)回踱步：pacebackandforth毫無(wú)目的地在街上游蕩：wanderaimlesslythroughthestreets臂挽著臂走：walkarminarm故意說(shuō)：saysth.deliberately九、表示天氣涼爽清新的風(fēng)：cool，refreshingbreeze落日：thesetting/decliningsun多雨的季節(jié)：arainyseason暴風(fēng)雨之夜：astormynight四面受風(fēng)：exposetothefourwindsofheaven連綿不斷的雨：continuous/constantrains在茫茫大雨中：intheblindingrain深埋在雪中：beburiedinsnow難以忍受的酷熱：unbearablyhot在春天溫暖的陽(yáng)光里：inthewarmspringsunshine放晴：clearup狂風(fēng)暴雨：fierce/heavy/violentstorms及時(shí)雨：atimely/seasonablerain沐日光浴：bathe/baskin(the)sunshine在盛夏灼熱的陽(yáng)光下：undertheblazing/scorching/burningsunofmidsummer十、表示地理位置位置優(yōu)越的城市：afavorablysituatedcity水下面的暗礁：ahiddenrockbeneaththesurfaceofthewater一個(gè)偏僻的小村子：asmallvillageoffthemap離海濱僅咫尺之遙：withinastone'sthrowofthebeach位于最北端：besituatedatthenorthernextremeof...在群山環(huán)抱的村莊里：inavillageamongthehills朝南的房間：roomfacingsouth8.人煙稀少的農(nóng)村地區(qū)：thethinlypopulatedruralarea9．位于太平洋沿岸某處：belocatedsomewhereonthePacificcoastR常用句式—、表示心理描寫(xiě)Myheartbegantoraceandmymindwentblank.我心跳開(kāi)始加速，腦子里一片空白。Somanythoughtscrowdedintohermind，allatonce.那么多的想法突然涌入她的腦海。Soashamedwasshethatshecouldfeelthebloodrushtoherface.她是如此的羞愧以至于臉如充血般發(fā)燙。Whenthehostannouncedthatshewontheprize，awideexcitementtookholdofher.當(dāng)主持人宣布她獲獎(jiǎng)時(shí)，她的激動(dòng)之情溢于言表。Hisheartsankwhenheheardthenewsthathefailedtowinaprize.聽(tīng)到他沒(méi)獲獎(jiǎng)的消息，他的心情沉重。Onbluedaysyoufeellikeyou'refloatinginanoceanofsadness.在憂(yōu)郁的日子里，你會(huì)覺(jué)得自己在悲傷的海洋里沉沉浮浮。Asaresultofanaccident，Tonywassuddenlythrownintoaworldofdarknessandsankintohopelessness.因?yàn)橐粓?chǎng)事故，托尼的世界突然陷入一片黑暗與絕望之中。Terroranddeathstruck，andherheartwasbeatingpainfullyfast，bangingagainstherribs.恐怖和死亡襲來(lái)，她的心臟跳動(dòng)得非常快，撞擊著她的肋骨。Ifeltthatthebloodinmybodycooled/frozerapidlybecauseoftheterriblesight.看到這可怕的景象，我感覺(jué)我的血液都凝固起來(lái)。Hewassickwithfear，butthethoughtoftheconsequencesurgedhimon.他因害怕而感到惡心，但一想到結(jié)果，他還是要繼續(xù)下去。Iwonderifit'sbecauseIhaven'tbeenabletobeoutdoorsforsolongthatI'vegrownsocrazyabouteverythingtodowithnature.我不知道這是不是因?yàn)槲姨脽o(wú)法出門(mén)的緣故，我變得對(duì)一切與大自然有關(guān)的事物都無(wú)比狂熱。Icanwellrememberthattherewasatimewhenadeepbluesky，thesongofthebirds，moonlightandflowerscouldneverhavekeptmespellbound.我仍然清楚地記得曾經(jīng)有一段時(shí)間，湛藍(lán)的天空，鳥(niǎo)兒清脆的歌聲，月光明亮，花香彌漫，從未令我心迷神往過(guò)。13．Iwasalittlenervousatfirst，buteveryonewassoniceandfriendlythatIsoonstoppedworrying.起初我有點(diǎn)緊張，但是大家都那么友好，我很快便不再擔(dān)心了。14．TheEagleswenthomeangryandbitterbecausetheydidnotwinthetournament.Meanwhile，theKangarooswenthomeandtrainedharderthanbefore.老鷹隊(duì)隊(duì)員們回到了家，內(nèi)心既憤怒又苦澀，因?yàn)樗麄儧](méi)有贏得錦標(biāo)賽。與此同時(shí)，袋鼠隊(duì)隊(duì)員們回家后，訓(xùn)練得比以前更刻苦了。15．Ifeltsoashamed.Imustbereallystupidtofailasimplemathquiz!我感到很丟臉。我一定是蠢到家了才會(huì)連一次簡(jiǎn)單的數(shù)學(xué)測(cè)試都沒(méi)通過(guò)！16．Afterwards，Ipretendedtobecheerful，butHannahsensedsomethingwaswrong.后來(lái)，我假裝很開(kāi)心，但是漢娜覺(jué)察到了異樣。17．Afteracoupleofweeks，theexcitementstartedtofade，andhomesicknessstartedtosetin.幾個(gè)星期后，那股興奮勁開(kāi)始減退，想家的情緒開(kāi)始蔓延。二、表示環(huán)境描寫(xiě)1．Thesunbegantoriseinthesky，bathingthemountainingoldenlight.太陽(yáng)開(kāi)始緩緩升起，給山披上了一層金紗。2．Thesunroseoveraquietworldandlookedwarmlydownuponthepeacefulvillage.太陽(yáng)在一個(gè)寧?kù)o的世界里升起，溫暖地俯視著這個(gè)寧?kù)o的村莊。3．Theskyisclearbluenowandthesunhasflungdiamondsdownonmeadows，riverbanksandwoods.此時(shí)已是萬(wàn)里藍(lán)天，太陽(yáng)將鉆石般燦爛奪目的陽(yáng)光灑向草原，灑向河岸，灑向樹(shù)林。4．Theroselookslikeanangel，swayinginthewind，dancinginthesun.這朵玫瑰就像是在風(fēng)中搖擺、在陽(yáng)光下跳舞的天使。5．Thegroundswerecoveredwithdarkgreengrassthroughwhichstretchedastraightwhitestonepath.庭院里處處是碧綠的芳草，綠草中鋪著潔白筆直的石路。6．Thebeautifulsceneryisafeastforyoureyes.美麗的景色令人大飽眼福。7．Thesesublimeandmagnificentscenesofferedmethegreatestconsolation.這些令人贊嘆的壯美景色給了我極大的安慰。8．Nanjing，anoldcitywitharichandcelebratedpast，yetvigorousinhernewyouth—howlovelysheis!南京，這座古老而又年輕的歷史文化名城，是多么的可愛(ài)！9．Itwassoquietintheclassroomthatthesoundofaneedleinthegroundcouldbeheard.教室里很安靜，連一根針掉在地上的聲音都聽(tīng)得見(jiàn)。10．Whenwereachedthetopofthehill，amagnificentviewoftheseagreetedus.當(dāng)我們到達(dá)山頂時(shí)，我們看到了一片壯麗的海景。11．Thedark，rainyevening，thewind，thethunderingcloudsheldmeentirelyintheirpower.那漆黑的雨夜，刮著大風(fēng)，電閃雷鳴，烏云滾滾，我完全被這種景象鎮(zhèn)住了。12．However，thelakesshonelikeglassinthesettingsunandlookedwonderful.然而，湖水在落日的余暉下閃亮如鏡，景色迷人。13．Thehutwasdarkinsidesoittooktimeforoureyestoadjust.小屋內(nèi)很黑，所以我們的眼睛需要點(diǎn)時(shí)間才能適應(yīng)。14．Theroomisinamess，withpizzaboxesontheflooranddirtydishesinthesink.Inthecorner，thereisagarbagecanaroundwhicharepiecesofgarbageandwastepaper.房間里一片混亂，地上扔了些比薩盒子，水槽里堆著臟盤(pán)子。角落里有一個(gè)垃圾箱，周?chē)⒙渲鴱U紙屑和垃圾。15．Uponthearrivalofspring，beautifulbirdswillsinghappilyinthepark.春天一到，美麗的鳥(niǎo)兒們就會(huì)在公園里歡快地歌唱。16．Thenarrowwindowsadmitlittlelightintotheroom.窗戶(hù)很窄，只有少量的光能照進(jìn)這個(gè)房間。17．Atthecloseoftheafternoonservice，wereturnedbyanexposedandhillyroad，wherethebitterwinterwind，blowingoverarangeofsnowysummitstothenorth，almostgrayedtheskinfromourface.下午的禱告結(jié)束以后，我們沿著一條光禿崎嶇的山路返回。冬日刺骨的寒風(fēng)吹過(guò)大雪覆蓋的山峰，吹向北邊，吹得我們一臉蒼白蕭索。18．Thebrightlyburningmeteordarkenedthelight.熊熊燃燒的流星使光線都變暗了。三、表示動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)1．ItwasobviousthatthemanagerofthecoffeeshopwaswaitingforLiFangtoleave—hewipedthetables，thensatdownandturnedontheTV.很明顯，咖啡館的經(jīng)理在等李方離開(kāi)——他擦好桌子，然后坐下來(lái)，打開(kāi)電視。2．Hiseyesstareatwhatisleftofthebrother'sdinnerontable.他的眼睛盯著兄弟倆留在餐桌上的殘羹剩菜。3．OlivergetsitfromadeskandgivesittoHenrylikeagift.奧利弗從桌上取過(guò)信，像送禮物一樣遞給亨利。4．Thehostessscreams，theothercustomerslookatherandsheputsahandtohermouth.老板娘尖叫起來(lái)，其他顧客都望著她，于是她用手捂住了嘴巴。5．Theowner，hostessandwaiterallbowasHenryleaves.當(dāng)亨利離開(kāi)的時(shí)候，店主、老板娘和服務(wù)員都向他鞠躬致敬。6．Charliefirstpicksoutthelacesandeatsthemasiftheywerespaghetti.Thenhecutsofftheleathertopoftheshoeasifitwerethefineststeak.查理先把鞋帶挑出來(lái)，像吃意大利面一樣把它們吃了。然后他把皮制的鞋頭切下來(lái)，就好像那是最美味的牛排。7．Shesteppedbackappearingsurprisedandputupherhands，asifindefence.她退了幾步，顯得很吃驚，舉起了手，想要自衛(wèi)。8．Heheldherfirmlyinhisarmsandshefeltthewarmthofhisbody.Shescreamed，pushedhimawayandrantoherroomfortherestoftheday.他把她緊緊地?fù)г趹牙?，她感覺(jué)到他身體的溫?zé)幔饨辛似饋?lái)，推開(kāi)他，跑進(jìn)她的房間，之后一整天都未出來(lái)。9．Theboyswhohadnevercomeacrossanythinglikethisbeforestartedjumpingoutofthewindows.以前從來(lái)沒(méi)有見(jiàn)過(guò)這種情況的男孩們嚇得從窗戶(hù)跳了出去。10．ProfessorHigginscarelesslythrowsahandfulofmoneyintoherbasket.希金斯教授漫不經(jīng)心地朝她的籃子里扔了一把錢(qián)。11．ElizaDoolittle：(lookingatthecollectedmoneyinamazement)Well,Inever.Awholepound!伊萊扎?杜利特爾：(驚奇地看著收集起來(lái)的錢(qián))啊，我還從來(lái)沒(méi)有見(jiàn)過(guò)！整整一英鎊呢！12．MrsPearce：(onlyhalfresignedtoit)Verywell，sir.(goesdownstairs)皮爾斯夫人：(似聽(tīng)非聽(tīng)地)好吧，先生。(隨即向樓下走去)13．Danielrunsintohisbedroomandshutsthedoorangrily.丹尼爾跑進(jìn)臥室，生氣地關(guān)上了門(mén)。14．Duringtheexperiment，volunteerswereaskedtosniffvariouspleasantsmellsandunpleasantsmells.實(shí)驗(yàn)期間，志愿者要去聞各種好聞的、不好聞的氣味。15．TheEagle'scaptainknockedtheballtothegroundwithhishand，andthenkickeditandscored.Therefereeblewthewhistle；thematchwasoverandtheEagleshadwon.老鷹隊(duì)的隊(duì)長(zhǎng)用手將球擊倒在地，踢了一腳，進(jìn)球得分了，裁判吹響了哨子。比賽結(jié)束，老鷹隊(duì)贏了。16．Shesaidthatsomeonemusthavebeenspyingonusinthewashroom，butIdidn'tbelieveherexplanation.她說(shuō)肯定有人在洗手間一直監(jiān)視我們，但是我不相信她的解釋。17．AsIdroppedmydadoff，Iwatchedhim，dressedinhisworkclothes，gettinghistoolsfromthetrunkofmycar.我讓父親下車(chē)，看著他穿著工作服，從車(chē)后備箱里拿工具。18．Hebrokedownintearsandwasnevergoingtoletheroutofhissightagain.他痛哭流涕，再也不會(huì)讓她離開(kāi)自己的視線。19．Herfatherturnedawayasatearofjoyrolleddownhischeek.她的父親別過(guò)臉，喜悅的淚水從臉頰上滾落下來(lái)。四、人物外貌描寫(xiě)1．Hehadawidemouthandhumorousgreyeyes.他有一張大嘴和幽默的灰色眼睛。2．Twospotsofcolorbrightened/lituphercheeks.兩朵紅霞暈染了她的臉頰。3．Hehastwobigdarkeyesunderapairofthickeyebrows.在一對(duì)濃密的眉毛下是他大而黑的雙眼。4．Inoticedthathiseyeswereblack—coalblack.我注意到他的眼睛是黑色的——炭黑色的。5．Shearrivedlateforclass，herhairwetandmessy.她上課遲到了，頭發(fā)又濕又臟。6．Shewasfairskinned，havingreddishhairandlongfingers.她皮膚白皙，有著紅發(fā)和修長(zhǎng)的手指。7．Hisstronglybuiltbodyandsuntannedskinmakehimlooklikeasportsman.他強(qiáng)壯的身體和曬黑的皮膚使他看起來(lái)像一個(gè)運(yùn)動(dòng)員。8．Everythingabouthimwasoldexcepthiseyesandtheywerethesamecolorastheseaandwerecheerfulandundefeated.他身上的一切都顯得古老，除了那雙眼睛，它們像海水一般藍(lán)，是樂(lè)觀而不肯認(rèn)輸?shù)摹?．Hehassparkingbluegreeneyes，thinningsilverhairthatspillsontohisforehead，bigears，atriangularnose，andtuftsofgrayingeyebrow.他的眼睛閃爍著藍(lán)綠色光芒，稀疏的銀發(fā)散落在前額，大耳朵，三角形的鼻子和灰白的眉毛。10．Theyoungwomanwastall，withgraceandelegance.Shehadagreatamountofdarkhairthatwasshowninthesunlight，andafacemorebeautifulthananyother，withdark，mysteriouseyes.Shewaspoliteandwellmannered，withatenderlook.這個(gè)年輕的女人很高，且很優(yōu)雅。她有一頭烏黑的頭發(fā)，在陽(yáng)光下顯得十分美麗，她的臉比任何其他人都漂亮，她有一雙神秘的黑眼睛。她彬彬有禮，舉止文雅，目光溫柔。五、人物神態(tài)描寫(xiě)1．Adreaminglookcameoverherface.她臉上浮現(xiàn)出夢(mèng)幻般的神情。2．Herfacewasfullofgloomandcruelty.她面色陰沉，表情冷酷。3．Hesmiled，hiseyesfulloflaughter.他露出了笑容，雙眼充滿(mǎn)笑意。4．Hereyesgleamedandherfragilefacebrokeintoasmile.她的眼睛閃爍著光芒，精致的臉龐展現(xiàn)出微笑。5．Colorglowedinhisfaceandhisstrangeeyeswidenedwithjoyfulness.他的臉熠熠閃光，奇怪的眼睛因歡樂(lè)而大大睜開(kāi)。6．Aleybecamehappynowandagentlesmilespreadoverherface.阿利變得很開(kāi)心，整張臉洋溢著溫和的微笑。7．SherodetherestofthewayhomewearingaMonaLisasmileofpeaceandgrace.她帶著蒙娜麗莎式的平靜而優(yōu)雅的微笑，騎完了剩下的回家路。8．Hewasglaringdownatmeagain，hisblackeyesfullofdisgust.他又低頭瞪著我，黑色眼瞳里充滿(mǎn)了厭惡。9．Hiseyeslitupwhenshewalkedintotheroom.Asmilelitupherface.Thesmilespreadacrossherface，whichlituphisgloomyafternoon.看見(jiàn)她走進(jìn)房間，他兩眼一亮。她笑了，臉上露出了喜色。她滿(mǎn)臉的微笑，點(diǎn)亮了他陰郁的下午。10．Hercheekswereglowing.Hertearsmingledwiththebloodonherface，droppinghergaze.她雙頰緋紅，淚水和臉上的血混在了一起，同時(shí)目光低垂，不再凝視。六、高級(jí)句式結(jié)構(gòu)1．ItwasthefirsttimeinayearandahalfthatI'dseenthenightfacetoface.這是我一年半以來(lái)第一次目睹夜晚。［句子結(jié)構(gòu)：Itis/wasthefirst（second...）timethatsb.+現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)/過(guò)去完成時(shí)：這是某人第幾次做某事。］2．ItwasmysisterwhofirsthadtheideatocyclealongtheentireMekongRiverfromwhereitbeginstowhereitends.首先想到要沿著湄公河從源頭騎車(chē)到終點(diǎn)的是我的姐姐。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：強(qiáng)調(diào)句Itis/was+被強(qiáng)調(diào)部分+that/who...；firom...to…連接where引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句。）Allhopewasnotlost.不是所有的希望都破滅了。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：部分否定）Onlythendidwedecidetoanswerviolencewithviolence.直到那時(shí)我們才決定以暴制暴。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：Only+狀語(yǔ)+部分倒裝。）NeverwillZhouYangforgethisfirstjobattheofficeofChinaDaily.周洋永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)忘記他在《中國(guó)日?qǐng)?bào)》辦公室獲得的第一份工作。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：never等表示否定意義的詞位于句首，句子用部分倒裝。）6．AmongthepainterswhobrokeawayfromthetraditionalstyleofpaintingweretheImpressionists，wholivedandworkedinParis.在那些突破傳統(tǒng)畫(huà)法的畫(huà)家中有生活和工作在巴黎的印象派畫(huà)家。［句子結(jié)構(gòu)：among（介詞）位于句首的倒裝句，who引導(dǎo)非限制定語(yǔ)從句。］FrederickWilliamI,theKingofPrussia,couldneverhaveimaginedthathisgreatestgifttotheRussianpeoplewouldhavesuchanamazinghistory.普魯士國(guó)王腓特烈?威廉一世絕不可能想到他送給俄羅斯人民的厚禮會(huì)有這樣一段令人驚訝的歷史。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：主語(yǔ)＋同位語(yǔ)＋謂語(yǔ)＋賓語(yǔ)從句。）ThereisnodoubtthattheboxeswerethenputonatrainforKonigsberg，whichwasatthattimeaGermancityontheBalticSea.毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)，這些箱子后來(lái)被裝上火車(chē)運(yùn)往哥尼斯堡，當(dāng)時(shí)德國(guó)在波羅的海海邊的一個(gè)城市。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：Thereisnodoubt+that引導(dǎo)的同位語(yǔ)從句+which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句。）IndiahasanationalfestivalonOctober2tohonourMohandasGandhi，theleaderwhohelpedgainIndia'sindependencefromBritain.印度在10月2日有一個(gè)全國(guó)性的節(jié)日，以紀(jì)念莫罕達(dá)斯?甘地，這位幫助印度獨(dú)立于英國(guó)的領(lǐng)袖。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：名詞+同位語(yǔ)+定語(yǔ)從句。）Perhapsweoughttocombineourideasandprovideabalancedmenuwithfoodfullofenergyandfiber.或許我們應(yīng)該結(jié)合彼此的想法，然后提供一個(gè)營(yíng)養(yǎng)充足且富含纖維的健康均衡的菜單。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：介詞短語(yǔ)作定語(yǔ)，相當(dāng)于一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句which/thatisfullof...。）Earlierthatday，whentheycrossedtheRockyMountains，theymanagedtocatchsightofsomemountaingoatsandevenagrizzlybearandaneagle.那天清晨，當(dāng)她們穿越落基山山脈時(shí)，她們看到了野山羊，甚至還看到了一只大灰熊和一只鷹。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)+when引導(dǎo)定語(yǔ)從句+主句）Goingeastward，you'llpassmountainsandthousandsoflakesandforests，aswellaswideriversandlargecities.一路向東，你會(huì)經(jīng)過(guò)重重青山，路過(guò)千千萬(wàn)萬(wàn)的湖泊、山林，還有寬闊的河流和大都市。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)；并列表達(dá)“AandB,aswellasCandD”。）AsVictorHugooncesaid，“Laughteristhesunthatdriveswinterfromthehumanface”，anduptonownobodyhasbeenabletodothisbetterthanCharlieChaplin.正如維克多?雨果所說(shuō)：“笑是陽(yáng)光，能驅(qū)散人們臉上的寒冬”，目前為止，在這點(diǎn)上沒(méi)有人做得比查理?卓別林更好。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：as引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句；否定意義的詞與比較級(jí)連用表示最高級(jí)含義。）14．YoumayfinditastonishingthatCharliewastaughttosingassoonashecouldspeakanddanceassoonashecouldwalk.你會(huì)吃驚地發(fā)現(xiàn)，查理一會(huì)說(shuō)話就有人教他去唱歌，一會(huì)走路就有人教他跳舞。［句子結(jié)構(gòu)：findit（形式賓語(yǔ)）+a0.+that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句；that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句中包含著assoonas引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句。］15．Theyaresohungrythattheytryboilingapairofleathershoesfortheirdinner.他們太餓了，于是嘗試著煮一雙皮鞋當(dāng)作晚餐。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：so...that...句型。）16．Withalltheseattractions，nowondertourismisincreasingwhereverthereisaDisneyland.有這么多引人入勝之處，難怪有迪士尼樂(lè)園的地方，其旅游業(yè)就會(huì)增長(zhǎng)。［句子結(jié)構(gòu)：with+n.作原因狀語(yǔ)；（itis）nowonder+...+wherever/whenever/whatever...引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句。］17．JohnSnowwasawellknowndoctorinLondon—（andhewas）sofamous，indeed，thatheattendedQueenVictoriatoeasethebirthofherbabies.約翰?斯諾曾經(jīng)是倫敦一位著名的醫(yī)生一他的確太負(fù)盛名了，所以能照看維多利亞女王，并幫助她順利分娩。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單句和一個(gè)復(fù)合句合并成一句，很好地運(yùn)用了插入語(yǔ)和符號(hào)來(lái)連接句子。）18．Theseatswerecomfortableandafteracalmingdrink，whichmadeussleepy，oureyesclosed.座位非常舒適，喝了點(diǎn)鎮(zhèn)靜劑后，我們很快閉上了眼睛，感到昏昏欲睡。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：非限制性定語(yǔ)從句插在主句和狀語(yǔ)之間。）19．Withoutthenewpaintsandthenewtechnique，wewouldnotbeabletoseethemanygreatmasterpiecesforwhichthisperiodisfamous.沒(méi)有新的顏料和新的（繪畫(huà)）手法，我們就不能看到這一時(shí)代很多著名的杰作。［句子結(jié)構(gòu)：“介詞without+n.”作條件狀語(yǔ)，主句（虛擬語(yǔ)氣）+介詞（for）+which引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句。］20．Itiseasytowriteand，likethecinquain，cangiveaclearpictureandcreateaspecialfeelingusingtheminimumofwords.它容易寫(xiě)，而且像五行詩(shī)一樣，它可以用最少的詞語(yǔ)呈現(xiàn)一幅清晰的畫(huà)面，表達(dá)出一種特殊的感情。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：Itis+adA+todosth.,like+n.作插入語(yǔ)，現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作方式狀語(yǔ)。）21．ItseemsamazingthatatmyageIamstillfitenoughtocycle20kilometersinanafternoon.感到不可思議吧，像我這樣的年紀(jì)，身體健康而且能在一個(gè)下午騎車(chē)20公里。［句子結(jié)構(gòu)：It（形式主語(yǔ)）+seems+ad〔+that引導(dǎo)主語(yǔ)從句。］22．Thereisnodoubtthattheearthisbecomingwarmerandthatitishumanactivitythathascausedthisglobalwarmingratherthanarandombutnaturalphenomenon.毫無(wú)疑問(wèn)，地球正在變暖，而地球變暖正是人類(lèi)活動(dòng)所致，而非一種無(wú)規(guī)律的自然現(xiàn)象。［句子結(jié)構(gòu)：Thereisnodoubtthat...andthat...句式（兩個(gè)同位語(yǔ)從句并列）；在第二個(gè)that引導(dǎo)的同位語(yǔ)從句中，又用了itis...that強(qiáng)調(diào)句型。］23．Iwasabouttogobacktosleepwhensuddenlymybedroombecameasbrightasday.我剛要繼續(xù)睡覺(jué)，突然我的臥室亮如白晝。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：beabouttodo...when...。）24．Theothertwoclimbeddownintothecratertocollectsomelavaforlaterstudy，butthisbeingmyfirstexperience，Istayedatthetopandwatchedthem.另外兩人向下爬進(jìn)火山口去收集供日后研究用的巖漿，我是第一次經(jīng)歷這樣的事，所以留在山頂上觀察他們。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)thisbeingmyfirstexperience作原因狀語(yǔ)。）25．Justacceptthemforwhotheyare，andgivethemencouragementtoliveasrichandfullalifeasyoudo.要接受他們，給他們以鼓勵(lì)，讓他們能像你一樣過(guò)得豐富多彩，充實(shí)美滿(mǎn)。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：as+形容詞+a/an+名詞+as的用法。）26．Pressedbymyfriendsandrelations，Idecidedtosendmyinventiontothepatentofficetogetrecognitionformysuccessfulidea.由于朋友和親戚的敦促，我決定把我的發(fā)明送到專(zhuān)利局，請(qǐng)他們對(duì)我這次成功的思路給予認(rèn)可。（句子結(jié)構(gòu)：過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)作原因狀語(yǔ)。）典例展示閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。MydadandIbothlovetorememberthepast.Ashewasapproaching60，Iwantedtodosomethingreallyfun.Icameupwithanidea：WhatifIcouldgetthememoriespeoplehadofhim，puteachoneintoanenvelope—60intotal—andhavehimopenthemonebyoneonhisbirthday？SoIwroteanemailtomyfamilyandfriends，explainingmyidea.ThiswaswhatIsaid：Hello，everyone!Ifyou'rereceivingthisemail，youprobablyknowthatourdad，PatrickBurns，isturning60nextmonth.Tocelebratehisbirthday，we'dliketoputtogetheralittlesurprisetolethimknowthathisnearestanddearestarethinkingofhim.Wewouldbesogratefulifyou'dwritedownafavoritememoryyouhaveofourdadandputitinthepost.Youcanjustwriteitdownonapieceofpaperandsignyourname.Thankyousomuch！Wedoappreciateyoutakingafewminutestodothis；itwillbesoworthitwhenhereadsallthememoriespeoplehaveofhim!Holly，Tom，Lake，andSusieIsentthisemailandwaited.AndthentherepliesstartedcominginandIwasamazed.Thereweresomanymemories.Theycamefromthe50's,60'sand70's，fromeverydecadebetweennowandthedaymydadwasborn.Theycamefrommymother，mysiblings，mygrandma，mydad'sfriends，mydad'ssister，mydad'sfirstboss，acolleagueathisfirstjob，frompeoplewhohadn'tseenmydadfor40years，frompeopleIhadn'tevencontactedoriginallybutwhohadbeentoldabouttheprojectbysomeoneelse.Theytypedthemandhandwrotethem.Theymailedthemandemailedthem.Thenightbeforemydad'sbirthday，mysisterandIstayeduplate，puttingeverythingtogether.Thenextmorning，afterbreakfastandpresentsandcake，wegavethepileofenvelopestohim，“Justonemorethingforyou，”wesaid.注意：續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Ittookhimareally，reallylongtimetoopenthem.Thisbirthdaymeantasmuchtomeasitdidtomydad.第一步讀文本（拆分理解）MydadandIbothlovetorememberthepast.Ashewasapproaching60，Iwantedtodosomethingreallyfun.Icameupwithanidea：WhatifIcouldgetthememoriespeoplehadofhim，puteachoneintoanenvelope—60intotal—andhavehimopenthemonebyoneonhisbirthday？SoIwroteanemailtomyfamilyandfriends，explainingmyidea.ThiswaswhatIsaid：分析：父親和“我”都喜歡回憶過(guò)去。父親60歲生日即將到來(lái)，因此“我”想送給他一份特別的禮物：邀請(qǐng)親朋好友分別把他們對(duì)“我”父親的記憶用書(shū)信的形式記下來(lái)，送給父親。段落關(guān)鍵詞：remember；memories段落大意：故事背景：回憶過(guò)去。Hello，everyone!Ifyou'rereceivingthisemail，youprobablyknowthatourdad，PatrickBurns，isturning60nextmonth.Tocelebratehisbirthday，we'dliketoputtogetheralittlesurprisetolethimknowthathisnearestanddearestarethinkingofhim.Wewouldbesogratefulifyou'dwritedownafavoritememoryyouhaveofourdadandputitinthepostitinthepost.Youcanjustwriteitdownonapieceofpaperandsignyourname.Thankyousomuch！Wedoappreciateyoutakingafewminutestodothis；itwillbesoworthitwhenhereadsallthememoriespeoplehaveofhim!Holly，Tom，Lake，andSusie分析：“我”給親朋好友發(fā)去了郵件，說(shuō)明緣由：分別記下他們對(duì)“我”父親最好的回憶，然后簽名、并郵寄過(guò)來(lái)。段落關(guān)鍵詞：nearestanddearest；afavoritememory段落大意：寄郵件尋求幫助Isentthisemailandwaited.AndthentherepliesstartedcominginandIwasamazed.Thereweresomanymemories.Theycamefromthe50's,60'sand70's，fromeverydecadebetweennowandthedaymydadwasborn.Theycamefrommymother，mysiblings，mygrandma，mydad'sfriends，mydad'ssister，mydad'sfirstboss，acolleagueathisfirstjob，frompeoplewhohadn'tseenmydadfor40years，frompeopleIhadn'tevencontactedoriginallybutwhohadbeentoldabouttheprojectbysomeoneelse.Theytypedthemandhandwrotethem.Theymailedthemandemailedthem.Thenightbeforemydad'sbirthday，mysisterandIstayeduplate，puttingeverythingtogether.Thenextmorning，afterbreakfastandpresentsandcake，wegavethepileofenvelopestohim，“Justonemorethingforyou，”wesaid.分析：很多親朋好友都寄來(lái)了自己的信。“我”深受感動(dòng)。在生日當(dāng)天，“我”把這份禮物送給了父親。段落關(guān)鍵詞：amazed；somanymemories；onemorething段落大意：送出禮物第二步細(xì)構(gòu)思1．分析首句第一段：Ittookhimareally，reallylongtimetoopenthem.分析1：拿到這份“厚禮”之后，父親有怎樣的反應(yīng)呢？寫(xiě)作提示：“l(fā)ongtimetoopen”的用意何在？寫(xiě)作方向：對(duì)父親讀“回憶”時(shí)的感受進(jìn)行描寫(xiě)。第二段：Thisbirthdaymeantasmuchtomeasitdidtomydad.分析2：看到父親的反應(yīng)之后，“我”對(duì)此事又有何感想？寫(xiě)作提示：“meantsomuchtome”——到底有怎樣的深刻體會(huì)？寫(xiě)作方向：對(duì)“我”自己對(duì)此事的感受進(jìn)行描寫(xiě)。

2．整體分析3．寫(xiě)前分析4．思維路徑第三步精寫(xiě)作滿(mǎn)分范文名師點(diǎn)評(píng)Ittookhimareally,reallylongtimetoopenthem.Eachonewasabrieftickettoanothertime,aleapbackwardoveryearsanddecadesintothepast.Whenhewasfingeringthelettersgently,asmileofunderstandingflashedacrosshisface.Atonepoint,helookedawaydeepinthoughtasifsomethingunexpectedtouchedhisheart?Recallingthoselovelyandprecisememories,mydadwasfilledwiththewildestexcitementandsurprise.Thisbirthdaymeantasmuchtomeasitdidtomydad.Itgavemeadifferentpictureofmydad.Ihadneverthoughtofmydadasbeingsoemotionalbefore.Itwasahugeamountoffuntocollectthesememories,manyofthemoccurringyearsbeforeIwasborn.Itwasalsoaspecialweavemadetogetherbyallthepeoplefrommydad'spast.Itturnsoutthatyoucanmakealotofmemoriesin60yearsandyoucanrelivethemalloveragain.書(shū)寫(xiě)清晰；結(jié)構(gòu)完整；內(nèi)容連貫；要點(diǎn)齊全！第一段使用了高級(jí)句式：時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句Whenhewasfingeringthelettersgently，方式狀語(yǔ)從句asifsomethingunexpectedtouchedhisheart和現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)Recallingthoselovelyandprecisememorieso第二段使用了咼級(jí)句式：獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)manyofthemoccurringyearsbeforeIwasborn和主語(yǔ)從句Itturnsoutthatyoucanmakealotofmemoriesin60yearsandyoucanrelivethemalloveragaino模擬演練（2021?棗莊市高三質(zhì)檢）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Awarmandsunnyafternoononaholiday，birdsweresingingandflowerswerewavinginthebreeze.Thesunshinecastbeautifulshadowsamongtheleaves.Susanwassittingintheroomanddoingtheweaving（編織）taskhergrandmotherhadset,absentminded.AgroupoflittlegirlscameuptoSusanfromoutside，jumpingandtalkinghappily.Rose，herbestfriend,askedSusanifshewouldliketoplayinthewoodswiththem.Susansighedandrefused.Afterall,shehadtofinishthejobfirst.Thegirlsargueditmustberathertiresometostayathomeonsuchagoodday.TheycommentedthatSusan'sgrandmotherwastoostrict.Afterhearingthis,Susanbentherhead.Astheydisappearedinthedistance，shecouldpicturewhatwouldhappentotheselittlecrazycreatures.However,herheartsank,thinkingofthecrown（皇冠）game—thegirls'favorite.Shewassurethatshewouldbethequeenifshewerethere.Suddenly，anideaflashedintohermind.PerhapstheremightbenoharmifshemovedthemarkGrandmotherhadputinthestocking（長(zhǎng)筒襪）.Afterawhile,shetoldhergrandmotherthatshehadmadeit,herheartbeatingwildly.Grandmotherwasshocked,buttookthework,surveyingitveryclosely.Thenlayinggreatstressoneachword,shetoldSusanitwastrue,becauseshehadcountedtwentyturnsfromthemark.Besides,shebelievedSusanhadnevercheatedher.“Susan,goandamuseyourselfasyoulike.”Grandmasaid,gentlypattingheronthehead.Susan'scheeksturnedred,butsherushedoutandevenforgottosaythanks.ThegirlswereexcitedandsurprisedtoseeSusanjointheircompany.Soon,thewoodswereburstingwiththeelves'（小精靈）laughter.Notamomentlater,Susansatonthegrass,feelingguilty.Shedidcheat.Whenhercompanionsranaboutenjoyingthemselves,Susanwishedshewereathomeadmittingherfault.注意：續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Finally,theexcitingmomentcameandallgirlsdecidedtomakeacrownofflowers.Thegirlslookedatherwithsurprise.【參考范文】Finally,theexcitingmomentcameandallgirlsdecidedtomakeacrownofflowers.RoseandSusanweretomakethecrownwhileothergirlswenttopickflowers.Minuteslater,thegirlscamebackwithflowersofdifferentcolors.ThenRoseandSusanbegantowork.Soon,afancycrownwasmade！Thegirlsheatedlydiscussedwhoshouldbethequeen.Onetall,thingirlsaidSusanwastowearitforshebehavedbestbothathomeandschool,andothersnoddedwithsmiles.Herecamethethrillingceremony.However,Susanstoodstill,notabitexcitedwhenRoseputthecrownonherhead.Unexpectedly,Susansnatcheditoffandthrewitontheground.Thegirlslookedatherwithsurprise.Tearswellingupinhereyes,Susanexplainedthatshehadcheatedhergrandmotherinordertoplayinthewoodswiththem.Feelingsorry,Rosecomfortedherandsaidshewasgreattoadmitherfault.Dryinghertears,Susanranhomeandtoldeverythingtohergrandmother.Toherrelief,hergrandmotherforgaveher,saying,“Iknewitallthetime,butIletyougo,hopingyouwouldtellmeyourself.”Susan'scheeksturnedred,andmadeuphermindthatshewouldnevertellalieagain.（2021?臨沂市高三期中考試）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Atsixtydegreesbelowzero，Harrywalkeddownthetrailonacold，grayday.Pu