高一上學期讀后續(xù)寫入門課件（三）

野營虛驚一場讀后續(xù)寫（三）情節(jié)內(nèi)容試題導(dǎo)練試題展示試題展示

BellahelpedDadloadupthecar.Theyputinthetent,abigoneforthewholefamily.Thenthesleepingbags,blanketsandmore.“It'scoldatnightwhenyou'resleepinginatent,”addedDad.Wheneverythingwaspacked,thecarwasfulltoburstingDadstartedthecar,andsoontheywereleavingthecitybehindthem.“Lookatthehills!”shoutedMumexcitedly.“Lookatthecowsonthegrass!”Theydroveupawindingroaduntiltheyreachedthecampsite,whichbelongedtoafarmandwasinabigfield.Oncethetentwasup,Bellawenttoexplore.Thereweretreestoclimbandastreamforpaddling(隆水).Bellasattherewatchingthecowseatingthegrass.Thedayflewbyanditwasgettingdark

Astheywerereadyforsleep,strangerustling(沙沙聲)camefromthefencenexttotheirtentinthedarkness.“What'sthatnoise?Isitawolfapproaching?”BellaworriedandmovedclosertoMum.“Maybeit'sjustthewind,’MumgentlypattedBella.Belladidn'tsayanythingmore.Theywerealltiredafteradayoutdoors,andcrawledinto(爬進)theirsleepingbags.SoonMumandDadwereasleep試題展示注意:續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右Bellawastoonervoustofallasleepwhensheheardthatnoiseagain.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________試題展示①人物：Bella（5歲）；Mum；Dad②情節(jié)線：

文本分析Thefamilyenjoyedthebeautifulscenery.Athome

OntheroadAtthecampsiteBellahelpedDadloadupthecar.Theysetupthetent.Bellaexplored.Beforesleeping,Bellaheardrustlingnoisesandwasnervous.③主題：對世界保持好奇心，積極探索。④情感線：

本文最主要的人物是5歲的Bella，她在文中的情感變化為：excitedbutwasalittlenervous→forgotaboutwolves→happy→worriedandmovedclosertoMum→?

這是Bella第一次野營，她興奮之余也略感擔憂。母親的安慰和臨行前的準備工作讓她暫時忘卻自己的擔憂。一家人開車向營地駛?cè)?，沿途的山和食草的牛給他們的旅途增添了快樂。到營地安頓好以后，Bella開心地開始了自己的探索——爬樹、蹚水、看牛吃草。夜幕降臨，Bella聽到沙沙聲后開始擔心害怕，媽媽安慰了她。

思考：根據(jù)閱讀部分的情感線，并結(jié)合給出句，在接下來的續(xù)寫部分，Bella的情感可能會有哪些變化？再次聽到沙沙聲后，Bella又變得緊張起來→沙沙聲越來越近以后，Bella變得害怕起來→搞清楚真相后，Bella終于放下心來。文本分析細讀語言③尾段：

“Maybeit'sjustthewind,”MumgentlypattedBella.

思考：在尾段，母親認為沙沙聲可能是風聲。Bella最后發(fā)現(xiàn)的真相有沒有可能正如母親所言？BellaworriedandmovedclosertoMum.

思考：Bella只有5歲，她第一次聽到沙沙聲后的身體反應(yīng)是靠向母親。深沉的夜里，她再次聽到沙沙聲，會不會向母親（或父母）求助？

SoonMumandDadwereasleep.

思考：等Bella搞清楚真相后，驚魂已定的她是不是也可以像父母一樣安然入睡？細讀語言④高頻詞：

camp,tent,whatif在閱讀部分反復(fù)出現(xiàn)。其中，camp,tent是與主題“野營”相關(guān)的重點詞匯；whatif則反映出Bella第一次野營時的各種擔心，也符合一個5歲孩子的心理。

思考：這些高頻詞在續(xù)寫部分有沒有可能再出現(xiàn)？如果出現(xiàn)，應(yīng)出現(xiàn)在何種情境中？細讀語言關(guān)鍵詞：nervous,noise；首句譯文：當Bella再次聽到那個沙沙聲時，她緊張得無法入睡。續(xù)寫部分預(yù)測：1）隨著沙沙聲越來越近，Bella變得害怕起來；2）Bella想向母親（或父母）求助；3）Bella發(fā)現(xiàn)沙沙聲原來是一頭牛吃草的聲音；

或

Bella發(fā)現(xiàn)沙沙聲就是風聲。4）Bella如釋重負，爬進睡袋，安然入睡。研讀首句微寫作練習環(huán)境描寫擴充句子：

Acowwaseatingsomegrass.①Acowwaseatingsomegrass________(平靜地).②________________________(襯著皎潔的月光),acowwaseatingsomegrass.peacefullyAgainstthemoonlight微寫作練習動作描寫根據(jù)漢語寫出下列短語：

聽起來像________________

闖入________________

改變主意________________把頭伸出帳篷________________

爬回________________soundlikebreakintochangeone’smindstickone’sheadoutofthetentcrawlback微寫作練習動作描寫2.轉(zhuǎn)換表達：①Bella嚇得睡不著覺，渾身發(fā)抖。Bellalayawakeandshivered.Bellalayawake,________(動詞-ing形式).②Bella如釋重負。

Bellafeltrelieved.Bellabreathed________________________________(名詞短語).Bellasighed________________(介詞短語).shiveringasignofreliefinrelief微寫作練習動作描寫3.擴充句子：①Bella再也無法忍受了。Bellacouldn'tbearit.Bellacouldn'tbearit________________(再).②Bella觀察了很久，沒發(fā)現(xiàn)任何跡象。Therewasnosignofwolvesoranythingelse.After________________________________(恍如隔世),therewasnosignofwolvesoranythingelse.anylonger/anymorewhatseemslikehours/ages微寫作練習動作描寫③Bella回去睡覺。Bellawentbacktosleep.Bellawentbacktosleep,________(酣然地).soundly微寫作練習銜接連貫合并句子：Therustlingseemedtobemovinginherdirection.ItmadeBella'sbodytrembleandhermouthdry.

Therustlingseemedtobemovinginherdirection,________________________________________________________________________(定語從句).2.Shewonderedwhatwashappening.Suddenly,sheheardmorerustling.

Shewonderedwhatwashappening________(連詞)suddenly,sheheardmorerustling.whichmadeBella'sbodytrembleandhermouthdrywhen/and微寫作練習銜接連貫合并句子：3.Bellasatupandunzippedthetent.Shelookedinthedirectionofthenoise.

________________________________________________(動詞-ing形式),Bellalookedinthedirectionofthenoise.Sittingupandunzippingthetent范文展示（一）

Bellawastoonervoustofallasleepwhensheheardthatnoiseagain.Shewonderedwhatwashappeningwhensuddenly,sheheardmorerustling.Itsoundedlikesomethingwalkingaroundoutside.“Thiscampsiteisjustthekindofplaceawolfmightlike.Whatifawolfdidescapefromazoo?”Bellalayawake,shivering,astherustlingcontinued.Afterwhatseemedlikeages,Bellacouldn'tbearitanylonger.Shecreptoutofthesleepingbagandstuckherheadoutofthetent.There,againstthemoonlight,acowwaseatingsomegrasspeacefully.Bellabreathedasighofreliefandcrawledbackintohersleepingbag.范文展示（二）