2025屆高考英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)說(shuō)課課件

沿用文風(fēng)定語(yǔ)言，豐富描繪來(lái)寫(xiě)意蘄春一中

余蕾Continuationwriting——以BOOK2U4單元主題語(yǔ)境讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)課為例CONTENTS1234延時(shí)符Strategies

Theory&Solution

ProblemsTeachingProcedures-01-9月聯(lián)考學(xué)生續(xù)寫(xiě)主要問(wèn)題9月聯(lián)考學(xué)生問(wèn)題分析學(xué)生在續(xù)寫(xiě)中遇到最大的問(wèn)題是：1.不知道選什么詞來(lái)表達(dá)自己的意思

2.語(yǔ)言不準(zhǔn)確不豐富3.續(xù)寫(xiě)內(nèi)容語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格與前文不協(xié)調(diào)-02-理論和解決問(wèn)題的辦法

AnalysisofprospositionalintentionContinuationwritingisanewtexttypeintheCollegeEntranceExamination,whichfirstappearedintheZhejiangCollegeEntranceExaminationof2016.Continuationwritingwillclosely

combinereadingandwriting,

focusontheaccuracyandrichnessoflanguageuse,

teststudents'abilitytograspthekeyinformationandlanguagecharacteristicsofthepassage,andtheabilitytocontroltextstructureandcreativethinking.(LiuQingsi,2016).Italsowillhelpstudentsbuildmoralintegrityandahealthyoutlookonlife.學(xué)生在閱讀所給故事的基礎(chǔ)上，在關(guān)鍵詞和/或段首句的提示下續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段話，要求學(xué)生在續(xù)寫(xiě)部分的故事內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言表達(dá)上和閱讀材料保持一致，使兩者產(chǎn)生協(xié)同性，促進(jìn)學(xué)生的綜合語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。AnalysisofGradingCriteria評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)________________________________________Solution：王初明教授提出：“內(nèi)容要?jiǎng)?chuàng)造，語(yǔ)言要模仿，創(chuàng)造與模仿要緊密結(jié)合?！狈治鲈牡恼Z(yǔ)言特色對(duì)增加原文協(xié)同性非常重要。對(duì)語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格的分析應(yīng)包括語(yǔ)言中高級(jí)詞匯、長(zhǎng)難句的使用和各種細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)的運(yùn)用。語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格協(xié)同(LinguisticSynergy)-03-如何構(gòu)建一堂以單元主題為依托的讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)課依托高考真題結(jié)合單元語(yǔ)境讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)

課例分享授課老師：余蕾教學(xué)重點(diǎn)：如何研讀文本語(yǔ)言特征，在原文中獲取豐富地道的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)？教學(xué)難點(diǎn)：如何基于語(yǔ)言協(xié)同原則查找語(yǔ)言素材，在續(xù)寫(xiě)中實(shí)現(xiàn)模仿與創(chuàng)新？雪夜圣誕Decemberstrode(闊步走)intothemountainsofColorado,shootingsnowflakesandblowingthemintoathickblanketofwhite.AsChristmasapproached,thefarmerstherecloseddownmostwoodenhousesforaholidaycheer.Notallwereclosed,however.Therewasstillworktobedone,andsomeonehadtostay.ThatsomeonewasSlimCarter.OldJake,anotherfarmerthere,hadofferedtokeephimcompany,butSlimshookhishead.“Afterall,ayoungmanlikemehasgotplentyofChristmasesahead,"Slimjoked.BeforeJakeofferedtostayagain,Slimhurriedon.“I'lljusthaveaprivateChristmasthisyear,andthat'sthewayIwantit."Sohewasleftaloneatthehouse.Alone,withhishorseinthefarmandthewolvesroaringintheforestnearby.Truthwas,SlimhaddecidednottocelebrateChristmasatall.Itwasn'tthathedidn'tlikeChristmas.Infact,hisChristmasmemoriesweregoodones.Hismotherwouldfilltheirhousewiththelightofcandlesandthesmellofcandy.HisfatherwouldmaketheirChristmastreehuntanall-day,men-onlyaffair.Slimsmiledasherememberedsittingonthebroadbackoftheirhorsewiththefreshlycuttreealongbehind.Backhome,theywouldcoverthetreewithpapersnowflakesandhomemadedecorationsandsingalltheChristmassongstheyknew.Andthat'sthewayhelikedit.Thosewerethememorieshepulledoutonnightswhenhewasworkingalone.Suchmemorieswarmedhiminside,evenifhisoutsideswereachingwithcold.1.體裁：記敘文TextType:Narrative2.主題語(yǔ)境：人與社會(huì)ThemeContext:HumanandSelf3.話題：獨(dú)自留守山中圣誕-美麗的雪景，孤單的回憶，夜里的敲門(mén)聲，會(huì)是誰(shuí)呢？4.主題：體現(xiàn)圣誕精神：愛(ài)，善良，溫暖.........（ReflectthespiritofChristmas）1.Itisveryinstructiveandeducational.2.Itaccordswiththesocialistvalue.Book2U4FestivalThiswasSlim'sfirstyearawayfromhome.“Christmasisnothingifnotspentwithfamily,"Slimdeclaredtotheemptyhouse.Thatwastherealreasonhe'dsentJakeaway.HefiguredhewouldhandleChristmasbetterifhejustpretendeditwasanordinarywinterworkday.ButonChristmasEve,asSlimheadedbackwithsnowbeneathhisfeetandstarsoverhead,hisheadhunglow.ItwasChristmas,evenwithoutthetreeandthegifts.Christmas,andhewasallalone.

Para.1:Thenheremembereddecoratingthetreewithhisfamilyagain.______________________________________________________________________________

Para.2:WhilesingingtohisdecoratedChristmastree,Slimheardaknockonthedoor._____________________________________________________________________

03教學(xué)過(guò)程O(píng)utlinetheplotReadforbasicelements

Buildtheframework如何讀？（教學(xué)過(guò)程略）從三個(gè)角度1.詞句選擇

Wordselection（提高語(yǔ)言表達(dá)的豐富性準(zhǔn)確性）2.場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě)Scenedescription

（確保語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用的的得體性）3.修辭手法Rhetoricaldeviceapplication

（關(guān)注語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用的有效性）如何研讀文本語(yǔ)言，在原文中獲取豐富地道的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)？Step3分析原文語(yǔ)言特征：如何寫(xiě)？（這節(jié)課要解決的重點(diǎn)問(wèn)題）大量動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)（verbphrase）動(dòng)作鏈（actionchain）closeddownofferedtokeepcompanyofferedtostayagainfill......withcoverthetreewithpulledoutdeclaredtoheadedback非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞（non-finiteverb）.........shootingsnowflakesandblowing.....Step3分析原文語(yǔ)言特征：一：Wordselection（詞句選擇）各類從句（variousclauses）With復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)（單元主題句式）withChristmasapproaching............Withhishorseinthefarmandthewolvesroaringintheforestnearby..................withthefreshlycuttreealongbehind.................withsnowbeneathhisfeetandstaroverhead........一：Wordselection（詞句選擇）二.Scenedescription(場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě))語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)：對(duì)話（dialogue）獨(dú)白（monologue）“Afterall,ayoungmanlikemehasgotplentyofChristmasesahead,".......“I'lljusthaveaprivateChristmasthisyear,andthat'sthewayIwantit.‘’

“Christmasisnothingifnotspentwithfamily,"...........心理描寫(xiě)：Suchmemorieswarmedhiminside,evenifhisoutsideswereachingwithcold.withsnowbeneathhisfeetandstarsoverhead,hisheadhunglow.Sohewasleftaloneatthehouse.Alone..........Christmas,andhewasallalone.三.Rhetoricaldeviceapplication(修辭手法應(yīng)用）

無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)（Inanimatesubject）+比喻（metaphor）December

strode(闊步走)intothemountainsofColorado,shootingsnowflakesandblowingthemintoathickblanketofwhite.對(duì)比：（contrast）Suchmemorieswarmedhiminside,evenifhisoutsideswereachingwithcold.withsnowbeneathhisfeetandstarsoverhead,hisheadhunglow.Step4.如何構(gòu)建續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)料（模仿+創(chuàng)新）從四個(gè)方面入手1.

沿用follow（主要體現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)上）2.

借用borrow（直接在原文中搬用單詞，短語(yǔ)和結(jié)構(gòu)，是語(yǔ)言協(xié)同的基本方法）3.

仿用imitate（通過(guò)感知原文語(yǔ)言特色，在續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)，應(yīng)于原文風(fēng)格保持一致，但應(yīng)避免為了博人眼球，故意使用長(zhǎng)難句和特殊句型的做法）4.

創(chuàng)新innovate（語(yǔ)言水平較高的同學(xué)，可以根據(jù)原文中使用的語(yǔ)言結(jié)構(gòu)，進(jìn)行更加靈活自如的表達(dá)，更好的展示學(xué)生的語(yǔ)言水平。）仿寫(xiě)練習(xí)：模仿+創(chuàng)新

（搭建續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)言支架）Para1:砍樹(shù)+裝扮圣誕樹(shù)1.with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)：燭光在屋里閃爍著（仿用）2.感嘆句：他多么想念蠟燭和新砍的樹(shù)所散發(fā)的香味啊?。▌?chuàng)新）3.非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞：決定即使是自己一個(gè)人也要慶祝圣誕節(jié)，他動(dòng)身前往森林深處尋找圣誕樹(shù)。（仿用）4.動(dòng)作鏈：他穿上厚外套，抓起斧頭，然后打開(kāi)大門(mén)。（仿用）5.倒裝：一扛著新砍的樹(shù)到家，他就迫不及待的開(kāi)始裝扮。（創(chuàng)新+借用）6.夸張修辭手法：似乎過(guò)了一個(gè)世紀(jì)，他終于裝扮好了圣誕樹(shù)（創(chuàng)新）7.with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)：臉上露出了燦爛的微笑（仿用）仿寫(xiě)練習(xí)：模仿+創(chuàng)新

（搭建續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)言支架）Para2：二人歡度圣誕節(jié)+主題升華（體現(xiàn)圣誕精神）1.語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)（獨(dú)白）：這么晚了，會(huì)是誰(shuí)呢？（仿用）2.with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)：籃子里裝滿了酒（仿用）3.語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)（對(duì)話）：OldJake笑的合不攏嘴，大聲說(shuō)：“圣誕節(jié)快樂(lè)！”（仿用）4.心理描寫(xiě)+無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)：一陣巨大的驚訝和感激感淹沒(méi)了他。（仿用）5.with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)：在oldJake的陪伴下，他過(guò)了一個(gè)難忘的圣誕節(jié)。（仿用）6.定語(yǔ)從句：.........他也是他的家人，用溫暖，善良和愛(ài)裝滿了他的心靈。（創(chuàng)新）課堂呈現(xiàn)課堂呈現(xiàn)原生態(tài)課堂課堂呈現(xiàn)下筆如有神討論很熱烈Step5學(xué)生作品賞析：根據(jù)寫(xiě)作提綱，模仿續(xù)寫(xiě)原文語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格并創(chuàng)新形成續(xù)寫(xiě)成品。Step6：HowtopolishthewritingPara1:Thenheremembereddecoratingthetreewithhisfamilyagain.Atthatmoment,hisfamilyweresittingaroundthetableandenjoyingthebigfeast,Withthelightofcandlesflickeringinthehouse.(燭光在屋內(nèi)閃爍著).How

hemissedthesmelloflightedcandlesandnewly-cuttree!（感嘆句）Allofasudden,SlimCarterputon

histhickcoat,grabbed

anaxeand

opened

thedoor.（動(dòng)作鏈）

Determinedto

celebratetheChristmasevenonhisown,Slimheadedforthedarkforestinthehopeoffindinganidealtree.（非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞）

Itdidn’ttakealongtimebefore(沒(méi)過(guò)多久)hefoundandcutasmalltree.Nosooner

hadhecarriedthefreshlycuttreeintothewoodenhousethan

hebegantodecorateitwithpapersnowflakes,home-madedecorations,justashisfamilydidbefore.（倒裝句）Afterwhatseemedlikecenturies(似乎幾個(gè)世紀(jì)的時(shí)間),hefinishedthejobofdecoratingthetree,abigsmilebloomingacrosshisface.(臉上露出了燦爛的笑容).Para2:WhilesingingtohisdecoratedChristmastree,Slimheardaknockonthedoor.

“Whocoulditbe?”Slim

sighed

and

steppedup

toopenthedoor.Themomentthe

dooropened,aheadpokedin.ItwasOldJake,

withabasketfilledwithabottleofwine,

candiesandseveralgiftpackage