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1、The graph illustrates changes in the amounts of beef, lamb, chicken and fish consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities (

2、around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50 grams).However, during this 25-year period the consumption of beef and lamb fell dramatically to approximately 100 grams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 g

3、rams, so although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most stable.The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, overtaking that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared to almost 250 grams per person per week.Overall, the gr

4、aph shows how the consumption of chicken increased dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.圖表分析 這是一道典型的線圖，而且趨勢也很簡單，讓我們自信心爆棚的開始吧。再聲明一下，第一步確定X軸和Y軸以及第二步分析圖形，兩者均是采用標(biāo)準(zhǔn)的圖形分析法，對所有圖表均是一致的（流程圖和地圖除外），而第三步框架需要結(jié)合圖形本身的特征來確定。第一步：確定X軸和Y軸線圖X1 有序變量 年代 1979-2004X2 無序變量 食品種類 雞肉

5、、牛排、羊肉、魚肉Y 絕對變量 人均消耗質(zhì)量第二步：分析圖形按X2軸分析當(dāng)X2為beef時² 起始點為225，終點為100，降幅為125當(dāng)X2為lamb時² 起始點為150，終點為55，降幅為95當(dāng)X2為chicken時² 起始點為150，終點為250，漲幅為100當(dāng)X2為fish時² 起始點為55，終點為50，降幅為5按X1軸分析當(dāng)X1為起點時² 歡迎度排名 beef, lamb chicken, fish當(dāng)X1為終點時² 歡迎度排名 chicken, beef, lamb, fish第三步：確定框架從圖形的特征來看，趨勢很明顯，c

6、hicken成上升趨勢，而其他均稱下降趨勢，并且其中的beef, lamb兩者變化的線條基本上是平行的，那么由此確定可以分為chicken一段, beef, lamb一段, fish一段。范文作者將起點情況還作為單獨的一段。精細(xì)分析 題目The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.開頭段The graph illustrates changes in the amounts of beef, l

7、amb, chicken and fish consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.² 經(jīng)典的題目改寫，上次談到的是將題目的名詞詞組改寫成從句，而這句就不同了，改寫后仍舊是名詞詞組，讓我們來一起看看，本段添加了change in the amount of, 任何信息均談的是“變化情況”，consumption of sth 改寫成sth consumed, consumption u, consumed為過去分詞作后置定語主體一段In 1979 beef was by far the most

8、popular of these foods, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week.² 本段都是說明起點的情況，先說牛排的情況，說明了兩點，消耗量和受歡迎的程度。² by far adv 與形容詞或副詞的比較級和最高級連用，表示強調(diào)程度的差異，注意by far有個獨特之處是，既可以放在形容詞或副詞比較級或最高級的前面，也可以放在它們的后面，如 It is by far the best film that I have seen for a long time.It is the best film by fa

9、r that I have seen for a long time.² with介詞短語表示補充Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities (around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50 grams).² 用while表示對比，把lamb, chicken和fish的情況均作了說明，而且一個much less說明了fish的不受歡迎主體二段However, during this 25-year period the consum

10、ption of beef and lamb fell dramatically to approximately 100 grams and 55 grams respectively.² 說明了beef, lamb的下降趨勢，由于beef和lamb的下降趨勢類似，因此放在一起講The consumption of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so although it remained the least popular food, consumption lev

11、els were the most stable.² fish情形說明了三個特征：下降（decline），歡迎度最低（the least popular food），消費量很穩(wěn)定（Consumption levels ere the most stable）² 表示下降的趨勢 fall to+數(shù)字，decline to + 數(shù)字² fall dramatically to 用dramatically修飾² decline, but much less significantly to 用but much less significantly修飾主體三段T

12、he consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, overtaking that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989.² 說明chicken的上漲趨勢，表達為show an upward trend² overtake 表明了兩個交叉點，如果是“被超越”，這句就可以改成being overtaken byBy 2004 it had soared to almost 250 grams per person per week.²

13、說明了chicken的終點，注意這里運用了had soared to過去完成時態(tài)，不是表示過去的過去，而是表示過去的完成狀態(tài)結(jié)尾段Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.² 典型的一句話總結(jié)，chicken, increased 而 other foods, decreased詞匯句型積累 這時一篇經(jīng)典的線圖范文，無論從圖形和范文結(jié)構(gòu)

14、都很有代表性，寫法上采用總分總的寫作框架，大家需要好好體會表示增長下降的表達, 還需注意修飾這些變化的詞² 下降 fall dramatically to; decline, but much less significantly to, decrease² 增長 show an upward trend, soar to, increase dramatically;² 超越 overtake注意修飾數(shù)字的詞² about 225 grams, approximately 100 grams, almost 250 grams² just o

15、ver 50 grams , just below grams本文的主題就是消耗，和B6T1一樣，也存在消耗的多樣表達² 225 grams consumed, consumed過去分詞作后置定語² lamb and chicken were eaten, eat的被動式作謂語² fish was consumed, consume的被動式作謂語² the consumption of beef and lamb, consumption名詞Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment

16、s for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.劍橋雅思七原書寫作例文如下:Fixing punishments for each type

17、of crime has been a debatable issue. There are many arguments supporting both views, those for and those against fixed punishments.On the one hand, fixed punishments will have a deterring effect on society. Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted w

18、ith a given crime, will reconsider committing this act in the first place.This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimising the number of crimes committed.If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of a reason for having committed the crim

19、e they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts.On the other hand, taking the circumstances of a crime and its motivation into c

20、onsideration is a prerequisite for establishing and ensuring justice and equity.A person killing in self-defense can not be compared to a serial killer, moving from one victim to the next. In my opinion an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justic

21、e and equity.There has to be fixed punishment for all crimes. However, criminal laws have to provide for a minimum and maximum for the punishment and the laws also have to foresee certain cases of exemptions.An example for setting minimum and maximum penalties is competition law where a person being

22、 held liable of a crime under this law will be convicted to pay a fine, according to the harm caused by the violation and the profit gained by the violator through committing the crime.As for the exemptions, in some countries the law exempts thiefs stealing food during a period of famine taking into

23、 consideration the distress and hunger.Also, a person killing in self-defense will be exempted from punishment.劍橋雅思七一書提供的雅思考官對該文的點評:該文論證清晰、觀點明確、用詞和句型豐富多樣,除個別地方外,基本準(zhǔn)確.但該文的段落分配不夠合理,有的段落連接顯得混亂.此外,沒有明確的結(jié)論也是該文的一個不足.以下是經(jīng)我改正過的范文:To date, imposing a fixed punishment for each type of crime has been a debatab

24、le issue. There are many arguments for and against the execution of penalty.On one hand, fixed punishments will have a deterring effect on potential criminals. Individuals will think twice before committing an offence if they know that they will be subjected to a certain punishment if convicted of a

25、 given crime. In addition, this deterring effect also helps to enhance social stability and security through minimising the number of crimes committed. On the other hand, if people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of a reason for having committed the crime they are accused o

26、f, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result in criminals getting away with their crime and a high level of injustice could be caused by the subjective approach of different courts.There have to be fixed punishments for all crimes. However, criminal laws have to provide a minimum

27、 and maximum for the punishment and the laws should also foresee certain cases of exemptions. One example for setting minimum and maximum penalties is the competition law under which a person held liable for a crime will be convicted to pay a fine according to the harm caused by the violation and th

28、e profit gained by the violator through committing the crime. As for exemptions, in some countries thieves stealing food during a period of famine are exempted from punishments.Therefore, in my opinion, taking the circumstances of a crime and its motivation into consideration is a prerequisite for t

29、he measurement of punishment. A person killing in self-defense can not be compared to a serial killer who moves from one victim to another. Perhaps a balanced approach could be a perfect way to ensure legal justice and equality.修改講解:第一段:1.      原文第一句Fixing punishments for each type of crime has been a debatable issue不如改為To date, imposing a fixed punishment for each type of crime has been a debatable issue更符合英語邏輯和書面表達習(xí)慣,而且加上to date顯得更為自然些.2. 原