讀后續(xù)寫作指導(dǎo)“七三四解題原則”講義高考英語作文復(fù)習(xí)專項(xiàng)

讀后續(xù)寫作指導(dǎo)：“七三四解題原則”七個(gè)不：不增加人物不增加旁枝細(xì)節(jié)不用過多對(duì)話不用負(fù)能量結(jié)局 不在文末設(shè)置懸念不偏離原文主題不違背邏輯常理三大原則：一：原文一致原則內(nèi)容要前后銜接上下連貫語言表達(dá)風(fēng)格一致。二：正能量原則故事內(nèi)容一定要正能量，弘揚(yáng)社會(huì)主義核心價(jià)值觀，如迷路了，但最終一定回到了家，失敗了或遇到困難的，但最終一定成功了；吵架了，但最后一定是言歸于好，和睦相處；犯錯(cuò)了，最后一定會(huì)改過自新，重新做人；賊逃了，最后一定是繩之以法等等。三：曲折性原則故事情節(jié)應(yīng)跌宕起伏，其中人物會(huì)遇到困難或問題，但最終能解決。四個(gè)步驟一：讀懂大意，理清脈絡(luò)讀所給的不完整故事，弄清大意和主題，理清故事的主要人物和事件。二：細(xì)讀首句構(gòu)思框架仔細(xì)閱讀所給兩段的首句，結(jié)合正能量思考大致框架。三：增加細(xì)節(jié)開始寫作依據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展和常識(shí)，在確定的框架內(nèi)，依據(jù)首句，“五所”寫篇,即他人當(dāng)時(shí)所說(whattosay)所聽(whattohear)所想(whattothink)所感(whattofeel)所做(whattodo)等構(gòu)思具體細(xì)節(jié)。四：修改潤(rùn)色整潔謄寫思考再三，把修正潤(rùn)色后的續(xù)寫整潔地寫入答卷。閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Jennywastheonlychildinherfamily.Shehadaquarrelwithhermother

thatafternoon

andsheranoutofthehouseangrily.Shecouldn'thelpweeping（哭泣）sorrowfully（悲傷地）whenshethoughtof

thescolding（責(zé)罵）fromhermother.

Havingwandered（游蕩）aimlessly

inthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.Shestoodbesideastand（貨攤）forawhile,watchingthemiddleagedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.However,withnomoneyinhand,shegaveasigh（嘆氣）andhadtoleave.Thesellerbehindthestandnoticedtheyounggirlandasked,“Hey,girl,youwanttohavethenoodles?”“Oh,yes,butIdon'thavemoneyonme,”shereplied.

“That'snothing.I'lltreatyoutoday,”saidtheman“ein.”Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently.“Whatisit?”askedthemankindly.“Nothing.ActuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”saidJennyasshewiped（擦拭）hertears.“Evenastrangeronthestreetwillgivemeabowlofnoodles,whilemymotherdrovemeoutofthehouse.Sheshowednocareforme.Sheissomerciless（無情的）paredtoastranger!”Hearingthewords,theseller

smiled,“Girl,doyoureallythinkso?Ionlygaveyouabowlofnoodlesandyouthankedmealot.Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.Canyounumberthetimesshecookedforyou?Haveyouexpressedyour

gratitude（感激）toher?”Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumb（麻木的）withshock;sherememberedhermother's

familiarface

andweathered（變形）hands.“Whydidn'tIthinkofthat?Abowlofnoodlesfromastrangermademefeelindebted（感激的）.Whyhaven'tIthankedmymumforwhatshehasdoneforme?”O(jiān)nthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakean

apology

tohermotherforher

rudeness

assoonasshearrivedhome.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

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Approachingthedoorway，.Jennytookadeepbreath._____________________________

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Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback._________________________________

____________________________________________一：讀懂大意，理清脈絡(luò)主要是根據(jù)記敘文的六要素（5W1How）弄清文章大意，特別要弄清故事的人物，時(shí)態(tài)（通常是一般過去式），事件（故事的起因和經(jīng)過）語言特色（以便在續(xù)寫時(shí)語言特色前后一致保持不變），等等。故事六要素who Jenny,hermother,thesellerofthestand when thatafternoon where thehouse,thestreet,besideastand,nearingthedoorwaywhat Jennyranoutofthehouseandsweeping.Thesellertreatedhertoabowlofnoodle.why Jennyhadaquarrelwithhermother. how Jennymadeanapologytohermother. 人物、時(shí)態(tài)、事件、語言特色不變charactersJenny,hermother，thesellertensesimplepasttense.events.Jellyquarreledwithhermother,lefthomeandafewhourslater,feltalittlehungry.ThesellergaveabowlofnoodlesandJennythankedtheselleralot.Theselleraskedherhowmanytimeshermothercookedforherandifshethankedhermother.Sherealizedhermistakesanddecidedtogohometomakeanapologytohermother.事件梳理：珍妮跟母親吵架，離家出走，街上游蕩幾個(gè)鐘后感覺饑餓。好心人給他一碗面吃，她感動(dòng)流淚。這位陌生人告訴他母親將她養(yǎng)大，給她做了無數(shù)次的飯菜，應(yīng)當(dāng)感謝他的母親。珍妮意識(shí)到自己錯(cuò)了，決定回家向媽媽道歉。語言特色分詞短語作狀語(1)Havingwandered（游蕩）aimlessly

inthestreetforhours,shefeltalittlehungryandwishedforsomethingtoeat.(2)Shestoodbesideastand（貨攤）forawhile,watchingthemiddleagedsellerbusydoinghisbusiness.(3)Hearingthewords,theseller

smiled…….形容詞短語作狀語Jennysatthere,speechlessandnumb（麻木的）withshock.with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)However,withnomoneyinhand,shegaveasigh（嘆氣）andhadtoleave.定語從句Thesellerbroughtherabowlofnoodles,whosesmellwassoattractive.5. 狀語從句(1)Shecouldn'thelpweeping（哭泣）sorrowfully（悲傷地）whenshethoughtof

thescolding（責(zé)罵）fromhermother.

(2)Asshewaseating,Jennycriedsilently.(3)“Nothing.ActuallyIwasjusttouchedbyyourkindness!”saidJennyasshewiped（擦拭）hertears.“(4)Onthewayhome,Jennymadeuphermindtomakean

apology

tohermotherforher

rudeness

assoonasshearrivedhome.

6. 強(qiáng)調(diào)句Butitisyourmotherwhohasraisedyousinceyouwereababy.二：細(xì)讀首句構(gòu)思框架1.兩段首句定一框由續(xù)寫的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架。2.二框二首正能量第二段的框架由第二段首句與正能量結(jié)尾來確定。兩段首句定一框Approachingthedoorway，.Jennytookadeepbreath.

Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.即根據(jù)所給兩段的首句確定第一段的框架。從第一段首句可知，曾珍妮應(yīng)是鼓起勇氣敲門回家，但從第二段首句來看，”輕輕碰她的頭發(fā)”的應(yīng)是母親，因?yàn)槿宋锞褪侨齻€(gè)，續(xù)寫中，一般不要隨意冒出一個(gè)新的人物，除非情節(jié)發(fā)展的確需要。“思緒回來”說明第一段中珍妮回家沒見母親，（根據(jù)常識(shí)，母親可能去找女兒），在回憶跟母親吵架的事，或在回憶母親多年的關(guān)，愛等等。二框二首正能量即第二段的框架，由第二段首句與故事正能量結(jié)尾，來確定框架。由第二段首句“輕輕一碰她的頭發(fā)，她的思緒又回來了”即母親回家，與“母女和好”這一正能量來確定第二段的框架。三：增加細(xì)節(jié)開始寫作:依據(jù)首句，“五所”寫篇構(gòu)思Paragraph1:Approachingthedoorway，.Jennytookadeepbreath.______________________________續(xù)寫的兩個(gè)首段語是很重要的續(xù)寫提示，它們控制著情節(jié)發(fā)展的主方向，在續(xù)寫段落時(shí)刻仔細(xì)研讀首段情節(jié)，合理推理段落情節(jié)。在推理情節(jié)的過程中，要把握故事情節(jié)發(fā)展的脈絡(luò)：開端、發(fā)展、高潮、結(jié)局。用“何人何時(shí)何地做了何事”的記敘性寫作方式來表達(dá)脈絡(luò)情節(jié)。即他人當(dāng)時(shí)所說(whattosay)所聽(whattohear所想(whattothink)所感(whattofeel)所做(whattodo)。這“五所”表達(dá)方式可以讓我們有話可寫，有情可推。鼓足勇氣，推門進(jìn)屋母親外出，該去何處累而難過，沙發(fā)上坐爭(zhēng)吵場(chǎng)面，浮現(xiàn)腦海自己粗魯，愧對(duì)其母母親責(zé)罵，皆因關(guān)愛自感羞愧，淚流臉頰

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Agentletouchonherhaircalledhermindback.抬頭一望，看見母親到處找你，你在這里母親雖累，松了口氣撲入懷里，道歉致謝母親聽后，喜在心頭根據(jù)一致性原則，除內(nèi)容上要語義銜接，上下連貫外，語言風(fēng)格要一致，應(yīng)使用分詞短語和形容詞短語作狀語，同時(shí)注意使用從句。四：修改潤(rùn)色整潔謄寫審讀初稿，注意語義是否銜接，前后是否連貫，事件是否符合邏輯，語言特色是否與前文一致。在修改潤(rùn)色之后，整齊工整地謄寫在答卷上。參考范文Paragraph1:Approachingthedoorway，.Jennytookadeepbreath.Whenshepushedthedooropenandenteredthehouse,shefoundhermotherwasnotin.Tiredandsad,shesankdownontothesofa.“wherecouldmymotherbe?”shewondered.“Wasshestillangrywithme?”Again,thesceneofthequarelappearedinhermind,Sherememberedherrudenesstohermother.Realizingthatallthescol