應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作對(duì)對(duì)碰(七)

應(yīng)用文寫(xiě)作對(duì)對(duì)碰(七)寫(xiě)人記敘文

記事記敘文

一、“寫(xiě)人記敘文”寫(xiě)作增分指導(dǎo)

[寫(xiě)作題目]

(2023·全國(guó)甲卷改編)你們學(xué)校正舉辦主題為“用英文講中國(guó)故事”的征文活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你以一位中國(guó)歷史人物為題寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿。內(nèi)容包括：1．人物簡(jiǎn)介及事跡；2.意義或啟示。注意：1.寫(xiě)作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。TheHistoricalFigureinChina

[悟滿分作文·厚寫(xiě)作功底]TheHistoricalFigureinChinaAmongtheChinesehistoricalfiguresthatarewidelyacknowledged,FanZhongyanisthemostinfluentialinmyopinion.Herearethereasons.KnownasaChinesewriterandpoliticianintheSongDynasty,FanZhongyanwashighlyappreciatedbecausehemadegreatcontributionstosociety.Hesparednoefforttocarryoutaseriesofreformstomakehiscountryprosperous.Besides,heproposedtheestablishmentofanationalschoolsystem,whichhadafar-reachinginfluenceontheChineseeducationalsystem.Whatimpressesmemostishisfamousphilosophyoflife：“Bethefirsttoworryaboutthetroublesacrosstheland,thelasttoenjoyuniversalhappiness.”FanZhongyanissucharolemodelthathealwaysencouragesmetobeamanofnoblecharacter.學(xué)亮點(diǎn)寫(xiě)法1．學(xué)亮麗開(kāi)頭

作者在本文首段開(kāi)門(mén)見(jiàn)山，直奔主題：引出對(duì)自己最有影響力的歷史人物——范仲淹。2．學(xué)高級(jí)表達(dá)(1)使用高級(jí)詞匯和詞塊，如：bewidelyacknowledged,influential,knownas,behighlyappreciated,madegreatcontributionsto,sparenoeffort等。(2)準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用高級(jí)句式，如：定語(yǔ)從句thatarewidelyacknowledged,whichhadafar-reaching...；倒裝句Hereare...；狀語(yǔ)從句such...thathealwaysencouragesme...；主語(yǔ)從句Whatimpressesmemost...；非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)作賓補(bǔ)encouragesmetobe...等。3．學(xué)精彩結(jié)尾

結(jié)尾巧妙引用大家熟知的范仲淹的人生哲學(xué)“先天下之憂而憂，后天下之樂(lè)而樂(lè)”來(lái)表明該歷史人物對(duì)自己的人生啟示，說(shuō)服力強(qiáng)，很容易引起讀者的共鳴。4．學(xué)行文邏輯

本文首段中Herearethereasons.有承上啟下的作用。第二段的首句為本段的主旨概括句，Besides進(jìn)一步對(duì)范仲淹做出的重大貢獻(xiàn)進(jìn)行列舉。尾段第一句起到承上啟下的作用?？傊?，本文思路嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，句與句之間、段落與段落之間合理銜接過(guò)渡，全文連貫流暢，傳達(dá)意義完整且具有啟迪性。[積寫(xiě)作素材·造吸睛亮點(diǎn)]Ⅰ.開(kāi)頭部分：引出所要介紹的人物并簡(jiǎn)要描述1．ThepersonIadmiremostis...,afamous/greatscientistknownas...2．Myrolemodelis...,a(n)outstanding/distinguished/talentedscientisttitled...3．Throughouthis/herlife,...demonstratedincrediblecourage,whichallowedhim/hertoaccomplishgreatthings.4．Onthejourneyofmygrowth,therearemanypeoplewhohavecaredaboutmeandhelpedmewhenI'mintrouble.Amongthem,themostimportantoneismygrandma.5．AsformyfavouritefigureinChinesehistory,itmustbeWeiYuan,agreatthinkerinthelateQingDynasty.6．AmongtheoutstandingfiguresinChinesehistory,CaoCaoismyfavorite,whosestoriesfullydisplayhisgiftandstrategyinmilitary.7．ConfuciuslivedintheSpringandAutumnPeriodandhewasthefirstaswellasthemostrespectededucatorinChinaaccordingtotherecordeddocuments.8．IwouldreallyliketointerviewhimbecauseheisnotonlythefirstChinesetoenterspacebutalsooneofthegreatestastronautsintheworld.9．Iintendtorecommendhimbecausewhatheimpressesonusisnotonlyhisexpertiseinteachingbuthiscareforus.10....isconsideredtobeoneofthemostinfluentialfiguresinhistoryduetohisaccomplishments.Ⅱ.主體部分：詳細(xì)介紹此人的事跡、個(gè)人經(jīng)歷、貢獻(xiàn)等1．Heexpressedhisemotionsinpoemsdirectlyeverytimehewasfrustratedbyhisunsuccessfulcareer,whichformedhisuniquestyleofwriting.2．Besidestakingcareofmylife,shealsotaughtmealotofusefulknowledgewhichwillcontributetomysuccessinlife.3．SheisaChineseteacher.Owingtoherhelp,mywritingskillisbetterthanmoststudentsinmyclass.4．Itwasmygrandmawhogavemeahappyandrichchildhood.AsIamgrowingup,IfeelsogratefultoherthatIwillliveuptoherexpectations.5．ItgoeswithoutsayingthatConfuciushasagreateffectonthevaluesoflatergenerations.6．Herspiritsinspiremeandmillionsofothergirlstoliveanindependentlifeandtoberesponsibleforourowndecisions.7....isknownforhavingaccomplishedmajorbreakthroughsinthefieldof...8....leftalastingimpacton...byintroducingtechnology,whichcontinuestoinfluence...today.Ⅲ.結(jié)尾部分：點(diǎn)明被介紹人的品質(zhì)，表達(dá)作者內(nèi)心的啟示等1．Havingsetagreatexampletousstudents,shefullydeservesmyrespect.2．Shewasquiteoptimisticandenergetic.Shebroughtmealotofhappinessandcourage.Ilearnedsomethingpreciousfromherbeliefinlife.3．Heissuchalearnedpersonthatwealladmirehimverymuch.4．Heisaconfidentandindependentyoungmanwithapositiveattitudetowardslife.5．Heisfamousasapopularteacherforhisinterestingteachingmethod.6．Heisrespectedforhisgreatdeterminationinthecontributiontotheteaching.7．Heiswellthoughtofbyallthestudentsandparents.8．Iamgreatlyinfluenced/movedbyhisselflessnessanddevotiontothecountry.Ialsowanttobeamanofvalue.9....servesasasourceofinspirationforfuturegenerations,remindingusofwhatispossibleandmotivatingustoachievegreatness.10....canserveasrolemodels,illustratingtheimportanceofhardwork,perseverance,anddedicationinachievingsuccess.[建寫(xiě)作模型·展規(guī)范形體]Thepersonwhoimpressesmemostis

，who

(引出被介紹的人)．Asayoungboy,I

.Itwas

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，afterwhich

(這個(gè)人的事跡及對(duì)我的影響).Thensuchactivitiesas

werealsoofgreathelptobuildmeup.What'smore,I

_________________(對(duì)我的影響)．______________(簡(jiǎn)要總結(jié)此人的品質(zhì)),forwhichIadmirehimmost.

二、“記事記敘文”寫(xiě)作增分指導(dǎo)

[寫(xiě)作題目](2023·全國(guó)乙卷改編)學(xué)校英文報(bào)組織同學(xué)們分享自己在假期中學(xué)到的新技能，請(qǐng)你以此為主題寫(xiě)一篇短文投稿。內(nèi)容包括：1．簡(jiǎn)要描述；2.體驗(yàn)和感受。注意：1.寫(xiě)作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式作答。LearningaNewSkill

[悟滿分作文·厚寫(xiě)作功底]LearningaNewSkillItisimportantforustomastersomebasiclivingskillstoprepareusforourfuturelife.ThatiswhyIlearnedhowtocookduringtheMayDayholiday.Sincemymotherisskilledatcooking,Idecidedtolearnfromher.Earlyinthemorningweboughtsomeingredients,includingsomevegetables,meatandafishinthelocalmarket.Oncewegotbackhome,Ibegantowashandcutthemcarefully.Undertheguidanceofmymother,Iturnedonthegascooker.Ifirststir-friedtwovegetables.ThenIcookedmeatwithpotatoes.Themostdifficulttasktodowascookfishwithtomatoes.However,Ifinallydidit.ThemomentIputthedishesonthetable,myparentsgavemethethumbs-up.IfeltsoproudthatIsharedhouseworkwithmyparents,whichalsoshowedIhadgrownup.

學(xué)亮點(diǎn)寫(xiě)法1．學(xué)亮麗開(kāi)頭

首段第一句把新技能賦予了深刻的含義，暗示作者即將介紹自己學(xué)習(xí)到的生活新技能。從第二句中的cookduringtheMayDayholiday可知作者在勞動(dòng)節(jié)學(xué)習(xí)了做飯這一生活技能。勞動(dòng)節(jié)這一背景的設(shè)置很巧妙，豐富了做飯這一技能的含義。2．學(xué)高級(jí)表達(dá)(1)使用高級(jí)詞匯和詞塊，如：isskilledat,earlyinthemorning,including,undertheguidanceof,stir-fried,themostdifficulttasktodo,thumbs-up等。(2)準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用高級(jí)句式，如：It作形式主語(yǔ)Itisimportantforus...；表語(yǔ)從句ThatiswhyIlearned...；狀語(yǔ)從句Sincemymotherisskilledatcooking...Oncewegotback...ThemomentIput...；賓語(yǔ)從句soproudthat...；定語(yǔ)從句whichalsoshowedIhad...等。3．學(xué)精彩結(jié)尾

結(jié)尾敘述作者學(xué)會(huì)了做飯，受到了父母的贊揚(yáng)，內(nèi)心感到自豪，感覺(jué)自己長(zhǎng)大了。本段自然升華了文章主旨：做飯是一種家務(wù)勞動(dòng)技能，這種技能的獲得會(huì)讓人喜悅與自豪。4．學(xué)行文邏輯

本文首段中兩句話之間存在因果關(guān)系，cookduringtheMayDayholiday引出第二段內(nèi)容。第二段的首句為背景鋪墊，Earlyinthemorning...Oncewegotbackhome...first...Then...finally...等表達(dá)的運(yùn)用把作者學(xué)習(xí)做飯的整個(gè)過(guò)程銜接起來(lái)。尾段情感自然升華。[積寫(xiě)作素材·造吸睛亮點(diǎn)]Ⅰ.開(kāi)頭部分：引出事件/交代背景1．Earlyinthemorningwearrivedat.../Uponourarrival,wewerewarmlywelcomedby...2．Thissummer,Itookadivingtriptotheunderseaworld,whichturnedtobeextremelyfantastic.3．ItwastheNationalDayholidayandIhadsevendaysoff，soIwenttovisitmygrandmainthecountryside.4．IwaswalkingalongtheparkyesterdaywhenIcaughtsightofanoldmanpushingawheelchairwithdifficulty.5．Asitbecamehotterandhotter,Iwenttogetherwithmybrothertomyuncle'shouse，asmallfarmhousehandeddownfromourforefathers,tospendthesummer.6．Therearemanymeaningfulcollectiveactivitiesinmymind,amongwhichthemostunforgettableoneisthefootballmatchIattendedlastyear.7．Duringtherecentvacation,Ilearnedanewskill—videoediting.8．WhenIwasinmyprimaryschool,Ihadanopportunitytoattendamusicalcontestheldinmyschool.Ⅱ.主體部分：介紹事件經(jīng)過(guò)1．Atfirst，IdidfeelalittlebitnervousbutsoonIcalmeddown.2．Wewereonceagainamazedby...andcouldn'thelptakingpicturesfromtimetotime.3．Duringthewhole...,whatamusedusmostwastheperformanceby...,whichwasreallyfunny.4．Intheafternoon,wewentto...tohandoutleafletsinordertoraisepeople'sawarenessof...5．Takingadeepbreath，Igreetedtheaudienceandbeganmyspeech.Sincefullypreparedforit，Isucceededingivingfullplaytomyskills.6．Facedwiththeirexcellentskills,wewerenotdiscouraged.Instead,everymemberofourteamtookeverychancetocatchtheballandpassitontotheotherteammates.7．Atfirst,Ifounditchallengingtonavigatethesoftwareandunderstandthevariouseditingtoolsandtechniques.However...8．Iwatched,memorizedthestepsofcooking,andpracticeditbymyself.9．Inthebeginning,itwasquitedifficultto...However,itdidnotdemoralizeme.10．Earlyinthemorningwebought...Oncewegotbackhome,Ibegantowashandcutthemcarefully.Ⅲ.結(jié)尾部分：介紹事件結(jié)果/表達(dá)個(gè)人感受1．Aslongaswebelieveinourselves,we'resuretosucceedintheend.2．Throughthisactivity,wenotonlypassedourlovetoothers,butalsobenefitedalot.3．Fromthisexperience,I'velearnedthatwheneverwefacechallenges,weshouldfighthard.4．Itwasanimportantstepforme.Igainedtheconfidenceandhadthefaithtobecomestronger.5．ItwasthroughthiscompetitionthatItrulyunderstoodthemeaningof“Chancefavorsonlythepreparedmind”．6．Howwonderfultheactivitywas!Itnotonlybroughtanamazingexperiencetomebutalsobroadenedmyhorizons.7．IfeltsoproudthatI...,whichalsoshowedIhadgrown