2024年1月昆明市高三統(tǒng)測(cè)讀后續(xù)寫一次危險(xiǎn)的迫降講義高三英語(yǔ)二輪復(fù)習(xí)

2024年1月昆明市高三統(tǒng)測(cè)讀后續(xù)寫ItwasasunnydaythisApril,andIwasflyingwithmyboyofftoCarnavoninmylight

aircraft

toseea

solareclipse

(日食).Lookingoutofthewindow,Iwasdeeplyabsorbedinthepicturesquescenerybelow.Myson

Jacob,15,whowasenthusiasticaboutflying,wasinhighspirits.After25yearsintheminingindustry,I’dquitmyjobtopursuea

career

in

flying.GettingmymercialpilotlicenseinSeptember2022,Ibelievedthiswasmycalling.

Jacobwasapassionateflyer,whoalwaysenjoyedtheflightswithme.“Whatdoesthisbuttondo?”“Howdoesitwork?”“Whatisthefunction?”Thereweresomanyquestionshe’daskcuriously.Iwonderifhe’llbeapilotsomeday.Watchingtheeclipsethroughoursolargoggles(太陽(yáng)鏡),webothwereinamazement.Afterabiteoflunch,Ididallmychecksandrefueledtheplanebeforeflyingusback.Flyingbackintotheair,IheadedtowardsJandakotAirport,whichwasrightnearourhouse.MorethanhalfwayI,Ispottedsomesmokeintheair.RealizingwewereflyingoverLancelinwherethere’dbeensomenearbybushfires,Ididn’tthinktherewasanythingtopanicabout.Travellingsouth,wetookinthelovelycoastline.“Thisisbeautiful!”Jacobexclaimed.Ataround5p.m.,justaboutfiveminutestoourdestination,theenginesuddenlydecreasedrapidly.Glancingoveratmyboy,Ithought,“Thisisbad.”AsItriedtobringtheenginebacktolife,itworkedonlyforamillisecond(毫秒),andthendiedagain.“Okaymate,we’vehadan

enginefailure,”IsaidcalmlytoJacob.Theplanewas

dropping

andwewentfrom1800feetto1500injust20seconds.Lookingforward,IcouldseeJandakotAirportabout15kilometresahead.“Wearen’tgoingtomakeit,”Itoldmyself.Weonlyhadanother60secondsbeforemakingthedecision.LookingdownatLeightonBeachnorthofFremantlebelow,Isaw

crowds

ofpeopleonthe

beach.Paragraph1:

Butthankfullytherewerenotmanyinthewaterbehindthewaves.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:

Onthebeach,Ihuggedmyboy,thrilled.

____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________注：考卷中并沒有任何下劃線詞匯。我們刻意標(biāo)出這些詞匯是想展現(xiàn)續(xù)寫和原文概念的互動(dòng)。還不太明白這樣做的道理的朋友請(qǐng)回顧：\t"s://mp.weixin.qq/_blank"《為什么高考英語(yǔ)浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫值得我們重點(diǎn)關(guān)注？》No.1閱讀文本故事梗概作者“我”在2022年取得了商用飛行執(zhí)照（mercialpilotlicense）。四月里的一天，“我”帶著對(duì)飛行充滿熱情的15歲兒子Jacob，駕駛輕型飛機(jī)前往Carnavon觀看日食。返程途中，發(fā)動(dòng)機(jī)突發(fā)故障，引擎失效，飛機(jī)急劇下降。面對(duì)緊急情況，“我”只能冷靜應(yīng)對(duì)。生死關(guān)頭，“我”看到了也許能夠供飛機(jī)迫降的一片海灘…No.2續(xù)寫難點(diǎn)分析原文中主要人物只有“我”和“我”的兒子Jacob兩人。原文中人物少，人物關(guān)系清楚是比較有利于續(xù)寫的。續(xù)寫時(shí)，考生可以輕松描繪和擴(kuò)展主要角色的個(gè)性和關(guān)系，而不必?fù)?dān)心平衡太多的人物互動(dòng)。本次寫作的難點(diǎn)在于描述“我”在緊急狀況下操控飛機(jī)迫降的動(dòng)作和語(yǔ)言。寫作過程涉及一定的飛機(jī)駕駛術(shù)語(yǔ)和詞匯。這對(duì)于那些幾乎沒看過和飛行以及空難相關(guān)英文影視劇作或者閱讀過此類英文資料的考生來講不是一件容易的事。這到底該怎么辦？別著急！辦法總比困難多！我們想給大家一些建議：聚焦情感描寫將重點(diǎn)放在人物的情感反應(yīng)上，而不是技術(shù)細(xì)節(jié)。描述“我”如何感受，以及“我”如何與兒子溝通，可以幫助讀者感同身受。描寫視覺聽覺使用動(dòng)作和感官描述來傳達(dá)緊張和緊迫感，而不是依賴術(shù)語(yǔ)。例如，描述飛機(jī)下降時(shí)的視覺變化、引擎聲音的變化等。通過上述方法，即使是對(duì)飛行不熟悉的考生也可能夠創(chuàng)造出一個(gè)合理的緊急迫降場(chǎng)景。重要的是傳達(dá)出場(chǎng)景的緊迫感、人物的反應(yīng)以及最終的安全著陸。寫作示范Butthankfullytherewerenotmanyinthewaterbehindthewaves.

Ihadtoactquicklytosteerclearoftheswimmersandexecuteanemergency

landing

ontheshore."Braceforimpact!"Imanded,as

Jacob

nodded,hishandsgrippingthesidesofhisseat.The

aircraft'swheelsskimmedthewater'sedge,sendingupasprayofwaterandfoam.Withafinalandcarefulmaneuver,Imanagedtolandtheaircraftonthesandyshore.Thesandhelpedtoslowusdown,andsoonwestopped,safeandsound.Wequicklyunbuckledourseatbelts,andIpushedthecockpitdooropen,lettinginthefreshseaair.（96words）Onthebeach,Ihuggedmyboy,thrilled.

Ourarmswrappedtightlyaroundeachother,andwehadmadeit.Againstallodds,weweresafe.The

crowd

thathadgatheredburstintocheersandapplause,theirearlierpanicreplacedbyrelief.AwidegrinbrokeacrossJacob'susuallyposedface.Hiseyessaiditall—hehadbeenterrified,buthistrustinme,inus,hadbeenunwavering.Asthesunbegantodipbelowthehorizon,castingagoldenglowoverthe

beach,itwasasifitwasgivingusagentlenodofapprovalforthecouragewehadshown.（97words）寫作細(xì)節(jié)分析Butthankfullytherewerenotmanyinthewaterbehindthewaves.

Ihadtoactquicklytosteerclearoftheswimmersandexecuteanemergency

landing

ontheshore.（合理動(dòng)作描寫：迫降要避開海上的游泳者）"Braceforimpact!"（迫降常用術(shù)語(yǔ)：準(zhǔn)備迎接沖擊）Imanded,as

Jacob

nodded,hishandsgrippingthesidesofhisseat.The

aircraft'swheelsskimmedthewater'sedge,sendingupasprayofseaandfoam.（必要的飛機(jī)降落在水面的細(xì)節(jié)描寫）Withafinalandcarefulmaneuver,Imanagedtolandtheaircraftonthesandyshore.Thesandhelpedtoslowusdown,andsoonwestopped,safeandsound.（閱卷人喜聞樂見的結(jié)局：最后成功落在沙灘上）Wequicklyunbuckledourseatbelts,andIpushedthecockpitdooropen,lettinginthefreshseaair.（打開艙門和第二段首句“在沙灘上擁抱”合理銜接）

Onthebeach,Ihuggedmyboy,thrilled.

Ourarmswrappedtightlyaroundeachother,andwehadmadeit.Againstallodds,weweresafe.The

crowd

thathadgatheredburstintocheersandapplause,theirearlierpanicreplacedbyaweandrelief.（海灘上的群眾的自然反應(yīng)）AwidegrinbrokeacrossJacob'susuallyposedface.Hiseyessaiditall—hehadbeenterrified,buthistrustinme,inus,hadbeenunwavering.（突出父子（母子）信任）Asthesunbegantodipbelowthehorizon,castingagoldenglowoverthe

beach,itwasasifitwasgivingusagentlenodofapprovalforthecouragewehadshown.（適度提煉主題：臨危不亂的勇氣值得贊揚(yáng)）（99words）詞匯和表達(dá)積累steerclearof

避開execute

v.執(zhí)行emergencylanding

緊急降落maneuvern./v.操縱unbuckle

v.解開安全帶cockpit

n.駕駛艙againstallodds

盡管困難重重grin

n./v.露齒笑breakacross掠過(表情)posedface

鎮(zhèn)定的臉龐默寫版：Butthankfullytherewerenotmanyinthewaterbehindthewaves._______________________我不得不迅速采取行動(dòng)，避開游泳者，并在岸邊緊急降落。"Braceforimpact!"Imanded,as

Jacob

nodded,hishandsgrippingthesidesofhisseat.The

aircraft'swheelsskimmedthewater'sedge,sendingupasprayofwaterandfoam._______________________________經(jīng)過最后一次謹(jǐn)慎的機(jī)動(dòng)，我設(shè)法將飛機(jī)降落在沙質(zhì)海岸上.Thesandhelpedtoslowusdown,andsoonw