高考英語作文專題復習寫作指導及學生習作

每到高三的時候，在部分學生當中就會出現(xiàn)一些薄弱學科。因此，學校會組織一些“中轉優(yōu)”工作。我們從12月份開始了這樣的工作。年級布置給我們的任務是“解難答疑”，我任教高三（1）和高三（12班），“中轉優(yōu)”兩個班共10人。第一次我按照級部的要求我讓他們把前一階段學習中存在的問題提出來，當場給他們分別解答。一節(jié)課的時間很快過去了，但當同學們離開之后，我心里總有種說不出的滋味，輔導的事情是做了，但這樣做的效率到底如何，不問學生我自己也知道答案。所謂師者，傳道、授業(yè)解惑也。這樣的問題方式完全可以放在課后，學生有問題問一下也就行了，何必拿出單獨的時間來輔導呢？經(jīng)過反思我從第二節(jié)課開始改變了教學的方式，我把一節(jié)課分成兩個部分：1.集中解決學生以往學習中存在問題，讓其他學生解答，讓學生教學生，特殊的問題由教師作答；2.圍繞一個主題啟發(fā)學生的發(fā)散思維，給出關鍵詞，然后讓學生寫成一篇作文。第二節(jié)課上，在集中答疑之后，我開始幫助學生復習十二個月份的英語單詞，這些單詞對于高三的學生問題并不是太大，但我的用意并不是解決他們的單詞問題，而是要讓他們有一個明確的時間概念。隨后我在黑板上寫下了“June”。然后問他們“What’sspecialaboutJune?”有個學生在下面低聲說“要高考了”。我隨即問到“Howdoyouexpress‘高考’inEnglish?”這時他們都面面相覷,可以看出他們平時的詞匯積累是不夠的,我在黑板上寫下“theNationalEntranceExaminationiscoming.”我又問到:“Canweuseanyothersimilarwordtotakeplaceof‘coming’?”其中一個答到:approaching.T:WhatdoyouthinkoftheNationalEntranceExamination?S1:Fierce,competitive.S2:Itdecides/determinesourfate.T:Whatdoyouwanttodoaftertheexam?S1:Relaxing.S2:Makepreparationsforcollegelife.T:Whenyoufinishyourmiddleschoollife,itmeansyouareliberatedandaren’tmiddleschoolstudentsanymore.You’llbegrown-upsoradults.Doyouknowwhatmeans?S1:Makecontributionstooursociety.S2:Majorinwhatweareinterestedinandlearnsomeusefulknowledge.T:Asagrown-up,youshouldberesponsibleforyourdeedsorbehaviours.Maybeyouhavealottothinkandwriteabout.I’llgiveyou20minutestowriteashortpassageinclass.在課堂教學的過程中，我通過師生之間的一問一答把我想要他們寫的作文可能遇到的知識上的難點逐漸地展開，在問答過程中我隨時寫下一些關鍵詞在黑板上：theNationalEntranceExamination，approach，liberate，fierce，competitive，adult，responsible，makecontributionsto，setfootonsociety，majorin，master，concentrate/focuson，beburiedinbooks.2.題目自擬，文體不限。3.當堂課完成。本節(jié)課的教學目的是：1.圍繞一個主題復習相關的知識，幫助他們建立知識樹。解決他們基礎知識中的薄弱點，也讓他們對以往的知識記憶起來相對容易些。2.讓他們在通過課堂上的啟發(fā)和點撥之后能順利完成規(guī)定話題的寫作，培養(yǎng)學生的發(fā)散思維能力。3.幫助他們樹立時間的緊迫感和對社會的責任感。這節(jié)課學生寫作任務完成的很順利，在規(guī)定時間里基本完成了布置給他們的任務。在批改的過程中，我覺得他們作文寫得出乎我的意料。現(xiàn)摘錄下來供大家分析。高三(1)王琎JuneJuneisaspecialmonthtome，becauseIwasborninJune.IhaveaspecialfeelingaboutJune.Also,Junein2010willbeameaningfulmonthforme,becauseoftheapproachingoftheNationalEntranceExamination.Asisknowntoall,theNationalEntranceExaminationisveryimportantforusstudents.Aftertheexam,notonlywillIbeliberated,butalsoIwillbeanadult.Aswithmanyadults,Iwillhavemanyresponsibilities.Ishouldberesponsibleformybehaviours.Ican’tdothethingsthatIwantto.Inordertoberesponsibleformyfamily,Iamsupposedtohaveagoodjob.Soitisnecessaryformetostudysomeskills.ThenIwillstudyinauniversityandmajorinwhatIaminterestedin.Duringthetimeintheuniversity,IwillworkhardanddomanyextramaterialssothatIwillbegoodattheskills.AfterImastertheskills,Iwillstepintosocietyandmakecontributionstoourcountryandmyfamilymembers.IbelievethattheNationalEntranceExaminationwilldeterminemyfate,soIwillbeburiedinmystudyandworkhard.我批閱他的作文的時候,給他指出了當中的一些小錯誤,對他的作文評價是:行文流暢、所學知識使用合理、書寫急待提高。

高三（1）盛玉灃JuneJuneishotbutrelaxing.TheNationalEntranceExaminationisapproachingandwearefacingthefate.Inordertobeadmittedtoagooduniversity,weneedtodoalotofthings.Weneedtogooverourknowledge;weneedtogogainthefeelingoftheexam,andmostofall,weshouldtrytocontrolourmindssothatwecalmourselvesdowntodotheexamination.Aftertheexamination,wewillbefree.Anythingthatwouldn’tbeallowedbeforewillbefine,playingdayafterday,evenwecanmakeourowngirlfriends.AsfarasI’mconcerned,thoughIdon’tbelieveinlove,Ialsowanttomakeafriendandtreatherasagirlfriend.Loveishard,butisdependentonyou.Universityisaplaceforfurtherstudy.Learningusefulskills,developingthewisdom,strengtheningthebody,onlybyrelyingonyourself,willyouexpendyourareainheart.Takeonyourduty,loveyourclassmatesandteachers,andshowyourkindnesslikethesunshineinJune.Junemustbeamonthwithendlessexperiences.Mayitbeaturningpointinyourfate,duringwhichyouwillgrowup.Setfootonyourfuture,Ilongtoseewhatwillhappen,andwhatIwillget.給他的評語是：整篇文章行文比較優(yōu)美，但連貫性欠缺，書寫較以前有很大進步，要力求避免一些低級錯誤。

高三（1）班雍國松JuneEveryonehasalotofimaginationsaboutJune.Juneisaseasonfullofdifferentmood.StudentsmayfeelnervousinJunebecausetheywilltaketheNationalEntranceExamination.Theexaminationwillcertainlydecidetheirfates.Ifastudentachieveasuccess,hemayfeelexcitedandrelaxed.NMETisafiercecompetition.Everystudentshouldtryhisbesttopreparefortheexamination.AftertheNMET,itmeansthatwearefrown-ups,andthenwewillhavetomakecontributionstothesocietyandourparents.Beforethis,weshouldmastersomeskillssothatwecansurviveintheworld.So,weshouldmakethehotJunemorewonderfulsothatwecanmakeourlifemorewonderful.Juneiscoming.Let’smakepreparationsforit.Wearesupposedtocheckalltheknowledgethatwestudied.Ifwedevoteourheartsandtimetoourstudy,wecangainallthehappinessintheend.給他的評語是:文章基本流暢,運用了所學的熟悉的知識來表達自己的思想,段落層次還不夠分明,有一些小錯誤要盡力避免。高三（12）班李紅曉JuneTeacherssaythatJuneisequaltoourfates.FortheNationalEntranceExaminationisapproaching,weshouldworkharder.Doyoufindthatyourclassmatesareburiedintheirbooksafterclass,andalsotheydomanyextramaterials.Sothemonthisfullofcompetition.What’smore,afterJunewewillbethoroughlyliberated,wecandowhateverwelike.Thenyouwillsetfootontheuniversity,majoringinwhatyouareinterestedin.Ontheotherhand,youshouldmastermoderntechnologysothatyoucanfindabetterjobtosupportyourfamily.Aswearegrown-ups,itcan’tbedeniedthatweshouldberesponsibleforourdeeds.Overthepastfewyears,wehavestudiedalot.Justworkharderandyouwillsucceed.BestwishesforyoutoliveyourdreaminJune.給她的評語是：書寫美觀整潔、文章基本上能夠達意、在思想性和連貫性方面還需要努力。

高三（12）班李堂玉JuneJuneisamonthwhichisfilledwithjoy,butthenextJunewilldecideourfate,becausewewillhavetheNationalEntranceExamination.Thebigdayisapproaching,wefeelmuchmorestressed.Toachieveahighgradeandliveourdreams,wemustmakethemostoftimetoreviewourknowledgeanddosomeextramaterials.Thoughweareburiedinbooks,don’tforgettosetapropergoal,itwillhelpyoutoimprovey