不可思議的同伴Dion(選手)和Gobi(小狗)的旅程講義高三英語下學(xué)期作文復(fù)習(xí)專項

不可思議的同伴Dion(選手)和Gobi(小狗)的旅程第二節(jié)（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Paragraph1:Dionwashavingarunningrace.Thisracewouldstretchinsixstagesoversevendaysandcoveralmost155miles.Gobi,alittleshedoghappenedtojoinhim.Itwastheirthirdday.Paragraph2:Theskywasclear,theweatherwaswarm:thegroundwasfirmbeneathGobi'sfeet.Fromtimetotime,Dionwouldlookoveratherandsmile.Thewarmthofthatsmilewasevenbrighterthanthesunbeatingdownonthem,butinagoodway.ItfilledGobiup.Paragraph3:Astheyprogressed,abroadriverpoppedintotheirsight,lyingrightinfront.Dionhadnoideahowdeepitwas,buttheracemarkersledrightacross,sohehadtoassumehe'dbeabletomakeitacrossaswell.Paragraph4:ccItwassurprisinglycoldconsideringhowwarmthedaywas,andhesankdownuptohiswaist,butthatwasit.Atleasttheriverbedseemedsolid.Hecouldmakehiswayacross;hejusthadtogoslowly.Onewrongstepandhe'dgetpletelywet.Plus,hecouldhurthimselfsincehecouldn'tseewherehewasputtinghisfeet.Thiswasgoingtotakeawhile.Paragraph5:Gobiwatchedasthemanjumpedintothewater.Shewaggedhertail,buthedidn'tlookherway.Hewasclearlybusyconcentrating.Shesatdownjustbeforethewaterandwatched.Surely,hewouldturnaroundandnoticethatshewasn'twithhim.Butseveralminutespassed,andhegotfartherandfartheraway.Finally,Gobicouldn'ttakeitanylonger.Shebegananxiouslyrunningupanddowntheriverbank.Wasthemangoingtoleaveher?Paragraph6:Atthesoundofherbark,Dionstopped.Healwaysmadeapointoffacingforward,alwaysforward,duringarace.Butthistimehedidglanceback.Gobiwassittingattheriver'sedge,barkingfiercely.Therewasnowaythelittledogcouldcrossthatonherown.Thesedays,he'dfedher,givenherwater,andnamedher.Hehadtoadmitthathelikedhavingherwithhim.Sheliftedhisspirits.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:Rightnow,listeningtoherbarkingasheleftherbehindnearlybrokehisheart.Paragraph2:ThisbecametougherforDiontocrossthebroadriver.不可思議的同伴：Dion(選手)和Gobi(小狗)的旅程"——續(xù)寫（24浙南名校好題分享）一、故事大意Paragraph1:DionandGobi'sencounterduringarunningrace(迪昂和戈比在一場長跑比賽中的相遇)Paragraph2:ThebondbetweenDionandGobigrowsstrongerduringtherace(比賽中迪昂和戈比之間的羈絆加深)Paragraph3:Dionfacesachallengewitharivercrossing(迪昂面對過河的挑戰(zhàn))Paragraph4:Dionnavigatesthroughtherivercautiously(迪昂小心翼翼地穿過河流)Paragraph5:Gobiworriesaboutbeingleftbehind(戈比擔(dān)心被拋下的情緒)Paragraph6:DionacknowledgeshisfondnessforGobiasapanion(迪昂意識到他對戈比作為伙伴的喜愛)二、原文信息支架人物：角色性格協(xié)同Dion:ThesentencesdescribingDionintheabovetext1.Dionwashavingarunningrace.2.Thisracewouldstretchinsixstagesoversevendaysandcoveralmost155miles.3.Itwastheirthirdday.4.Fromtimetotime,Dionwouldlookoveratherandsmile.5.Takingadeepbreath,hetookacarefulstepintothewater.6.Atthesoundofherbark,Dionstopped.7.Thesedays,he’dfedher,givenherwater,andnamedher.8.Hehadtoadmitthathelikedhavingherwithhim.綜上信息歸納：雖然比賽很累，但相處讓Dion不會丟下她。Gobi:ThesentencesdescribingGobiintheabovetext1.Gobi,alittleshedog,happenedtojoinhim.2.ThewarmthofDion’ssmilefilledGobiup.3.Gobiwatchedasthemanjumpedintothewater.4.Shesatdownjustbeforethewaterandwatched.5.Finally,Gobicouldn'ttakeitanylonger.6.Shebegananxiouslyrunningupanddowntheriverbank.7.Therewasnowaythelittledogcouldcrossthatonherown.8.Sheliftedhisspirits.綜上信息歸納：Gobi因Dion而開心，因為Dion的離開而焦慮，可自己無法穿越寬闊的河流，所以，故事的后續(xù)一定是不離不棄，共同渡河。原文描述性信息支架：預(yù)判故事結(jié)尾1.Fromtimetotime,Dionwouldlookoveratherandsmile.渡河后，用facetoface，smilinghappily結(jié)尾。2.Shebegananxiouslyrunningupanddowntheriverbank.過河后，從小狗的角度收尾，那就是Gobi不再焦慮，開心的在河岸上跑來跑去。原文語言支架：語言協(xié)同無靈主語：Thewarmthofthatsmilewasevenbrighterthanthesunbeatingdownonthem,butinagoodway.ItfilledGobiup.非謂語：Takingadeepbreath,hetookacarefulstepintothewater.三聯(lián)動：Thesedays,he’dfedher,givenherwater,andnamedher.并列句：Onewrongstepandhe’dgetpletelywet.從句：（部分）Plus,hecouldhurthimselfsincehecouldn'tseewherehewasputtinghisfeet.三、段落首句情節(jié)預(yù)判Rightnow,listeningtoherbarkingasheleftherbehindnearlybrokehisheart.（核心是共情，返回帶上小狗）游回岸上（Dion心理+動作；Gobi心理+動作）——帶上小狗（她的行動；Dion的語言+動作）——準備就緒繼續(xù)下河（基于二段首句toughertocrossthebroadriver可得出過渡句是下河準備）ThisbecametougherforDiontocrossthebroadriver.（核心是如何渡河，和過河后的描寫）在河中（Dion的動作；小狗Gobi動作）——上岸（Dion的動作，Gobi的動作）——故事收尾（基于原文信息支架）四、微場景訓(xùn)練——Dion帶著小狗Gobi在河中游泳的描寫_______________________________(抱著忠誠的伙伴戈壁),Dionsteppedintothecoolwater,keepingGobiclosetohim.HisstrongstepsandGobi’ssteadypresencecreatedagracefuldancethroughthegentlecurrents.Everymoveshowcasedtheirbond—therunner’sdeterminedswimming,Gobi’strustingsnuggleagainsthim.Thewatershonearoundthemastheymovedforwardtogether,withGobi_________________(增加了額外的重量)tochallengethem.However,theirunityfueledtheirprogress.______________________(一到達河對面),asenseofacplishmentembracedthem.Therunner,slightlyoutofbreathbutvictorious,emergedfromthewaterwithGobistillinhisarms.____________________(戈壁拖著她的尾巴),hereyesmirroringasharedvictory.參考答案：Holdinghisloyalpanion,Gobi,inhisarms,Dionsteppedintothecoolwater,keepingGobiclosetohim.HisstrongstepsandGobi'ssteadypresencecreatedagracefuldancethroughthegentlecurrents.Everymoveshowcasedtheirbond—therunner’sdeterminedswimming,Gobi’strustingsnuggleagainsthim.Thewatershonearoundthemastheymovedforwardtogether,withGobiaddingalittleextraweighttochallengethem.However,theirunityfueledtheirprogress.Uponreachingtheoppositeside,asenseofacplishmentembracedthem.Therunner,slightlyoutofbreathbutvictorious,emergedfromthewaterwithGobistillinhisarms.Gobiwaggedhertail,hereyesmirroringasharedvictory.下水文：Paragraph1:Rightnow,listeningtoGobi'sdesperatebarkingasheleftherbehindnearlybrokeDion’sheart.TheheartwrenchingbarkingtoreDion’sheartapart,hequicklyturnedback,andsoonmadehiswaybacktotheriver’sedge,whereGobianxiouslyawaitedhisreturn.Asheapproached,Gobi'seyesbrightenedwithhope,hertailwaggingvigorously.Dionscoopedherupintohisarms,showeringherwithaffectionatewords.Withnewfoundstrength,Dionsetofftowardstheriveronceagain,determinedtofindawayforbothofthemtooveretheobstacletogether.Paragraph2:CrossingthebroadriverbecameaneventougherchallengewithGobiinhisarms.Dioncarefullysteppedintothecoldwater,strugglingtomaintainhisbalanceasGobinestledherselfinhisarms,acutelyawareofthedangerthatsurroundedthem.Slowlyandcautiously,Dionnavigatedtheunpredictableriverbed,ensuringeachstepwassolid.Together,theymovedahead,stepbystep.Finally,theyreachedtheoppositebank.Gentlyplacedontheground,GobiboundedaroundDion,wagginghertailincelebration.Helaughedandscoopedherupagain,plantingakissonherfurryhead.官方范文Onepossibleversion:Rightnow,listeningtoherbarkingasheleftherbehindnearlybrokehisheart.“Oh,fine!”Diondeclaredatlast.Turningcarefully,hestartedtomakehiswayback.Thesecondshesawhimturnaround,Gobiwasonherfeet,tailwagging