針對低層次學(xué)校學(xué)生讀后續(xù)寫解題指導(dǎo)案例課件-高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)

12345三大原則試題文本寫作過程得分技巧評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)目錄CONTENTS1三大原則ONE

三大原則

1原文一致原則內(nèi)容要前后銜接，上下連貫2正能量原則故事內(nèi)容一定要正能量，弘揚(yáng)社會主義核心價(jià)值觀。如迷路了但最終一定回到了家；失敗了或遇到困難了，但最終一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言歸于好，和睦相處；犯錯(cuò)了，最后一定會改過自新，重新做人；賊逃了，最后一定是繩之以法等等。3

曲折性原則凡是故事都應(yīng)有跌宕起伏，其中人物會遇到困難或問題，但最終能解決。2試題文本TWO閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.AshewalkedalongParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.Hetriedagainandagainbutcouldn’tgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked,“Itlookslikeyou’vegotaproblem,”Arthursaid.“I’mafraidso.I’minabighurryandIcan’tstartmycar.”“IstheresomethingIcandotohelp?”Arthurasked.Theyoungmanlookedatthetwosuitcasesinthebackseatandthensaid,“Thanks.Ifyou’resureitwouldn’tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesintoataxi.”“Notroubleatall.I’dbegladtohelp.”Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.Afterplacingitontheground,heturnedtogettheotherone.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstartedwalking,heheardthelongloudnoiseofanalarm.Itwasfromthebank.Therehadbeenarobbery(搶劫)!ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore.Nowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofpeoplerunningfromalldirections.Carsstoppedandthepassengersjoinedthecrowdinfrontofthebank.Peopleaskedeachother,“Whathappened?”Buteveryonehadadifferentanswer.Arthur,stillcarryingthesuitcase,turnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoungwomaninfrontofhim.Shelookedatthesuitcaseandthenathim.Arthurwassurprised.“Whyisshelookingatmelikethat?”Hethought.“Thesuitcase！ShethinksI’mthebankthief!”Arthurlookedaroundatthecrowdofpeople.Hebecamefrightened,andwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorun.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”________________________________________ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur...____________________________________________________________3寫作過程THREEI.準(zhǔn)確理解材料，理清人物事件。

Task1.淺層信息理解

首先要審題：⑴

文體：_______⑵

人稱：_________⑶

時(shí)態(tài)：____________⑷5Ws：who_______，___________________，_______when______________________________where_______________，___________,______what________________________why__________________記敘文第三人稱一般過去時(shí)theyoungmanpeopleArthuronthewaytoworkonedayParkAvenuethebankcarryingthesuitcasetaxibankrobberyTask2.深層信息理解理清故事的發(fā)展線索（How）paragraph（段落）Behaviors（行為）Topic（段意）Para1heardthesound，couldn’tgetthecarmoving，lookedinsideat，

stoppedandaskedArthurwenttoayoungmanwithhiscarintrouble.Task2.深層信息理解理清故事的發(fā)展線索（How）paragraph（段落）Behaviors（行為）Topic（段意）Para2，3，4，5&6can’tstart，helpmegetthesesuitcasesinto，gladtohelp，took，

placing，gettheotherone，pickedupthefirstsuitcase，heardanalarmThealarmwentoffasArthurhelpedtocarrythesuitcase.Task2.深層信息理解理清故事的發(fā)展線索（How）paragraph（段落）Behaviors（行為）Topic（段意）Para7wasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofpeople，

joinedthecrowd，asked，hadadifferentanswerAfterthealarmsounded,thecrowdwereinchaos.Para8，9&10lookedat，wassurprised，thinksArthurrealizedthathewasthoughttobearobber.

(1).文章的基調(diào)：

funny

人物情感和性格：helpful，brave，honestandimpulsive(易沖動的)

文中感悟：thepolicementhankedhim

(2).梳理故事情節(jié)Arthur上班途中在銀行附近助人為樂；幫忙提箱子過程中銀行警報(bào)響起,混亂中一位女士用奇怪的眼神看他，他意識到自己被認(rèn)為是搶劫犯，Arthur跑了起來……。themaincharacterstheproblemtheyoungmanfacedthehelpArthurofferedthedisturbanceonParkVenueThelookofayoungwomaninfrontofArthurthereactionofArthur:Arthurandayoungman.Hecouldn’tstarthiscar.Hepickedupthesuitcase.Theremightbeabankrobbery.ShelookedatArthurasifhewastherobberHeranawaywithoutasecondthought(3).提煉信息要點(diǎn)Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”1.

OpeningArthurencounteredayoungmanwhocouldn’tstarthiscarandaskedhimtohelpgetthesuitcasesintoataxi.Takingoneofthesuitcasesinhand,Arthurheardaloudalarm.Thepassers-byonthestreetthoughttheremightbeabankrobbery.AyoungwomanArthurranintomistookArthurasthebankthief.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur…2.

Build-up3.

Conflict4.

Resolution5.

Ending(4).完成故事山

II.

研究所給首句，定邏輯與情節(jié)Task1：思考以下問題

Paragraph1：Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungman,shoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”

請思考

Q1:

DidArthurstop?

Q2:

WhatwasArthurthinking?

Q3:WhatdidArthurdo?

Q4:

Howcanwewritesomethingtoconnectwith“Taxi”and“PoliceStation”mentionedinthenextPara.?Task2定細(xì)節(jié)ParaWhowouldbeintheparagraph?Whatwouldtheydo?Howwouldtheyfeel?Para1

Para2

Arthur;theyoungmanArthur;thepoliceman;theyoungmanArthur:run;takeataxi;gotothepolicestationtheyoungman:runafterhimArthur:tellthepolicemanthepoliceman:ask...theyoungman:tellthetruthnervous;frightenedembarrassed;relief;happyIII.推斷續(xù)寫框架，續(xù)寫具體情節(jié)

Paragraph1：[開端]Arthur聽到年輕人背后大喊大叫。[發(fā)展]

思考年輕人（theyoungman）的表現(xiàn)，

（Arthur）感覺他可能是小偷（thebankthief）

→攔下了一輛出租車（taxi）→告訴司機(jī)背后的男人是銀行的小偷（thief）。[高潮]

司機(jī)開到最近的派出所。III.推斷續(xù)寫框架，續(xù)寫具體情節(jié)。

Paragraph2：[結(jié)局]

Arthur向警察描述了公園大道（ParkAvenue）銀行（thebank）搶劫（robbery）→那個(gè)年輕人坐上了另一輛出租車跟上了Arthur→年輕人是無辜的，原來箱子內(nèi)的只是一些衣服→Arthur感到尷尬，但警察還是感謝他。IV.增加細(xì)節(jié)描寫，完成讀后續(xù)寫。

將已確定好的六要素串聯(lián)起來，增加細(xì)節(jié)描寫，完成續(xù)寫第一稿。

Paragraph1：

⑴

他想起這個(gè)年輕人表現(xiàn)的方式。Hethoughtof_______________________________.⑵他意識到年輕人可能是小偷。He____________________________________thebankthief.⑶Arthur跑得更快，攔下了一輛出租車。Arthur_________________________ataxi.thewaytheyoungmanhadbehavedrealizedtheyoungmanmightberanfasterandstopped⑷Arthur上了出租車。Arthur_______thetaxi.⑸Arthur告訴司機(jī)后面的喊聲是銀行竊賊發(fā)出的。Arthurtold________________________________fromthebankthief.⑹Arthur要求司機(jī)把車開到警察局去。Arthurasked___________________________thepolicestation.⑺司機(jī)聽從Arthur的話把車開走了。Thedriver____________________________________away.gotintothedrivertheshoutsbehindwasthedrivertodrivetofollowedwhatArthursaidanddrove

Paragraph2：

(8)Arthur描述著公園大道銀行附近的搶劫案，并向警察報(bào)告那個(gè)年輕人。Arthur_______________therobberynearthebankonParkAvenue____________theyoungmantothepolice．

(9)Arthur聽到外面有個(gè)聲音喊：“救命!救命!Arthurheard_____________,“Help!Help!”wasdescribingandreportingavoiceoutside(10)令A(yù)rthur吃驚的是，是那個(gè)年輕人。__________________Arthur,itwastheyoungman.Tothesurpriseof

(11)這個(gè)年輕人坐另一輛出租車跟在Arthur后面。Theyoungman____________________________taxi.

(12)他們知道這個(gè)年輕人不是小偷。Theyknew_______________________thethief.hadfollowedArthurinanotherthattheyoungmanwasnot(13)箱子里只有一些衣服。________________________justsomeclothes.(14)Arthur感到很尷尬。Arthur______________．(15)警察還是謝了他。Thepolicemen___________anyway.InsidethesuitcaseswerefeltembarrassedthankedhimV.潤色加工，升級句式

第一稿完成后，用過渡詞句、高級詞匯和句式升級，增加得分點(diǎn)。

1.用分詞作時(shí)間狀語，合并Paragraph1中的⑴和⑵句。

___________thewaytheyoungmanhadbehaved,__________theyoungmanmightbethebankthief.Thinkingofherealized2.句⑹增加修飾詞nearest，再與句⑸合并，用連接詞themoment，改寫句⑷引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語從句。

___________hegotintothetaxi,_____thedriverthemanshoutingbehindwasthebankthief__________himtodrivetothe_________policestation.Themomenthetoldandaskednearest3.用justas引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語從句，合并句⑻和句⑼。______ArthurwasdescribingtherobberynearthebankonParkAvenueandreportingtheyoungmantothepolice,________avoiceoutside,‘‘Help!Help!”.4.用Itturnedout和wasinnocent改寫句⑿，再并列⒀句。___________________theyoungman_________________________________werejustsomeclothes.

JustasheheardItturnedoutthatwas5.用轉(zhuǎn)折連詞but合并句⒁和句⒂。Arthur______________________thepolicemen________himanyway.feltembarrassedbutthanked

innocentandinsidethesuitcases

Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Andalsoatthemoment,athoughtoccurredtoArthur:theyoungmanmightbethebankrobber!Arthurranstraighttoataxianddivedinwiththesuitcase.Heturnedtothedriverandsaid,“Forgoodnesssake,takemetothenearestPoliceStation!Hurryup!Themanchasingbehindisthebankthief!”Thetaxiracedawaylikethewind.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurgrabbedthesuitcaseandalmostfellthroughthedoorintothePoliceStation.JustasArthurwasdescribingwhathadhappenednearthebankontheParkAvenueandreportedtheyoungmantothepolice,heheardavoiceoutside,“Help!Help!”TothesurpriseofArthur,itwastheyoungman.HehadfollowedArthurinanothertaxi.Itturnedoutthattheyoungmanwasinnocentandinsidethesuitcasewerejustsomeclothes.Scratchingthebackofhisheadawkwardly,Arthurapologizedtotheyoungmansincerely.VI.

檢查定稿，規(guī)范謄寫

Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Andalsoatthemoment,athoughtoccurredtoArthur:theyoungmanmightbethebankrobber!Arthurranstraighttoataxianddivedinwiththesuitcase.Heturnedtothedriverandsaid,“Forgoodnesssake,takemetothenearestPoliceStation!Hurryup!Themanchasingbehindisthebankthief!”Thetaxiracedawaylikethewind.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurgrabbedthesuitcaseandalmostfellthroughthedoorintothePoliceStation.JustasArthurwasdescribingwhathadhappenednearthebankontheParkAvenueandreportedtheyoungmantothepolice,heheardavoiceoutside,“Help!Help!”TothesurpriseofArthur,itwastheyoungman.HehadfollowedArthurinanothertaxi.It