讀后續(xù)寫+Race+at+Rivers+Edge+講義 高三上學(xué)期9月月考試題

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。RaceatRiver’sEdgeLikeme,mycousinGabrielisintoridingbikes.He’s16andI’mallowedtojoinhimonlongerridesbecausewe’retrainingforacharitycyclingevent.Oneday,aftercheckingourtires(輪胎),wesetoutforTournus.Uponarrival,GabrielandIparkedourbikesneartheriverandwalkedtothetownsquare.We’djustridden33kilometers,andwewerestarving.WeplannedtogetlunchandthenridetoMacon,asmallcityinFranceontheSa?neRiver.

Itwasmarketday.Localswerebusyfillingtheirbasketswithgroceries.Touristshuntedforgifts.GabrielandIboughtalong,thinloafofbreadandsomeBrie,asoftcheesewhichtastedawesome.Asweate,InoticedagirlwearingaUSABasketballT-shirt.Shesmiledatus.BasketballisbiginFrancetoo.YoucanevenwatchNBAgamesonTV.Thegirlstoppedtobuysomebreadwithhermum.

Isawthemagainbytheriver.Theysatonabenchenjoyingtheirfoodinfrontofalong,narrowriverboatnamedVoyageur.Thentheyboardedtheboat.Itwaspreparingtoleave.Suddenly,Ispottedacolorfulshoppingbagonthebench.Thegirlhadleftit!Ilookedup.Somepassengersweregatheringontheupperdeck(甲板)oftheriverboat,includingthegirlandhermum.IheldupthebagandwavedittogettheirattentionwhileGabrielcalledtothem.Whenthegirlnoticedthebag,sheopenedhermouthinsurprise.Butherfacefellastheboatstartedtopullawayfromthedock(碼頭).Shedidn’tthinkshe’dgetthestuffback.Runningalongsidetheboat

Gabriellearnedfromasailorthattheboat’snextstopwasMacon——ourdestinationaswell.Itwouldtaketheboatjustundertwohoursataspeedof22kilometersperhour.“Whatcanwedothen?”hesaid.

注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。P1：“Wehavetofindawaytoreturnit”Ireplied.P2：Thenithappened:pffft!Flattire!故事簡介我和表哥Gabriel都喜歡騎自行車，他們正在為慈善騎行活動做準(zhǔn)備。在一次騎行中，他們抵達了法國的Tournus小鎮(zhèn)，并計劃吃完午飯后騎到附近的Macon。吃飯時，一個穿著美國籃球隊T恤的女孩引起了他的注意。后來我騎行到河邊看時到了她上了一艘"Voyageur"的船。我發(fā)現(xiàn)她在河邊的長椅上遺落了一個購物袋，但船已開始離開碼頭。Gabriel得知船的下一站正是他們的目的地Macon，并且他們有機會把購物袋還給女孩，于是他們決定跟隨船只騎行到Macon。情節(jié)設(shè)計：P1："Wehavetofindawaytoreturnit,”Ireplied.P2:Thenithappened:pffft!Flattire!

1.根據(jù)conflict-solution原則，從最后情節(jié)反向思考：沒有能歸還購物袋---歸還購物袋

如何歸還？---騎自行車自行車胎破了---？選擇A:跑步B：打車C:搭順風(fēng)車D:騎自行車帶我E：修好自行車前行F:一人騎自行車前往讀后續(xù)寫的情節(jié)設(shè)計根本原則在于合理簡潔。在考場上要么東拉西扯要么胡編亂造，在于沒有經(jīng)過邏輯思維的訓(xùn)練。上述五個選擇中是F項最符合常理?？荚囍杏袑W(xué)生還設(shè)計了終于騎到Macon,但是沒有發(fā)現(xiàn)船，正當(dāng)他失望的時候，船來了，原來船在途中出故障耽擱了。這種情節(jié)有可能，但是合理性上不夠，而且增加了寫作難度。如無必要，不必為制造沖突而強行編造分支情節(jié)。選擇F選項后還需要進一步思考：是Gabriel騎車前往還是我前往。從上下文呼應(yīng)角度考慮應(yīng)該是我前面更為合理。所以情節(jié)設(shè)計如下：決定騎車去歸還---努力騎行---突然爆胎---決定一人騎行前往---終于歸還2.情節(jié)設(shè)計中的細節(jié)呼應(yīng)無必要無細節(jié)。這是小說創(chuàng)作中的基本原則。續(xù)寫中要注意要運用細節(jié)來進行前后串聯(lián)，保證文章的邏輯協(xié)同。3.常識合理性游輪每小時22公里，對于自行車專業(yè)騎行來說一般可以輕松超過。但是對于青少年來說，特別是已經(jīng)騎行了33公里后，后續(xù)的騎行是比較艱難的。同時要考慮到，騎行的路線可能不是直線，路線可能崎嶇不平（所以即使出來時檢查了車胎，后面還出現(xiàn)爆胎。）等因素。情節(jié)擴寫對于考生來說，最怕的就是情節(jié)簡單，感覺沒什么好寫,只能東拉西扯硬湊字數(shù)。如何擴展情節(jié)需要扎實耐心的訓(xùn)練，如何寫好擴展的情節(jié)需要過硬的知識儲備。1.情節(jié)的擴展---FACTs2.寫好情節(jié)---常規(guī)句型+精準(zhǔn)詞匯此篇續(xù)寫難度在于自行車騎行有關(guān)的一些表達?？忌璐耸占恍┯杏玫谋磉_，平時也要接觸、掌握多方面的生活相關(guān)詞匯，特別是動詞和名詞。hadaheadstarttakeashorterroutehoppedontoourbikespoweredthrougheachpedalstroketwistedandturnedpushedourselvestoridefastermybikewobbled.skiddedtoahalt

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“Wehavetofindawaytoreturnit,”Ireplied.Withouthesitation,wegrabbedourbikesandquicklycalculatedthetimeitwouldtaketobeattheboattoMacon.Itwouldbeclose,butifwerodefastenough,wejustmightmakeit.GabrielandIjumpedonourbikesandstartedpedalingashardaswecould.Thewindblewagainstourfacesasweracedalongtheriver’sedge,theboatvisibleinthedistance.Theroadwasnarrowandunevenattimes,butwepushedforward,determinedtoreturnthegirl’sbag.Witheachpassingminute,mylegsburned,butIcouldn’tgiveup.Thesmileonthegirl’sfacekeptflashingthroughmymind,urgingmetoridefaster.

Thenithappened:pffft!Flattire!Ilookeddowninhorrorasmybackwheelwobbleddangerously.“No!Notnow!”Igroaned.Gabrielstoppedandlookedatmewithaworriedexpression.Wehadnotimetofixit.“Yougoonwithoutme!”Iurgedhim.“I’llcatchupsomehow.”Withoutarguing,Gabrielnodded,tookthebagfromme,andspedoffdowntheroad.Iwatchedhimdisappearintothedistance,feelingamixoffrustrationandhope.Iquicklypushedmybikeofftothesideandstartedrunning.Despitethesetback,Iwasn’tgivingup.AsInearedMacon,IsawGabrielwaitingbythedock,atriumphantgrinonhisface.Theboathadjustarrived,andthegirlwasjoyfullyholdinghershoppingbag,wavingtousingratitude.修改范文P1:"Wehavetofindawaytoreturnit,"Ireplied.GabrielandIquicklyrealizedthatwestillhadachancetobeattheboattoMaconifwerodefastenough.Whiletheriverboatfollowedthewindingwaterway,wecouldtakeashorter,moredirectroutealongtheriverbank.Withoutasecondthought,wehoppedontoourbikesandstartedpedalingfuriously.Theroadtwistedandturnedthroughfieldsandvillages,butwepushedharderwitheachturn.Thegirl’slookofdisappointmentspurreduson,motivatingustorideevenharder.Everypedalstrokefelturgentasweflewpastthesceniccountryside,heartsracing,ouronlygoaltoreachthedockbeforetheboat.P2:Thenithappened:pffft!Flattire!Mybackwheelwobbledwildly,andInea