讀后續(xù)寫（一場名字引起的風(fēng)波）學(xué)案-2023屆高三英語寫作專項

?續(xù)寫文章呈現(xiàn)MynameisChelseaChowderhead.Achowderisathicksaup.Myfathersaysthatourearlyancestors（祖先）mayhaveinventedchowder.Forme,thelastnameteasing（戲弄）beganassoonasIstartedschool.SowhenmyfamilymovedtoSouthCarolina,Idecidedthatitwasmychanceforafreshstart.IaskedmydadifIcouldchangemyname."ButtheChowderheadnamehasalongandrichhistory-,nDadstarted."Iknow,Iknow""Whydoyouwanttochangeit?"heasked.Ididn*twanttohurthisfeelings,butIdidn*twanttogothroughanotherschoolyearasaChowderhead,either."Igetteasedallthetime.'"Iknowit*snoalwayseasybeingachowderhead（傻瓜），"Dadsaid."Butyoushouldn'tchangewhoyouare.Letpeoplegettoknowyoufirstandyournamelater.1"Howcanpeoplegettoknowmebeforetheyknowmyname?**Iasked.Hesaid,“Askgoodquestions,''Ilookedathimblankly（茫然土也）.Hewenton,"Whenyoumeetsomeonenew,askthemagoodquestion.Oncepeoplestarttalkingaboutthemselves,theydon*tjudgeyou.They!rejusthappythatsomeoneisinterestedinwhattheyhavetosay.nTwodayslaterIheadedtomyschoolforthefirstdayofclass.AssoonasIgottomyclassroom,agirlnamedClaireintroducedherself.Shewasveryniceandwesoonbecamefriends.Bylunch,I'dtalkedtolotsofpeopleandwasgettingthehang（竅門）offindingtherightquestion.Butthereweretwokids,twinbrothers,whodidn'tseemtotalktoanyonebuteachother.Whentheylookedatme,IfeltasiftheyalreadyknewthatIwasaChowderhead.Still,mydad'sadvicehadworkedoutwell,soIdecidedtogiveitonemoretry.?確定主題升華：人與自我/人與他人?情節(jié)點梳理Paragraph1:IaskedClaireifweshouldsitwiththetwins.Claire對我問題的反應(yīng)（與第一段提示句銜接）+我們走到twins面前（必備動作否則不連貫）+我問問題+雙胞胎的反應(yīng)以及后來的談話氛圍+他們問我名字（與第二段提示句銜接）（描寫重點，詳略得當(dāng)）Prgrp2:Itookadeepbreath,andsaid,"I'mChelseaChowderhead.我說完后的狀態(tài)+對方的反應(yīng)+我對對方反應(yīng)的反應(yīng)感受+主題升華?續(xù)寫素材積累Clare答應(yīng)+我們走過去與雙胞胎交流.Clairelookedsurprisedwith'懷疑,butstillagreedwithoutthehesitation.Onourway,Iracked使痛苦不堪/折磨mybrain絞盡腦計tocomeupwitha“goodquestion"whentheir——模——樣的appearancecaughtmyattention.Whynotaskthemtosharetheirexperienceastwins?句式的變換Theywouldn'tsaynotosuchamusingquestion!SoIdid.(raisedeyebrows;slightest;identical).Afterreceivinghernod,wetowardsthetwins7whilemythoughtswereina storm旋轉(zhuǎn)的風(fēng)暴of“goodquestions” to 開始 ourconversation.在我還沒反應(yīng)過來，I發(fā)現(xiàn)某人自己不知不覺sittingoppositethetwinsandagreetingquestionjustmymouth脫口而出，“Hey,isthereanywayto betweenyoutwo?”(approving;madeourway;swirling;kickoff;BeforeIcouldrealizeit;foundmyself;escaped;distinguish)好問題的由來(可以直引，可以間引).Afterthinking,Iwassuddenlyinspiredbytheirbeingtwinsand脫口而出："Ididn'tmeantointerrupt,butdoyou伙伴；兄弟/姐妹(口頭)getmistaken被弄錯alot?"(longandhard;l.blurtedout;guys).Since theyweretwins,therewasnobetterquestionthanoneabouttheirfunnyexperienceduetotheirappearance,whichwasexactlywhatIasked.(identical)雙胞胎的反應(yīng)+被問名字.Myhang竅門oftherightquestionworkedits 發(fā)揮它的魔力againasweweregettingcloserinthefollowingconversation.Everything untiltheveryquestionfinally跳出來outofnowhere不矢口從明E里：nSincewearefriendsnow,wedon'tknowyournameyet!"(magic;wentsmoothly;poppedup).Whilewewereallbusysharingstoriesandfoodaswell,the thingintheworldIwantedtohear我最不想聽到的事情totallycaughtme 讓我措手不及andmeoutoftheatmosphere:"Hey,youhavenfttoldusyournameyet,myfriend!^(last;offguard;threw;cheerful).Thefateseemedtobeplayingan 惡意的jokeonme.Asmyplanwentonwell,theythrewmetheveryquestionaboutmyname(間接問名字：)，whichmademe withunwillingnesstorespond.(ill-willed;abruptly;choke)第一段IaskedClaireifweshouldsitwiththetwins.noddingayes,Claire tookmyhandandledourwaytothetwins,castinga友好的smiletothem.Though byourunexpectedpresence,thetwinssoon 做手勢asignoffriendlywelcometous.Withmydad!swordinmyhead呼應(yīng)原文,Ibrokethesilencebyshowingcuriosityabouttheirchildhoodastwins間接表達我的問題，whenmyheartfasttowishthequestiontobe"good"enough呼應(yīng)原文.Astheir storymingledwithlaughterwas inthehall,therecamethequestion"What'syourname?".(encouragingly;gently;angelic;startled;gestured;resounding;racedfast;fascinating;echoing;abruptly)回答完后的害怕.ItwasinthatsplitsecondthatmassivewavesofregretweresentdeepdownmyheartasIpreparedfortheworsttohappen做好最壞的打算.Theprolonged 被拖長的silenceinfinitelymagnified力口居Utheunutterable難以言表的awkwardness,whenIhungmyhead低著頭,waitingforthemercilessteasingto 雨點般落下andprayingtheycouldgoeasyonme不要為難我.(rainuponme)3.1almostburiedmyheadintheplate與場景呼應(yīng)的情緒描寫asasilence enveloped themoment.Thenightmarejustrepeateditself又一次出現(xiàn)andtherewasnorescue沒有解救辦法fromthisembarrassmento(hushed;awkward).1couldclearlyfeel inmystomach七上八下whenthescenario場景ofbeinga笑柄becauseofmystupidnamecamefloodingback.Asyoucouldimagine與讀者互動，Iwouldratherifithappenedagaininthisnewschool與場景呼應(yīng)的情緒描寫！(butterflies;laughingstock;dropout).我完全沒有想像至U,wordsofunexpectedcuriosityandfriendlyadmirationreachedmnears,erasingmy uneaseasIretold呼應(yīng)原文therichhistoryofourfamilyname.(Beyondmywildestimagination;initial).Withthefollowingsilenceamplifying 每一個heartbeat,Iwasyet tofindtherewas絕沒有mercilessteasingwhichIhadpreviouslyexpected,onlycuriousgazesinanticipationofthestoryofitshistory.(eachandevery;stunned;anythingbut)第二段Itookadeepbreathandsaid,"I'mChelseaChowderhead."Aslightclueofdisbelieftravelledthroughtheboys*eyes,which,tomyamazement情節(jié)轉(zhuǎn)折連貫詞,transformedintoanunbelievablecommentI'dneverheardbefore."Socool!AcleverboynamedChowderhead!nWhocouldhaveimagined誰能料至Uitwasmynewfriendswhomyotherwise原本 ego自我意識，whichreally 讓我開心!Afriendshipgenuineenoughwaswhatittook正是???所需要的toturnahorriblequestion呼應(yīng)intoagoodone.Thankstothem,Iwasfeelingsospecialwiththe 如此獨特的lastname.(healed;broken;mademyday;newly-found;ever-so-unique)?優(yōu)秀范文研讀范文欣賞1IaskedClaireifweshouldsitwiththetwins.Shethrewmeayou-must-be-crazylook向我投來個“你一定瘋了”的眼神atoncebutfinally 向??.讓步my 堅持?Aswetookourseat,thetwinswereapparentlyabsorbedintheirconversation,takinglittlenoticeof不在意ourpresence.Suddenly情節(jié)轉(zhuǎn)折連貫詞，I無意中聽至1Jtheywerealsonewcomers.Thatcouldmake成為aquestion!Despite apprehension恐懼，Imanagedtoblurtitout脫口而出JHey,I'manewgirltoo!Isitanyeasiertomakenewfriends找共同點heresinceyouaretwins?”.As ,itworkedlikeacharm像魔法一樣管用thatstarteda conversationuntiltheysuddenlyaskedmemyname.(gaveinto;persistence;overheard;perfect;inner;expected;pleasant)Itookadeepbreathandsaid"I'mChelseaChowderlead"Forcinga 僵硬的smileand calmnessonmyface,!couldfeelclearly dreadofbeingthrowninto 無情的jeering譏諷again."That'sacutename!nItriedtosenseanypossible暗示/痕跡ofteasing嘲笑butno,theyjustmeantwhattheysaid,inafriendlyway.Lookingintothe eyesofthetwins,IsawnolongerashyChowderheadwhowouldn'tevenacceptherownname,butChelseaChowderhead—thegirlwhoredefined重新定義"what'syourname11with"whatyouare”.范文欣賞2范文欣賞2樂意地agreedIaskedClaireifweshouldsitwiththetwins.Sheandwhenweputourlunchboxdownoppositethetwins,myhearthammeredviolentlyagainstribs,withrecollections回憶of自卑樂意地agreedin.”Askgoodquestions/9Dad'ssuggestionsomehow"恢復(fù)my原本tightenedthroat:nHey,wewerecurioushowtotellyouguysapart區(qū)分開來!Tomysurprise轉(zhuǎn)折，thetwowereapparently in明顯被激起???方面的興趣sharingtheirstories,exchanginglooksand調(diào)皮的blinks眨眼witheac